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Hoplessness Beyond Hope

I wonder what Entity brought me here Feeling all alone in this great darkness I am sinking, overwhelmed with such fear Is there any hope for me to harness? Caged inside a place that shouldn't exist Feeling all alone in this great darkness Will you remove these shackles from my wrists? Here I am trapped, wanting to be set free Caged inside a place that shouldn't exist Please don't see me as the enemy Do not remain deaf to my suffering Here I am trapped, wanting to be set free I feel like I am endlessly falling Can it be I have used up my last chance? Do not remain deaf to my suffering? Is that your light I see in the distance? I wonder what Entity brought me here? Can it be I have used up my last chance? I am sinking, overwhelmed with such fear Craig Cornish's Hope Contest November 14/2012 Trying out a new style, hopefully got it right.

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Casarah Nance

Date: 8/5/2014 8:45:00 PM

Wow, that is amazing, I love it!!

Eileen Manassian

Date: 9/3/2013 4:02:00 AM

You first terzanelle....and the magic starts....Congrats on your win, you amaze....

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 9/3/2013 7:52:00 AM

Thanks Eileen, this feels like so long ago.

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 11/30/2012 6:42:00 AM

Congratulations on your win in Craig's "Hope" contest Richard. Love, Carol

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/30/2012 7:18:00 AM

Thanks Carol

Len Gasun

Date: 11/22/2012 5:09:00 AM

Congratulations on your win, Richard! love/hugs, LG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/22/2012 7:24:00 AM

Thanks Leonora

Seren Roberts

Date: 11/22/2012 3:15:00 AM

Congrats Richard ...Seren

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/22/2012 7:24:00 AM

Thanks Seren

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 11/19/2012 9:34:00 PM

wow, I love this one. The title is similar to one I was considering as I thought how to write for this contest in the beginning.But I ended up with a slightly different take. Hopelessness sure came to my mind first. Wonder what that shows about me. haha. (and you too) Congrats on your well deserved win.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 11:03:00 PM

Thanks Andrea

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/19/2012 2:54:00 PM

Richard,.. congratulations with your wonderful win in Craig's contest... always~ PD

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 11:04:00 PM

Thanks, what happened to the photo?

Len Gasun

Date: 11/19/2012 9:38:00 AM

Great write! Congratulations on your win, Richard! hugs, LG

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 9:39:00 AM

Thanks Leonora, appreciate the visit.

Heather Ober

Date: 11/19/2012 7:32:00 AM

Very nice write, Richard! Really great job, especially for your first time using this form. Congratulations :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 7:46:00 AM

Thanks heather.

Modupe Sefunmi

Date: 11/19/2012 6:08:00 AM

Lovely write Richard! Congrats on your win!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 7:46:00 AM

Thanks Modupe.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/18/2012 6:49:00 PM

So finely polished, excellent! Congrad's on your win in this difficult contest. Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/19/2012 7:48:00 AM

I was very surprised. Thanks again for your help in understanding this form.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 11/18/2012 6:13:00 PM

Great work..Enjoyed reading your winning entry..Congrats..Sara

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/18/2012 5:27:00 PM

CONGRATS RICHARD ON A MAGNIFICENT WRITE ON HOPE AND A GREAT WIN TOO LUV ..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:44:00 PM

Thanks Linda. Well done for your Number one place.

Brittany Reynolds

Date: 11/18/2012 3:26:00 PM

It is a difficult style. I think you did well, and apparently, so did Craig. Congrads.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:45:00 PM

Thanks Brittany, a real complement coming from a talented writer like yourself.

Joseph May

Date: 11/18/2012 3:22:00 PM

congrats on a great win Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:46:00 PM

Thanks Joseph you as well.

Mandy Tams The Golden Girl

Date: 11/18/2012 12:56:00 PM

Congratulations Richard, well done this was a hard one xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:47:00 PM

I agree, better results than I expected with my first awkward attempt. Thanks so much for commenting.

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 11/18/2012 12:40:00 PM

Hey Richard!Told you you did great. A big Congrats on your win!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:50:00 PM

Thanks, no one is more surprised than I am. Hugs, rick

Sharon Smith

Date: 11/18/2012 12:16:00 PM

Well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/18/2012 5:50:00 PM

Thanks sharon

Yanny Widjanarko

Date: 11/17/2012 9:57:00 AM

This is so touching and I am speechless, good luck for the contest :D

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/17/2012 10:10:00 AM

Thanks Yanny, I appreciate you coming back to visit.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/16/2012 7:51:00 AM

You did real well..check the last 4 lines which pattern did you want f/a/F/A?

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2012 8:20:00 AM

Thanks again, I modified the last stanza. Check out my new poem Inspiration. My second attempt.

Vicky Tsiluma

Date: 11/15/2012 10:02:00 PM

This is amazing Richard! It flows so well. It's interesting how poets incorporate their own voice into the writing, it is a hard task. Very well done!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/16/2012 7:08:00 AM

Thanks Vicky, this one took a bit of work but with the help of a few friends I got the hang of a new style. I left home early so never received an education in writing poetry. Coming to this community is expanding my knowledge.

Debbie Guzzi

Date: 11/15/2012 5:38:00 PM

New poet friend you have the rhyme pattern off this is a tricky one [aBA or ABA, bCB, cDC, dED, eFE, then faFA or fFaA.] # your lines it helps line 2 which is the first 'b' so its REPEATED as shown by the capital B MUST be repeated in its entirety as line 6, line 2 must rhyme with line 4...I will try to soup mail you. Light & Love

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2012 6:34:00 PM

Have another look, hopefuly now I have it right. Thanks for making me aware of what I did not know. Appreciated. Alway happy to receive Light and Love.

Jon A Cavanaugh

Date: 11/15/2012 7:19:00 AM

Very good! you did well. good luck in the contest.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/15/2012 7:41:00 AM

Thanks Jon, felt a bit awkward for me but it made me have to stretch myself.

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 11/14/2012 9:24:00 PM

RICHARD ..A PHENOMENAL PIECE SO VIVID AND INTENSE LUV .. WINNING WISHES TO U .. MANY WONDER SAME THINGS AS YOUR LINES REVEAL .. SO GLA MY POEM RECREATED YOUR OWN JOURNEY TO ITALY .. WE LUV LIVING THERE 6 MONTHS A YEAR ..

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/14/2012 9:49:00 PM

My favorite location is the Amalfi Coast. I am very jealous of you. Thanks so much for dropping by to read my poems.

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 11/14/2012 7:46:00 PM

Richard, i feel no material can explain all that exist in this universe. Hopelessness is a weak emotion, in which can always be overpowered by the freedom we find when we seek out and follow the lord. Good luck in the contest...always~pd

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 11/14/2012 9:58:00 PM

Certainly beyond our limited understanding but no reason to stop trying. As always thanks for commenting Linda. Have a good night. PS don't worry I am not depressed, just being creative.