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Hark

Hark The captain spoke to the sick and starving As he bobbled on the bow And began We will go there Pointing his crooked finger as his dark, salty body dropped But with each upsurge he made another point You are here because you got lost I'm here to take you home Down surge I'm not sure we will make it Upsurge But you have strong oars made of Spanish mahogany one at a time Down surge Some of you are weaker and will think of dying Upsurge Others will pick you up because you are worthy of love Down surge Your stomachs are full of toxic blubber meat Upsurge You will endure for the purpose of Her hug at port, wet and tired and lost Down surge You will not endure if you are proud Upsurge Down surge And just his eyes. Only sounds of orphaned oars and flapping sails and rusty rudders. Two whales appear, each pick a side. Guiding, with twin wakes, and moving the boys toward there Upsurge Down surge The whales were moving them there. Screaming to their distant loved ones I'll be home soon

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Date: 3/26/2023 10:23:00 PM
One thought I had here was how nature (the whales) takes care of us even while they sacrifice and “scream” (like whales almost like they are explaining taking care of us). I love that they forgive us and would help us like this.
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Date: 8/5/2022 6:26:00 AM
Cooper, this one reminds me of a bible passage where travelers on ship to Rome took Paul to trial before Caesar Nero. He promised they would crash if they stayed in the boat but without loss of life. Leery sailors were secretly making a lifeboat, ready to go overboard in the storm. Whales would have gotten them had Paul not stopped them. Your delightful piece registers with me, believer that God will deliver in trying times. Love the Up surge, Down surge lines. Powerful! along with the title.
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Date: 7/23/2022 2:18:00 PM
I enjoyed reading your "Hark." What a story/write. Have a blessed day................
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:10:00 AM
Thanks, Paula.
Date: 7/23/2022 6:10:00 AM
Hark is a wonderfully wrought poem about A Captain Pessimistic Optimist or maybe Optimistic Pessimist on voyagers' survival chances. Really, The Poem's long lines alternating with short ones neatly deliver the two possibilities of Life or Death.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:11:00 AM
Great help and read. Yes I felt like that. Gone and here again.
Date: 7/21/2022 3:14:00 AM
Up and down, up and down, up and down. I'm really enjoying reading this poem (mind you, I'm getting a little dizzy now!). Thanks, Cooper.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:12:00 AM
Dramamine. But the whales got them there.
Date: 7/20/2022 10:46:00 PM
i ENJOYED IT.
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:12:00 AM
Thanks
Date: 7/20/2022 3:59:00 PM
A wonderful poem of hope and reality, Cooper. I enjoyed the read. A poet friend in Texas, Bill
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:13:00 AM
Thanks, Bill. It’s a journey and I’m happy you read it.
Date: 7/20/2022 3:39:00 PM
Another wonderfully creative free verse Cooper. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your "Hark" Cheers Anne :-)
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:14:00 AM
Thanks, Anne. You are a true encourager.
Date: 7/20/2022 1:49:00 PM
Welcome Cooper, your ink is fresh!
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:14:00 AM
Ha. Thank you.
Date: 7/20/2022 1:43:00 PM
A very good story in free verse poetry Cooper. Write on… Belle
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:15:00 AM
It’s a struggle to get it done. You’ve helped. Thank you
Date: 7/20/2022 1:20:00 PM
Another awesome write Cooper! Many thanks for sharing your gift! Linda
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Lee Etheridge
Date: 7/24/2022 12:16:00 AM
Thanks, Linda. I appreciate your encouragement.

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