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Amended by two words today..
Little as a mountain can be,
near waters calm and an idling breeze.

Inland wheatfields sun on ears,
expanding 45 gallon cans suppressed echoes hear.

Semi's engine drone all day to the railhead clear,
sweat running on flesh like honeyed tears.

Sweet and fetid the elder scent
canvas hats the horizon swimming and bent

mealy lung invading dryness thick,
creaking timberd floor and a rustling''quick''

then quietude..as a sunbeam falls,
on  wheat shed door and cobwebbed wall.







Copyright © | Year Posted 2011




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Date: 11/13/2015 11:00:00 AM
read it
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Date: 2/21/2013 11:42:00 PM
yes, Joe, I was thinking of boys this week!!! Blame it on those fool contests. hahaha.
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Date: 5/10/2012 8:02:00 AM
Hey Joe! You paint sections of a panorama on each line, Joe. They are amplified by sound.."creaking timbered floors", "engine drone"....then lastly, "quietude", zeroing in on "sunbeam falls" and the "cobwebbed wall".:) Visual, accompanied by sounds and smellsl. Brings this panorama to life! Hope all's well with you and yours! Love, Mikki
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Date: 11/4/2011 9:01:00 PM
I can feel the heat and your descriptions are so unique. The last line brings me to the barn where that cobweb is. I like to be able to see what's going on and you sure do that.
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Date: 3/31/2011 6:05:00 AM
great write, well penned!! enjoyed reading this today.
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Date: 3/11/2011 8:25:00 AM
Soup Mail!!!!!
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Date: 3/7/2011 3:21:00 PM
a wonderful poem, my fav is that last two lines, lovely~~
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Date: 3/7/2011 12:45:00 PM
You've taken us right into summer with all these perfect images of those hot sticky days, Joe. And thanks for the best wishes with those rhyming comments on "Fall Memories" '..still in the race although nut mad and dense' : ) Always, Audrey
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Date: 3/6/2011 1:49:00 PM
beautifully worded expressions on hot slow days with apt images ... muly lung invading dryness thick...Joe
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Date: 3/6/2011 1:03:00 PM
Giving 1st to all entries has been done before .. or 1st to the ones u deem best .. as u judge Joe... so not impossible at all luv.. and for a special person like Dr. Ram.. might be something to ponder for placement time..if u need any help with the contest just let me know .."Sweetheart" will be happy to guide u through Joe..
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Date: 3/6/2011 9:23:00 AM
WOW Joe u have aroused our senses with this dynamic write luv.. expressive visuals encompass every line luv... especially enjoyed the Semi's engine all day hear ..sweat running on flesh like honeyed tears.. as my second hubby was a trucker and we rode the road for three years and I luved it so much.. adventures amazing... good luck with your first contest too Joe which I am going to check out now..
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Date: 3/6/2011 8:39:00 AM
Such a terrific description of the "hot slow days," Joe. Many great images and the last couplet is positively awesome! Nice work! Love, Carolyn
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Date: 3/6/2011 7:25:00 AM
This was a very down to earth write about ordinary things and happening in life but was at the end so relaxing and I could feel the spirit of the author..Enjoyed reading this morn..This is one for my favs...Your review of my work "The Swarming Bees" was very uplifting..That was a happening in my life at around seventeen years old..My brother's stepson was home visiting from his tour of duty in the Navy...He saw the bees heading straight for me..He grabbed me and pulled in down in the ditch..Sara
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Date: 3/5/2011 10:15:00 PM
oh, GOOD I see something very cool here. soupmail!! (and love the poem too)
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Date: 3/5/2011 6:09:00 PM
beautiful expressions... sweet and fetid the elder scent...Joe..And thank you for the compliments you paid to me thro' your contest .. I am really overwhelmed by your love and feelings
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Date: 3/5/2011 12:55:00 PM
Wow Ok that one is great. Good write and now yours is the best one today. I love it when a poem comes together such as this one. Great Job
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