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Kids bullied him; he did not have one friend, and hollow were his teachers’ words to him. Perpetual anxiety can bend the troubled mind; his thoughts grew more than grim. They mushroomed, and they spiraled next into sick fantasties – a strange kaleidoscope of wicked things that he was going to do, for no one saw or tried to help him cope. One day he showed up, but not just with one of his dad’s guns. Cacophony he brought as peers, chaotic, all began to run. There reigned hysteria as students sought safe havens! As he chased some down the stairs, he grinned, “Now MY Apocalypse is theirs.” Sept. 25, 2017 For John Hamilton's Eight word challenge -4 Poetry Contest THESE 8 WORDS used: HYSTERIA KALEIDOSCOPE PERPETUAL CHAOTIC CACOPHONY APOCALYPSE SPIRALED HOLLOW

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Date: 10/8/2017 11:00:00 AM
A deep, rather disturbing poem Andrea. Well written. You asked about poems of mine, I found these three that I don't think you've read, Regret, Rhoda and Phil-A Sad Goodbye, -Untitled-. Thanks for asking.
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Date: 10/4/2017 8:33:00 PM
Heavy. Very heavy. This is the world we live in. Good poem.........peace!
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Date: 10/2/2017 8:31:00 PM
dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/30/2017 6:56:00 PM
This is too real Andrea and a remarkable entry for his contest. I see this getting top honors! : )
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Date: 9/30/2017 7:28:00 PM
just middle of the road, but that will do.
Date: 9/30/2017 4:10:00 PM
Wow Andrea, what an evocative write this is. Congratulations on your win with this well written and dark poem.
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Date: 9/30/2017 1:27:00 PM
Andrea, CONGRATULATIONS on your placement with this emotional and wonderfully penned poem!
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Date: 9/29/2017 1:13:00 AM
Congratulations, Andrea on your win. You used the words nicely, albeit a bit scary.
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Date: 9/28/2017 8:26:00 PM
A chilling write Andrea..Congrats on your win
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Date: 9/28/2017 4:58:00 PM
Great write although the subject matter is so tragic, the 8 words were effectively used, congrats on a great shared win!
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Date: 9/28/2017 6:19:00 AM
Oh! That's scary and sad, Andrea, different people react so differently..a nice entry:)
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Date: 9/27/2017 11:36:00 PM
Powerful truth in the molding of a killer based on how they are treated. One of my favorite of yours Andrea. Cleverly written. I wrote one about Richard Kuklinski a mob hitman with over two hundred murders. How his parents beat him and mentally abused him. How they created this monster of a man.
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Date: 9/27/2017 5:55:00 AM
....and sadly such things happen. Well writ, Andrea, a strong write, I'm sure you will do well. VIv x
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Date: 9/27/2017 4:42:00 AM
That is one powerful and frightening sonnet Andrea... And it pinpoints the problem, where did the cycle of violence start?
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Date: 9/26/2017 6:28:00 PM
Powerful words!! If you punch in Burnt Offering Matthew Anish you will see that poem. You do not have to go to poetrysoup to see it. Just punch in the title and my name on the computer and you will see "Burnt Offering". Yours Matthew Anish
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Date: 9/26/2017 10:54:00 AM
an excellent poem, andrea, but more frightening because this scenario seems to be happening more and more. this should place right at the top in the contest...
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Date: 9/26/2017 8:06:00 AM
Gee what a chilling poem you wrote weaving those words in so perfectly! Good luck in the contest:-) hugs jan xx
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Date: 9/26/2017 7:24:00 AM
Great use of the challenge words, Andrea - your storytelling flows so well that they are barely noticeable. Good luck in the contest.
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Date: 9/26/2017 6:43:00 AM
A story that reads like real life events in the recent past--this form of poetry comes with your unique stamp--Kudos and best for a win!
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