House

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Written October 5, 2023
For The Contest,
“Halcyon, Heartbroken, House" Words
Sponsor, Constance La France

I used to be a home, but now I'm just a house left all alone. One time, I had a beating heart; alive, with caring love, it shone. Abandoned, now I barely stand from long neglect and clime abuse; weak with a sunken roof and porch- no purpose now, no needed use. And so, I'm left without a heart- a semblance of what used to be. A house can only be a home when filled with love and harmony. My shattered windows now just stare, as seasons come and go each year, recalling happy days of old- when I was once a home, held dear.

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Constance La France

Date: 10/20/2023 12:56:00 PM

Sandra, excellent Personification and congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance

Eve Roper

Date: 10/13/2023 7:22:00 AM

Great personification, Sandra. Congratulations on your win in Constance's contest. Eve

Juliet Ligon

Date: 10/6/2023 7:43:00 AM

This is a clever take on the word "house." It flows nicely and pulls at the heart strings.

Sandra Haight
Date: 10/6/2023 1:40:00 PM

Thank you very much, Juliet, for your uplifting comments! Much appreciated! Sandra

Yann Rolland

Date: 10/5/2023 2:45:00 PM

this is very touching, specially these verses A house can only be a home when filled with love and harmony. thanks for the delicious poem

Sandra Haight
Date: 10/5/2023 2:48:00 PM

Oh, thank you so much, Yann, for your visit and very supportive comment. I am very pleased that it touched you. Sandra