Hailstorms in Heartbeats

In a flourishing vineyard,
I’m a vine bearing no fruit,
forsaken in the soil of twisted roots,
burnt and scarred in blistered blackness,
as the cosmic seeds engulf my skin~
with fiery flames of thunder
and scorching stones,
awakening demons to draw
darkness in drowsy strokes,
above this field of fiendish flowers.

Maybe this is the poem of a soul,
singing chaos to collapsed
clusters of leafless twigs,
drenched in rain and tears…
For my empathy, the lotus stars could see,
but you’ve long refused to feel
these aching refrains~
like hailstorms in heartbeats,
bleeding bonfires of woe, yearning to be heard…

Tonight I’ll find solace within ashes and thorns~
counting petals painted in pain,
pondering: if I were a rose,
would you thread rhymes of love
in syllables of gold and green?
Or would I still be nothing but a wordless sonnet,
    lost between the waning rays 
    of forgotten sunsets,
resting in a sky of moonless rivers…
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Swan Avatar
November 27, 2024 at 12:44 PM
There is such an aching grief in these words, in a broken world. Mourning hurts. J
Parker Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 3:52 PM
Congratulations Ink on your poem about passion's pain and the depth of the arrowhead that pierced the heart from the bow of a lover...
Pinet Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 11:20 AM
Congratulations Ink! Your beautiful poem "Hailstorms in Heartbeats placed "Third" in my contest. It stood out with its superb use of metaphors combined with a haunting melancholy that pervades throughout it. Very well done, my friend.
Empress Avatar
November 25, 2024 at 9:15 PM
Thank you so much dear emile: 125 entries is a lot to judge from and to make it in your top 3 is truly an honor, one that i did not expect but i am sincerely grateful for: sending you and your family light today and always: happy thanksgiving
Beaufort Avatar
November 11, 2024 at 7:46 AM
IE, you've got me thinking about how we go about accepting each other as people. Does what we have on the inside count for more than what's on the outside? As I become older and wiser at my current age of 73, it seems to me that what is inside matters much more than outward appearance. We go through periods of lush growth and periods of emptiness at different times in life, but our moral compass and innate goodness will always remain. I'm not a fan of most plastic surgery and shortcuts. Smiles!!
One Avatar
November 9, 2024 at 11:21 AM
I love those opening lines, it really sets the scene for the poem and the theme is explored in such a metaphorical and deep manner... I can feel the angst and inner turmoil and in your yearning you express pain, loneliness, and a desire for recognition, but also some form of confirmation for your actions and having the right to make your decision.. its like a pain you must endure to escape from emotions you no longer want to feel.. Your poem is rich in dark and striking expression of internal suffering, resilience, and the desire for empathy and some what understanding...
Hind Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 5:53 PM
A potent metaphor...and some beautiful writing... <3
Sands Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 10:32 AM
Well expressed. Great writing ! :)
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:28 PM
So good to hear from you dear heidi thank you so much
Buhagiar Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 8:25 AM
Incredible alliteration. Can we find solace? Perhaps the moon will help, who knows.
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:25 PM
Yes maybe the moon, haha. Thank you dear victor
Rolland Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 11:04 PM
so beautifuly written, remarkable last verse, thanks poet, i improve my poetry and english reading your gracious poems
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:22 PM
Thank you so much thats such a kind thing to say. Grateful for your support truly
Dietrich Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 10:46 AM
This poem oozes with the tone of loneliness and anguish. I really liked that last stanza, Ink, especially those last six lines! Brilliant metaphors!
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:20 PM
Awwn thank you so much dear sweet soul aunt
Read Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 10:08 AM
Hi Ink your most definitely not a wordless sonnet, far from it. Have a lovely evening.
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:19 PM
Thank you so much thats so kind of you to say dear john
Cunningham Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 5:52 AM
Quite an emotional write IE, I can sense the anguish and heartache in your words. Tom
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:18 PM
Thank you always dear Tom i am always grateful for your support
Rodgers Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 5:45 AM
Dearest Empress, I truly felt the depth of this poem. I felt I was traveling through a wonderful landscape of inner turmoil and unrequited empathy. It is so full of living metaphors, such as scorched vines and fiendish flowers, that beautifully captures the soul's struggle amidst the chaos. What really tops this one is the heavenly forces and personal pain creating a haunting and yet introspective internal journey. Ohhh, the cry for universal longing for understanding and connection. I think my favorite lines were, "if I were a rose, would you thread rhymes of love in syllables of gold and green?" Empress, this is such a haunting FAV! Autumn Blessings, My Dearest Friend, Daniel
Empress Avatar
November 8, 2024 at 12:18 PM
Thank you so very much dear daniel, so kind of you, im grateful always for your kind and touching responses that makes me feel understood. Sending you light~
Rodrigues Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 5:00 AM
Emotive and raw with great metaphors, dear Ink!
Empress Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 8:32 AM
Thank you so very much dear kim: much appreciated
Onpaper Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 12:55 AM
forsaken in the soil of twisted roots, burnt and scarred in blistered blackness,… oooo papi that imagery!!! awakening demons to draw darkness in drowsy strokes, above this field of fiendish flowers… gorgeously haunting!!! singing chaos to collapsed clusters of leafless twigs, mmmmm.. like hailstorms in heartbeats, bleeding bonfires of woe, yearning to be heard… ooo love the reference!!! bleeding bonfires of woe, yearning to be heard… The intensity is addictively dramatic!! Love it! lost between the waning rays of forgotten sunsets, resting in a sky of moonless rivers… oooo child I the ending tooo … the heaviness n the beauty this piece flows like a gorgeous river papi!!
Empress Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 8:28 AM
Awwn. Papi your comments flow like a gorgeous river.
Rhymes Avatar
November 6, 2024 at 11:37 PM
Wow it’s impressive
Empress Avatar
November 7, 2024 at 8:27 AM
Awwn thank you
George Avatar
November 6, 2024 at 11:26 PM
Dear Empress, this is a poem that pierces into the core of hearts. Hardly any one can write poems of such tragic intensity like you and Silent One. At the very outset, you have expressed a sense of frustration and unfulfillment- "In a flourishing vineyard, I’m a vine bearing no fruit, forsaken in the soil of twisted roots". What touching presentation! I wonder why you feel so when you are in reality a vineyard laden with clusters of grapes. "but you’ve long refused to feel these aching refrains~ like hailstorms in heartbeats, bleeding bonfires of woe, yearning to be heard…" Your poem has left me breathless and heartbroken with its haunting beauty and annihilating sorrow. This goes into my FAVE.
Empress Avatar
November 6, 2024 at 11:42 PM
Thank you sweet valsa. Sometimes we write when in haziness… and i guess thats when we express the best. Hugs
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