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Her Last Footsteps

small and frail, she labors over the sand touching the ocean feeling the breeze one last time before waves of death claim her Written on 3/16/2015

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/29/2015 9:55:00 PM

LAURA, once again thanks for the nice reply to my comment......PD

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/29/2015 11:04:00 PM

Thanks, again, Linda! You are too kind :)

Paul Callus

Date: 3/24/2015 10:42:00 AM

I am pleased to come back with congratulations, Laura! To me it was a winner from the start:) // paul

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/29/2015 11:03:00 PM

Thank you, Paul. I appreciate your kindness :)

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/22/2015 1:57:00 PM

LAURA, Congratulations on your awesome TANKA 2 win Always & Forever <3 Luv ~LINDA~

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/22/2015 6:06:00 PM

Thank you, Linda! Your kind comments have been very encouraging to me! :)

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2015 9:34:00 PM

I enjoyed your tanka, Laura. It is like a little story that we cannot know the details of but it is intriguing nonetheless. Congrats in my contest.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/22/2015 6:05:00 PM

Thank you, Andrea. I appreciate you choosing my poem in your latest contest :)

Viv Wigley

Date: 3/19/2015 12:52:00 AM

The double interpretation of 'waves of death' in this location is very clever. Small and frail- who was she? How old? Old at all? Just frail? So many questions in just five lines that leaves one moved, also. The sign of a great little poem. Superb work, Lisa. I will put my ropes on and abseil through your back catalogue. Viv

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2015 2:10:00 PM

Thank you, Viv! It's kind of a challenge condensing thoughts and ideas into just a few words. I appreciate your encouraging comments. Btw, I love your "cowboy" poetry style, and want to try it myself sometime :)

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 3/18/2015 11:49:00 PM

Amazing, Laura, but oh so, so sad...best wishes and hugs, Rhonda

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/19/2015 2:09:00 PM

Thank you, Rhonda. I appreciate you taking the time to comment on my poetry! :)

Abdelwaheb Dhaou

Date: 3/18/2015 1:32:00 PM

Awesome piece though stained with a sad background which is perhaps necessary to trigger hidden emotions ! Bravo Laura Leiser !

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/18/2015 4:14:00 PM

Thank you for your kind comments, Andelwaheb. I did want to strike a chord and convey the sadness of it all.

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/18/2015 8:36:00 AM

This is a haunting piece. Very well and sadly expressed.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/18/2015 4:12:00 PM

Thanks, Richard. I appreciate you taking the time to comment :)

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/17/2015 7:35:00 PM

Wow...Laura, very powerful imagery...the twist in the last two lines gave me goosebumps. This should do very well in the contest.

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/17/2015 11:05:00 PM

Thank you, Sandra. I was trying for that effect, a sad poem, indeed. Thanks for your comment.

Paul Callus

Date: 3/17/2015 5:02:00 PM

Lovely, and yet so sad, Laura! Looks like a winner to me. // paul

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/17/2015 6:13:00 PM

Thanks, Paul, for taking the time to comment. I appreciate it!

Jan Allison

Date: 3/17/2015 2:48:00 AM

beautiful but so sad - reminds me of a lady here who was diagnosed with cancer for a second time - she walked into the sea on evening - was never seen again:-( Hugs jan xx 7 xx good luck in the contest

Laura Leiser
Date: 3/17/2015 9:53:00 AM

That is sad, Jan. Thanks for commenting.