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Her Blue Eyes

One weak cry, the sound of life beneath collapsed brick All hands rushing in joint rescue Muscle, bone, blood and tears combine in forceful purpose Until the last line of faded light reveals a broken cradle; her blue eyes look out. 1/3/19 for Writing Challenge January 2019 contest sponsor: Dear Heart I used the syllable counter on PoetrySoup's website

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Date: 1/13/2019 10:32:00 AM
Michelle, congratulations on your win in my contest with this splendid Fibonacci~
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Date: 1/13/2019 8:26:00 AM
- Congratulations Michelle, on a great win in the contest "Fibonacci" - Have a lovely Sunday :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Date: 1/12/2019 5:12:00 PM
Congratulations on your wonderful win in the Fibonacci contest, Michelle - blessings to you and yours, and keep writing, my friend! :-) <3
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Date: 1/12/2019 1:53:00 PM
Hi Michelle, This so sad yet well written. Congrats on your placement in the contest. It was well deserved- Alexis
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Date: 1/12/2019 1:18:00 PM
Very touching, Michelle. Congrats on your win.
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Date: 1/6/2019 9:20:00 PM
As bone-crushing as can be. Great entry for the contest, Michelle. Searingly depicted. Best wishes, Gershon
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Date: 1/3/2019 5:33:00 PM
Muscle, bone, blood and tears combine in forceful purpose— heroes. Amazing the energy and tension in this short piece.
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/5/2019 7:24:00 PM
Thank you, P.S, for your encouraging comment!
Date: 1/3/2019 3:48:00 PM
Aww...this is beyond sad...the imagery so strong it breaks the heart!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/5/2019 7:23:00 PM
Thank you, Kim, appreciate your support-
Date: 1/3/2019 2:50:00 PM
this one is heart wrenching. It is just the kind of poetry Constance should like! I sure do!
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Michelle Faulkner
Date: 1/3/2019 2:55:00 PM
Thank you for your comment, Andrea!

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