Richard Lamoureux Poet Quatrain

Half Bubble and a Few Bricks For Contest

He is "half a bubble off of centre"
More than "A few bricks short of a load"
He is not a Prince worth kissing
He is more of an ugly toad.

Some think he is "Rock Solid"
A veritable "Mountain of a man"
Instead he's a snake Replacing a ladder
Nothing but a "flash in the pan"

You'll have to "hit the nail on the head"
For "he's not the sharpest tack in the box"
If you don't want this jerk to catch you
I recommend "pulling up your socks

If you think I was "born yesterday"
Or "I've got nothing to lose"
Instead of "Drinking the koolaide"
You musta been guzzlin the booze

For I am "the man of your dreams"
Look my way I'm "Love at first sight"
Forget that other "good for nuttin" fella
I'll "rock your world" "forever, a day and a night!"

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Joyce Johnson July 26, 2015 at 10:43 PM You haven't left any for the rest of us. A sure winner and great poem. Joyce Richard Lamoureux July 27, 2015 at 8:05 AM Thanks Joyce!

Richard D Seal July 18, 2015 at 7:11 PM Well! This is better than finding, 'a nine bob note', your mind must have been, 'raining pennies from heaven', if this don't win, 'I'll eat my hat', lol. Thanks for your visit Rick, I'm ok just short on time nowadays, hope alls well with you. Take care, Richard Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2015 at 10:02 AM Ha ha, love it Richard. They would have to come from heaven because in Canada they have eliminated the humble penny. Take care my friend. You get the award for comment of the day.

Afolabi Muideen July 18, 2015 at 3:33 PM What a lovely and elegant write......A.M. Richard Lamoureux July 19, 2015 at 10:02 AM Thanks A.M.

Eileen Manassian July 18, 2015 at 8:35 AM Good one, my dear. Great use of cliché's. I need to share this with my English I Composition class. :) Good luck in the contest....Hugs Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 8:50 AM That's cool! I hope they enjoy it.

Demetrios Trifiatis July 18, 2015 at 7:35 AM Imaginative, creative and funny, Richard! A classic! Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 7:58 AM Thanks Demetrios.

Brenda Rose July 18, 2015 at 12:04 AM Very funny poem. Uplifting and fun. I like the line "For I am "the man of your dreams". The whole poem flows and like a puzzle fits together perfectly. As usual a definite 7! Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 7:57 AM Thanks so much Brenda.

Andrea Dietrich July 17, 2015 at 6:01 PM aha, for the colloquialism contest? I really enjoyed this one. I need to get busy and do one myself. You were very inventive just using them all in your lines like that! Great job, Richard. Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 7:57 AM Thanks Andrea.

James Fraser July 17, 2015 at 1:41 PM I guess you were smiling writing this Richard, I certainly would be if I wrote it. Wishing this gem on a pedestal of high, James :)

Ravindra K Kapoor July 17, 2015 at 11:58 AM Sorry Richard as I reached Kanpur yesterday only. You have made a creative work dear friend. The stanza leaves its impression like the flying clouds. A full 7. My good wishes for your contest entry dear friend. Love and best wishes ..Ravindra K Kapoor Richard Lamoureux July 18, 2015 at 7:56 AM Thanks Ravindra for your thoughtful visit.

Catherine Labeau July 17, 2015 at 8:48 AM love it Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2015 at 9:10 AM Thanks Catherine.

Olive Eloisa Guillermo - Fraser July 17, 2015 at 5:43 AM Richard, first glance at your title I thought ots filled of fun and imagery and indeed it is! I like the quoted phrases.. very creative!!! Common phrases bug you delivered a magic here for me. A fave!~Olive Eloisa Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2015 at 8:02 AM I had a bit of fun writing this one Olive. Thanks for faving it.

Julia Ward July 16, 2015 at 11:59 PM I liked your use of 'em! Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2015 at 8:02 AM Thanks Julia.

Robert Lindley July 16, 2015 at 7:33 PM Well crafted list and Ive heard most of them and even have been a few myself! lol . A7 Richard Lamoureux July 17, 2015 at 8:03 AM Ha ha, I know the feeling.

Tim Smith July 16, 2015 at 5:26 PM love the colloquialisms Richard Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 6:55 PM Thanks Tim, one of the advantages of being "as old as the hills" is that a I have a few locked away in "the vault".

Kp Nunez July 16, 2015 at 2:55 PM You sashayed with all those cliche! Good one, Rick! Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 3:42 PM Thanks Kim, it was fun.

Mama Bear July 16, 2015 at 2:48 PM Absolutely cute. Not sure how you remember those cliches as you are really not old enough for some of them Good luck in the contest Love Mom Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 3:43 PM Thanks mom, also thanks for catching the spelling error, love Rick.

Robert Stoner Jr July 16, 2015 at 2:30 PM well done digging out all those cliches and assembling them into a tale so well presented. Good luck in the contest. Very creative. Robert Stoner Jr July 16, 2015 at 4:05 PM Well thinking in a more commercial mind set I felt this is more marketable image,lol Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 3:44 PM Thanks Robert, I almost didn't recognize you in the new avatar picture.

Constance La France July 16, 2015 at 1:37 PM Richard, this is a fun and easy going write, a wonderful 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, shameonyou Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 3:44 PM Thanks Constance, as always you add a bit of sunshine to my day.

Jan Allison July 16, 2015 at 11:55 AM made me smile Richard good luck in the contest:-) hugs Jan xx Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 3:45 PM Glad I could make you smile my dear.

Judy Konos July 16, 2015 at 9:29 AM Your poetry brought two things to mind. First, a BIG 7 and the recollection of an old song, "I can't make you love me if you don't" Best wishes in the contest... Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 9:34 AM Thanks Judy, I do love that song!

Peter Lewis Holmes July 16, 2015 at 9:23 AM Funny and true to life Richard...Peter Richard Lamoureux July 16, 2015 at 9:25 AM Thanks Peter.