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Hushed Promise

The whistle of an intolerant breeze chills an exchange where silence rips a gurgle of mumbled words, fumbling into the hiss exhaled by reckless dusk. Tears ink a lackluster face as the vitality of the crest mesmerizingly washes and romps with my feet, teasing me gently into thoughts of a hushed promise that now lays dormant upon cracked rocks... when a farewell douses all those memories collected, treasured… now lost in a sudden swhish of cold night air. Secret Poetry Contest for Faraz Ajmal 12/25/2018

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Susan Ashley

Date: 12/30/2018 12:51:00 PM

There is such depth and beauty in your poignant introspection, Nette. Your last three lines speak elegantly of broken secrets promises with pained perfection. Your tender artistry takes me breath away. Warmest wishes my dear friend.. ~Susan

Alexis Y.

Date: 12/30/2018 11:05:00 AM

WoW! Nette, This was well written. It had a nice rhythm and flow. I found it poetic as well.Broken promises bring much heartache. Congratulations on your placement in the contest:-) Alexis

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/29/2018 3:37:00 PM

Oh the pain of a broken heart, well penned, congratulations on your placement!

Faraz Ajmal

Date: 12/29/2018 2:02:00 PM

What can be worse than a broken promise? So many expectations yet none are fulfilled, it was a really deep poem full of emotions and I absolutely love reading it, many congratulations on your wonderful 3rd position in my contest, good luck and have a really nice day

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 12/27/2018 9:11:00 AM

Hi Nette, as always an amazing write, profound and exceptional poetry, good luck in the contest! Love and hugs, Jennifer.

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/26/2018 4:16:00 PM

Ah, sweet with bitter hints of longing, just the way I like them Nette, gl in the contest,

Silent One

Date: 12/26/2018 6:14:00 AM

Very deep and emotive poetry that touches the heart..so many haunting words, that remind us of sadness...

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/25/2018 3:09:00 PM

A story of hushed promise ..dormant on cracked rocks. Elegantly told, nette..Best for a win.

Banjo Casto

Date: 12/25/2018 2:23:00 PM

I am hushed by the tremendous impact of this work. Sometimes, the ones we trust or love do not honor their words, especially shared secrets. Betting on this one.

Norma Arana

Date: 12/25/2018 2:05:00 PM

Eloquent whispering of a poem. Secret promises held tightly only to be broken is painful. A classic!