Richard Lamoureux Poet Terzanelle

Hoplessness Beyond Hope

I wonder what Entity brought me here
Feeling all alone in this great darkness
I am sinking, overwhelmed with such fear

Is there any hope for me to harness?
Caged inside a place that shouldn't exist
Feeling all alone in this great darkness

Will you remove these shackles from my wrists?
Here I am trapped, wanting to be set free
Caged inside a place that shouldn't exist

Please don't see me as the enemy
Do not remain deaf to my suffering
Here I am trapped, wanting to be set free

I feel like I am endlessly falling
Can it be I have used up my last chance?
Do not remain deaf to my suffering?


Is that your light I see in the distance?
I wonder what Entity brought me here?
Can it be I have used up my last chance?
I am sinking, overwhelmed with such fear

Craig Cornish's Hope Contest

November 14/2012
Trying out a new style, hopefully got it right.

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Casarah Nance August 5, 2014 at 8:45 PM Wow, that is amazing, I love it!!

Eileen Manassian September 3, 2013 at 4:02 AM You first terzanelle....and the magic starts....Congrats on your win, you amaze.... Richard Lamoureux September 3, 2013 at 7:52 AM Thanks Eileen, this feels like so long ago.

Carol Sunshine Brown November 30, 2012 at 6:42 AM Congratulations on your win in Craig's "Hope" contest Richard. Love, Carol Richard Lamoureux November 30, 2012 at 7:18 AM Thanks Carol

Len Gasun November 22, 2012 at 5:09 AM Congratulations on your win, Richard! love/hugs, LG Richard Lamoureux November 22, 2012 at 7:24 AM Thanks Leonora

Seren Roberts November 22, 2012 at 3:15 AM Congrats Richard ...Seren Richard Lamoureux November 22, 2012 at 7:24 AM Thanks Seren

Andrea Dietrich November 19, 2012 at 9:34 PM wow, I love this one. The title is similar to one I was considering as I thought how to write for this contest in the beginning.But I ended up with a slightly different take. Hopelessness sure came to my mind first. Wonder what that shows about me. haha. (and you too) Congrats on your well deserved win. Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 11:03 PM Thanks Andrea

Poet Destroyer A November 19, 2012 at 2:54 PM Richard,.. congratulations with your wonderful win in Craig's contest... always~ PD Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 11:04 PM Thanks, what happened to the photo?

Len Gasun November 19, 2012 at 9:38 AM Great write! Congratulations on your win, Richard! hugs, LG Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 9:39 AM Thanks Leonora, appreciate the visit.

Heather Ober November 19, 2012 at 7:32 AM Very nice write, Richard! Really great job, especially for your first time using this form. Congratulations :) Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 7:46 AM Thanks heather.

Modupe Sefunmi November 19, 2012 at 6:08 AM Lovely write Richard! Congrats on your win! Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 7:46 AM Thanks Modupe.

Debbie Guzzi November 18, 2012 at 6:49 PM So finely polished, excellent! Congrad's on your win in this difficult contest. Light & Love Richard Lamoureux November 19, 2012 at 7:48 AM I was very surprised. Thanks again for your help in understanding this form.

Sara Kendrick November 18, 2012 at 6:13 PM Great work..Enjoyed reading your winning entry..Congrats..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 18, 2012 at 5:27 PM CONGRATS RICHARD ON A MAGNIFICENT WRITE ON HOPE AND A GREAT WIN TOO LUV .. Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:44 PM Thanks Linda. Well done for your Number one place.

Brittany Reynolds November 18, 2012 at 3:26 PM It is a difficult style. I think you did well, and apparently, so did Craig. Congrads. Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:45 PM Thanks Brittany, a real complement coming from a talented writer like yourself.

Joseph May November 18, 2012 at 3:22 PM congrats on a great win Richard Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:46 PM Thanks Joseph you as well.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl November 18, 2012 at 12:56 PM Congratulations Richard, well done this was a hard one xx Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:47 PM I agree, better results than I expected with my first awkward attempt. Thanks so much for commenting.

Vicky Tsiluma November 18, 2012 at 12:40 PM Hey Richard!Told you you did great. A big Congrats on your win! Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:50 PM Thanks, no one is more surprised than I am. Hugs, rick

Sharon Smith November 18, 2012 at 12:16 PM Well done! Richard Lamoureux November 18, 2012 at 5:50 PM Thanks sharon

Yanny Widjanarko November 17, 2012 at 9:57 AM This is so touching and I am speechless, good luck for the contest :D Richard Lamoureux November 17, 2012 at 10:10 AM Thanks Yanny, I appreciate you coming back to visit.

Debbie Guzzi November 16, 2012 at 7:51 AM You did real well..check the last 4 lines which pattern did you want f/a/F/A? Richard Lamoureux November 16, 2012 at 8:20 AM Thanks again, I modified the last stanza. Check out my new poem Inspiration. My second attempt.

Vicky Tsiluma November 15, 2012 at 10:02 PM This is amazing Richard! It flows so well. It's interesting how poets incorporate their own voice into the writing, it is a hard task. Very well done! Richard Lamoureux November 16, 2012 at 7:08 AM Thanks Vicky, this one took a bit of work but with the help of a few friends I got the hang of a new style. I left home early so never received an education in writing poetry. Coming to this community is expanding my knowledge.

Debbie Guzzi November 15, 2012 at 5:38 PM New poet friend you have the rhyme pattern off this is a tricky one [aBA or ABA, bCB, cDC, dED, eFE, then faFA or fFaA.] # your lines it helps line 2 which is the first 'b' so its REPEATED as shown by the capital B MUST be repeated in its entirety as line 6, line 2 must rhyme with line 4...I will try to soup mail you. Light & Love Richard Lamoureux November 15, 2012 at 6:34 PM Have another look, hopefuly now I have it right. Thanks for making me aware of what I did not know. Appreciated. Alway happy to receive Light and Love.

Jon A Cavanaugh November 15, 2012 at 7:19 AM Very good! you did well. good luck in the contest. Richard Lamoureux November 15, 2012 at 7:41 AM Thanks Jon, felt a bit awkward for me but it made me have to stretch myself.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart November 14, 2012 at 9:24 PM RICHARD ..A PHENOMENAL PIECE SO VIVID AND INTENSE LUV .. WINNING WISHES TO U .. MANY WONDER SAME THINGS AS YOUR LINES REVEAL .. SO GLA MY POEM RECREATED YOUR OWN JOURNEY TO ITALY .. WE LUV LIVING THERE 6 MONTHS A YEAR .. Richard Lamoureux November 14, 2012 at 9:49 PM My favorite location is the Amalfi Coast. I am very jealous of you. Thanks so much for dropping by to read my poems.

Poet Destroyer A November 14, 2012 at 7:46 PM Richard, i feel no material can explain all that exist in this universe. Hopelessness is a weak emotion, in which can always be overpowered by the freedom we find when we seek out and follow the lord. Good luck in the contest...always~pd Richard Lamoureux November 14, 2012 at 9:58 PM Certainly beyond our limited understanding but no reason to stop trying. As always thanks for commenting Linda. Have a good night. PS don't worry I am not depressed, just being creative.

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