Jan Allison Poet Dramatic Verse

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Hit and Run

EMOTIVE WRITE

I never had the chance to meet my Mummy
She was killed in an accident … they couldn’t save her
Hit and run that’s what Daddy says
Daddy cries when he talks to me about her

I never had the chance to meet my Mummy
She died from her injuries
The doctors did an operation and saved me
Daddy cries when he talks to me about her

I never had the chance to meet my Mummy
Daddy shows me lots of photographs of her
He says that I am beautiful like she was
Daddy cries when he talks to me about her

Every day Daddy takes me to visit Mummy
He said she is asleep with the angels
I wish I could cuddle Mummy in her bed
Daddy cries when he talks to me about her

Words Drowned in tears contest
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Constance La France October 24, 2016 at 6:26 PM Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional write, I asked for sad and you gave me very sad

Darren White October 24, 2016 at 1:19 AM Coming back with congratulations and hugs, Jan :)

Anu Nayak October 23, 2016 at 11:41 PM Dear Jan, reading this poem with teary eyes....oh...loss of mother...so sad....I am speechless.....this contest poems ......one after another...are making me cry here...love and hugs, Anu:)

Agnes Krampe October 23, 2016 at 7:16 PM Beautiful, Jan. And very sad. And I have a hard time reading this contest's winning poems because it is just too much.

Eve Roper October 23, 2016 at 6:20 PM Very good verse Jan, :"( Hugs Eve Jan Allison October 23, 2016 at 6:24 PM Thanks Eve its quite a tear jerker:-( hugs jan xx

Phillip Garcia October 23, 2016 at 3:51 PM I echo Adam's comment. Such moving lines. I think our lovely sponsor owes us all a hug for this one - I've been teary eyed the last hour reading these. Yours is hauntingly gorgeous Jan - can we go back to slinging poo now? Phillip Garcia October 23, 2016 at 10:04 PM Make sure you wash those poop hands first before tossing hugs around Jan! Jan Allison October 23, 2016 at 6:24 PM I had to stop reading the poems Phillip I will have to go back to them one day but they were making me feel so emotional - Adams poem - oh its heartbreaking. I will keep writing poop - never fear Jan is hear lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven October 19, 2016 at 4:31 PM Hi Jan, Constance wanted sad and you have surely come through with this excellent write. This one should do well Jan. You write so well on such a sad subject. This write touches the heart with such sadness. It paints such pictures on the canvas of mind and the tears do fall freely. It is good to be able to feel the depth of emotion from the write. This is a definite fav and a seven. Hugs....Mike. XX Jan Allison October 19, 2016 at 5:52 PM Thanks Mike I think Constance's sad style is rubbing off on me I have no idea what my muse is going to come up with!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus October 19, 2016 at 10:34 AM This is very emotive...such a sad and touching subject, and the memory will never fade...the wound too deep to heal. No wonder words drown in tears! Hugs // paul Jan Allison October 19, 2016 at 3:28 PM Constance wanted sad and I Hope she likes this :-)hugs Jan xx

White Wolf October 18, 2016 at 9:14 PM That's so sad Jan! Well written, but sad as! /|\ Jan Allison October 19, 2016 at 5:20 AM Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Freddie Robinson Jr. October 18, 2016 at 8:16 PM A very heart-wrenching, powerful poem, Jan. It made me so sad for the father and child. Beautifully expressed by you. Very touching. Ty for sharing this w/us. Much love to you. Jan Allison October 19, 2016 at 5:20 AM It's a heartbreaking scenario Freddie:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y. October 18, 2016 at 6:59 PM Hi Jan, This is such a sad and heartbreaking story. It brought tears to my eyes. You picked the perfect quote to go with your well written piece. I wish you the best of luck in the contest- Alexis Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:02 PM Thanks Alexis I think Constance will need her tissues for these poems:-( hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton October 18, 2016 at 5:39 PM So sad! Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 5:54 PM It is a heartbreaking poem John:-( hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich October 18, 2016 at 3:30 PM Loved how you did it from the child's point of view!! Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 3:35 PM Thanks Andrea I was unsure if it would work, but from the comments I've had I think I did a good job:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich October 18, 2016 at 3:30 PM yes, Jan, this is very emotive. Exactly what the "crying" doctors order!! Constance should really love it, my friend. oh, this one is so hard for me to even think of an idea!!! Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 3:42 PM :-) I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell October 18, 2016 at 11:24 AM fancy doing this to poor broken wings poor girl will be blubbering , stephen deffo a tear jerker Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 11:40 AM She asked for sad I think from the comments I've received I've delivered:-) hugs Jan xx

Paloma P October 18, 2016 at 9:59 AM You own my tears right now Jan. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 11:41 AM Thanks Paloma I have achieved what I set out to do:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne October 18, 2016 at 8:36 AM A very emotive touching write. An absolute fav! Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 9:15 AM Thanks Armand:-) it is a difficult subject to write about I never know what my muse will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis October 18, 2016 at 8:23 AM The epitome of pain and devastation caused by the untimely death of the most beloved person: A wife and a mother! Superb writing! A seven dearest, Jan! Good luck! Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 9:15 AM Thanks so much Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx

Miraj Raha October 18, 2016 at 7:53 AM My goodness!!!! Such pain is even hard to fathom,let alone live with it. horribly poignant Jan. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 9:16 AM Thanks so much Miraj:-) hugs Jan xx

Charmaine Chircop October 18, 2016 at 7:24 AM Very emotive..Heart-wrenching indeed. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:30 AM It doesn't bear thinking about does it so heart breaking:-( hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith October 18, 2016 at 7:20 AM So sad but beautifully written Jan. It breaks my heart. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:29 AM Thanks Tim:-) 7 comments in 24 minutes of posting - that is a record for me!!!:-) hugs Jan xx

Darren White October 18, 2016 at 7:11 AM This is such a sad poem, Jan... I feel it inside of me. Good luck in the contest. HUGS, D. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:15 AM Thanks Darren it really is a heartbreaker:-) hugs jan xx

Abdullah Alhemaidy October 18, 2016 at 7:11 AM Deep sadness. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:11 AM Thank you Abdullah it is an emotive piece:-( hugs Jan xx

Barry Stebbings October 18, 2016 at 7:07 AM That must be one of the saddest poems I have read, Jan. Unfortunately it happens. Good luck in the contest. Barry. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:09 AM Thanks Barry:-) Constance wanted sad I think from your comment I have achieved that:-) hugs Jan xx

Heidi Sands October 18, 2016 at 7:04 AM Oh my word, Jan. This brought tears to my eyes. I love it. Jan Allison October 18, 2016 at 7:08 AM Thanks Heidi, I hope Constance likes it too:-) hugs Jan xx