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EMOTIVE WRITE I never had the chance to meet my Mummy She was killed in an accident … they couldn’t save her Hit and run that’s what Daddy says Daddy cries when he talks to me about her I never had the chance to meet my Mummy She died from her injuries The doctors did an operation and saved me Daddy cries when he talks to me about her I never had the chance to meet my Mummy Daddy shows me lots of photographs of her He says that I am beautiful like she was Daddy cries when he talks to me about her Every day Daddy takes me to visit Mummy He said she is asleep with the angels I wish I could cuddle Mummy in her bed Daddy cries when he talks to me about her Words Drowned in tears contest Sponsored by Broken Wings 10~18~16

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Constance La France

Date: 10/24/2016 6:26:00 PM

Jan congratulations on your win in my contest with this emotional write, I asked for sad and you gave me very sad

Darren White

Date: 10/24/2016 1:19:00 AM

Coming back with congratulations and hugs, Jan :)

Anu Nayak

Date: 10/23/2016 11:41:00 PM

Dear Jan, reading this poem with teary eyes....oh...loss of mother...so sad....I am speechless.....this contest poems ......one after another...are making me cry here...love and hugs, Anu:)

Agnes Krampe

Date: 10/23/2016 7:16:00 PM

Beautiful, Jan. And very sad. And I have a hard time reading this contest's winning poems because it is just too much.

Eve Roper

Date: 10/23/2016 6:20:00 PM

Very good verse Jan, :"( Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2016 6:24:00 PM

Thanks Eve its quite a tear jerker:-( hugs jan xx

Phillip Garcia

Date: 10/23/2016 3:51:00 PM

I echo Adam's comment. Such moving lines. I think our lovely sponsor owes us all a hug for this one - I've been teary eyed the last hour reading these. Yours is hauntingly gorgeous Jan - can we go back to slinging poo now?

Phillip Garcia
Date: 10/23/2016 10:04:00 PM

Make sure you wash those poop hands first before tossing hugs around Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/23/2016 6:24:00 PM

I had to stop reading the poems Phillip I will have to go back to them one day but they were making me feel so emotional - Adams poem - oh its heartbreaking. I will keep writing poop - never fear Jan is hear lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Vladislav Raven

Date: 10/19/2016 4:31:00 PM

Hi Jan, Constance wanted sad and you have surely come through with this excellent write. This one should do well Jan. You write so well on such a sad subject. This write touches the heart with such sadness. It paints such pictures on the canvas of mind and the tears do fall freely. It is good to be able to feel the depth of emotion from the write. This is a definite fav and a seven. Hugs....Mike. XX

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2016 5:52:00 PM

Thanks Mike I think Constance's sad style is rubbing off on me I have no idea what my muse is going to come up with!:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 10/19/2016 10:34:00 AM

This is very emotive...such a sad and touching subject, and the memory will never fade...the wound too deep to heal. No wonder words drown in tears! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2016 3:28:00 PM

Constance wanted sad and I Hope she likes this :-)hugs Jan xx

White Wolf

Date: 10/18/2016 9:14:00 PM

That's so sad Jan! Well written, but sad as! /|\

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2016 5:20:00 AM

Thanks Rick:-) hugs Jan xx

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 10/18/2016 8:16:00 PM

A very heart-wrenching, powerful poem, Jan. It made me so sad for the father and child. Beautifully expressed by you. Very touching. Ty for sharing this w/us. Much love to you.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/19/2016 5:20:00 AM

It's a heartbreaking scenario Freddie:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

Date: 10/18/2016 6:59:00 PM

Hi Jan, This is such a sad and heartbreaking story. It brought tears to my eyes. You picked the perfect quote to go with your well written piece. I wish you the best of luck in the contest- Alexis

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 7:02:00 PM

Thanks Alexis I think Constance will need her tissues for these poems:-( hugs Jan xx

John Hamilton

Date: 10/18/2016 5:39:00 PM

So sad!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 5:54:00 PM

It is a heartbreaking poem John:-( hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2016 3:30:00 PM

Loved how you did it from the child's point of view!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 3:35:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I was unsure if it would work, but from the comments I've had I think I did a good job:-):-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/18/2016 3:30:00 PM

yes, Jan, this is very emotive. Exactly what the "crying" doctors order!! Constance should really love it, my friend. oh, this one is so hard for me to even think of an idea!!!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 3:42:00 PM

:-) I hope Constance likes it:-) hugs Jan xx

Stephen Pennell

Date: 10/18/2016 11:24:00 AM

fancy doing this to poor broken wings poor girl will be blubbering , stephen deffo a tear jerker

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 11:40:00 AM

She asked for sad I think from the comments I've received I've delivered:-) hugs Jan xx

Paloma P

Date: 10/18/2016 9:59:00 AM

You own my tears right now Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 11:41:00 AM

Thanks Paloma I have achieved what I set out to do:-) hugs Jan xx

Maurice Yvonne

Date: 10/18/2016 8:36:00 AM

A very emotive touching write. An absolute fav!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 9:15:00 AM

Thanks Armand:-) it is a difficult subject to write about I never know what my muse will come up with:-) hugs Jan xx

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 10/18/2016 8:23:00 AM

The epitome of pain and devastation caused by the untimely death of the most beloved person: A wife and a mother! Superb writing! A seven dearest, Jan! Good luck!

Jan Allison
Date: 10/18/2016 9:15:00 AM

Thanks so much Demetrios:-) hugs Jan xx