Laura Leiser Poet Tanka

Her Last Footsteps

small and frail, she labors

                                          over the sand

                                       touching the ocean

                                feeling the breeze one last time

                                 before waves of death claim her



Written on 3/16/2015

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Poet Destroyer A March 29, 2015 at 9:55 PM LAURA, once again thanks for the nice reply to my comment......PD Laura Leiser March 29, 2015 at 11:04 PM Thanks, again, Linda! You are too kind :)

Paul Callus March 24, 2015 at 10:42 AM I am pleased to come back with congratulations, Laura! To me it was a winner from the start:) // paul Laura Leiser March 29, 2015 at 11:03 PM Thank you, Paul. I appreciate your kindness :)

Poet Destroyer A March 22, 2015 at 1:57 PM LAURA, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~ Laura Leiser March 22, 2015 at 6:06 PM Thank you, Linda! Your kind comments have been very encouraging to me! :)

Andrea Dietrich March 21, 2015 at 9:34 PM I enjoyed your tanka, Laura. It is like a little story that we cannot know the details of but it is intriguing nonetheless. Congrats in my contest. Laura Leiser March 22, 2015 at 6:05 PM Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate you choosing my poem in your latest contest :)

Viv Wigley March 19, 2015 at 12:52 AM The double interpretation of 'waves of death' in this location is very clever. Small and frail- who was she? How old? Old at all? Just frail? So many questions in just five lines that leaves one moved, also. The sign of a great little poem. Superb work, Lisa. I will put my ropes on and abseil through your back catalogue. Viv Laura Leiser March 19, 2015 at 2:10 PM Thank you, Viv! It's kind of a challenge condensing thoughts and ideas into just a few words. I appreciate your encouraging comments. Btw, I love your "cowboy" poetry style, and want to try it myself sometime :)

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders March 18, 2015 at 11:49 PM Amazing, Laura, but oh so, so sad...best wishes and hugs, Rhonda Laura Leiser March 19, 2015 at 2:09 PM Thank you, Rhonda. I appreciate you taking the time to comment on my poetry! :)

Abdelwaheb Dhaou March 18, 2015 at 1:32 PM Awesome piece though stained with a sad background which is perhaps necessary to trigger hidden emotions ! Bravo Laura Leiser ! Laura Leiser March 18, 2015 at 4:14 PM Thank you for your kind comments, Andelwaheb. I did want to strike a chord and convey the sadness of it all.

Richard Lamoureux March 18, 2015 at 8:36 AM This is a haunting piece. Very well and sadly expressed. Laura Leiser March 18, 2015 at 4:12 PM Thanks, Richard. I appreciate you taking the time to comment :)

Sandra Haight March 17, 2015 at 7:35 PM Wow...Laura, very powerful imagery...the twist in the last two lines gave me goosebumps. This should do very well in the contest. Laura Leiser March 17, 2015 at 11:05 PM Thank you, Sandra. I was trying for that effect, a sad poem, indeed. Thanks for your comment.

Paul Callus March 17, 2015 at 5:02 PM Lovely, and yet so sad, Laura! Looks like a winner to me. // paul Laura Leiser March 17, 2015 at 6:13 PM Thanks, Paul, for taking the time to comment. I appreciate it!

Jan Allison March 17, 2015 at 2:48 AM beautiful but so sad - reminds me of a lady here who was diagnosed with cancer for a second time - she walked into the sea on evening - was never seen again:-( Hugs jan xx 7 xx good luck in the contest Laura Leiser March 17, 2015 at 9:53 AM That is sad, Jan. Thanks for commenting.