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Half Bubble and a Few Bricks For Contest

He is "half a bubble off of centre" More than "A few bricks short of a load" He is not a Prince worth kissing He is more of an ugly toad. Some think he is "Rock Solid" A veritable "Mountain of a man" Instead he's a snake Replacing a ladder Nothing but a "flash in the pan" You'll have to "hit the nail on the head" For "he's not the sharpest tack in the box" If you don't want this jerk to catch you I recommend "pulling up your socks If you think I was "born yesterday" Or "I've got nothing to lose" Instead of "Drinking the koolaide" You musta been guzzlin the booze For I am "the man of your dreams" Look my way I'm "Love at first sight" Forget that other "good for nuttin" fella I'll "rock your world" "forever, a day and a night!"

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Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/26/2015 10:43:00 PM

You haven't left any for the rest of us. A sure winner and great poem. Joyce

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/27/2015 8:05:00 AM

Thanks Joyce!

Richard D Seal

Date: 7/18/2015 7:11:00 PM

Well! This is better than finding, 'a nine bob note', your mind must have been, 'raining pennies from heaven', if this don't win, 'I'll eat my hat', lol. Thanks for your visit Rick, I'm ok just short on time nowadays, hope alls well with you. Take care, Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2015 10:02:00 AM

Ha ha, love it Richard. They would have to come from heaven because in Canada they have eliminated the humble penny. Take care my friend. You get the award for comment of the day.

Afolabi Muideen

Date: 7/18/2015 3:33:00 PM

What a lovely and elegant write......A.M.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2015 10:02:00 AM

Thanks A.M.

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/18/2015 8:35:00 AM

Good one, my dear. Great use of cliché's. I need to share this with my English I Composition class. :) Good luck in the contest....Hugs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/18/2015 8:50:00 AM

That's cool! I hope they enjoy it.

Demetrios Trifiatis

Date: 7/18/2015 7:35:00 AM

Imaginative, creative and funny, Richard! A classic!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/18/2015 7:58:00 AM

Thanks Demetrios.

Brenda Rose

Date: 7/18/2015 12:04:00 AM

Very funny poem. Uplifting and fun. I like the line "For I am "the man of your dreams". The whole poem flows and like a puzzle fits together perfectly. As usual a definite 7!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/18/2015 7:57:00 AM

Thanks so much Brenda.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/17/2015 6:01:00 PM

aha, for the colloquialism contest? I really enjoyed this one. I need to get busy and do one myself. You were very inventive just using them all in your lines like that! Great job, Richard.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/18/2015 7:57:00 AM

Thanks Andrea.

James Fraser

Date: 7/17/2015 1:41:00 PM

I guess you were smiling writing this Richard, I certainly would be if I wrote it. Wishing this gem on a pedestal of high, James :)

Ravindra K Kapoor

Date: 7/17/2015 11:58:00 AM

Sorry Richard as I reached Kanpur yesterday only. You have made a creative work dear friend. The stanza leaves its impression like the flying clouds. A full 7. My good wishes for your contest entry dear friend. Love and best wishes ..Ravindra K Kapoor

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/18/2015 7:56:00 AM

Thanks Ravindra for your thoughtful visit.

Catherine Labeau

Date: 7/17/2015 8:48:00 AM

love it

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/17/2015 9:10:00 AM

Thanks Catherine.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser

Date: 7/17/2015 5:43:00 AM

Richard, first glance at your title I thought ots filled of fun and imagery and indeed it is! I like the quoted phrases.. very creative!!! Common phrases bug you delivered a magic here for me. A fave!~Olive Eloisa

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/17/2015 8:02:00 AM

I had a bit of fun writing this one Olive. Thanks for faving it.

Julia Ward

Date: 7/16/2015 11:59:00 PM

I liked your use of 'em!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/17/2015 8:02:00 AM

Thanks Julia.

Robert Lindley

Date: 7/16/2015 7:33:00 PM

Well crafted list and Ive heard most of them and even have been a few myself! lol . A7

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/17/2015 8:03:00 AM

Ha ha, I know the feeling.

Tim Smith

Date: 7/16/2015 5:26:00 PM

love the colloquialisms Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 6:55:00 PM

Thanks Tim, one of the advantages of being "as old as the hills" is that a I have a few locked away in "the vault".

Kp Nunez

Date: 7/16/2015 2:55:00 PM

You sashayed with all those cliche! Good one, Rick!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 3:42:00 PM

Thanks Kim, it was fun.

Mama Bear

Date: 7/16/2015 2:48:00 PM

Absolutely cute. Not sure how you remember those cliches as you are really not old enough for some of them Good luck in the contest Love Mom

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 3:43:00 PM

Thanks mom, also thanks for catching the spelling error, love Rick.

Robert Stoner Jr

Date: 7/16/2015 2:30:00 PM

well done digging out all those cliches and assembling them into a tale so well presented. Good luck in the contest. Very creative.

Robert Stoner Jr
Date: 7/16/2015 4:05:00 PM

Well thinking in a more commercial mind set I felt this is more marketable image,lol

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 3:44:00 PM

Thanks Robert, I almost didn't recognize you in the new avatar picture.

Constance La France

Date: 7/16/2015 1:37:00 PM

Richard, this is a fun and easy going write, a wonderful 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, shameonyou

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 3:44:00 PM

Thanks Constance, as always you add a bit of sunshine to my day.

Jan Allison

Date: 7/16/2015 11:55:00 AM

made me smile Richard good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 3:45:00 PM

Glad I could make you smile my dear.

Judy Konos

Date: 7/16/2015 9:29:00 AM

Your poetry brought two things to mind. First, a BIG 7 and the recollection of an old song, "I can't make you love me if you don't" Best wishes in the contest...

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 9:34:00 AM

Thanks Judy, I do love that song!

Peter Lewis Holmes

Date: 7/16/2015 9:23:00 AM

Funny and true to life Richard...Peter

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/16/2015 9:25:00 AM

Thanks Peter.