Haiku

the serpent sleeps coiled, reclining at my feet dreaming of deceit tempting marshmallows: do not rush. Delay will bring gratification morning dew glistens she cried her eyes out all night let the sun shine bright almond trees blossom lightning flashes, thunder drawls do not be afraid

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Susan Ashley

Date: 11/22/2017 8:40:00 AM

Paul, a captivating, splendid strand of Haiku pearls of lustrous beauty and emotional depth! Beguiling, tempting, tender, reassuring, I feel your Haiku (your first Haiku even more amazing..) to be powerful and wondrous in imagery and content... Warmest wishes ~Sue

Paul Callus
Date: 11/22/2017 10:57:00 AM

Your choice of words is a highlight not only of your poetry, but also of your insightful feedback, Susan! Honoured to have you visiting and commenting on my work. ~ Warm regards // paul

Anil Deo

Date: 4/19/2017 3:24:00 AM

Great --seven for sure Paul! You are indeed taking care of someone dear to you, but bed-ridden. God is ready to do a miraclous intervention. Keep thanking Jesus and asking for the Holy Spirit "to arise. You are welcome here. amen in Jesus' name." Anil Deo

Paul Callus
Date: 4/19/2017 5:07:00 PM

Thank you for a comforting visit, Anil. Pleased to make your acquaintance. Regards // paul

Skat A

Date: 6/12/2015 1:06:00 AM

Paul, Congratulations on having your poem featured this week. SKAT love

Daver Austin

Date: 6/9/2015 11:11:00 AM

Especially like the first one, the connection. All are good. I love haiku. Congrats on the selection. Love, daver

Paul Callus
Date: 6/9/2015 1:16:00 PM

Thank you Dave. These happen to be my first attempt at haiku; glad you found them to your liking. All the best. // paul

Julia Ward

Date: 3/28/2015 7:19:00 AM

Mmm - those marshmallows. Your poem ones are tasty, and I forgot about delaying. // Hugs, Julia, xx

Paul Callus
Date: 3/28/2015 2:21:00 PM

Glad you enjoyed the marshmallows...but Julia is naughty for not delaying! Hugs // paul

Cynthia Jones

Date: 2/14/2015 2:28:00 PM

Paul, these are great Haikus my friend. Well done. :O) Keep up with the great work. Keep on penning. Thank you so very much for sharing your wonderful and creative talents with us. We all truly appreciate it. *S* Cynthia

Paul Callus
Date: 3/26/2015 11:03:00 AM

Hi Cynthia! sorry for late reply, must have skipped my attention before. So pleased that you enjoyed my set of haiku..thank you for stopping by. // paul

Rajat Kanti Chakrabarty

Date: 1/23/2015 10:05:00 AM

great haiku concepts I liked the first coiled serpent sounds like Kundalini>regards

Paul Callus
Date: 1/23/2015 11:14:00 AM

Thank you Rajat....Kundalini represents coiled power, if I'm not mistaken, so that would also refer to the coiled snake. You have an alert mind! All the best. // paul

Harry Horsman

Date: 8/14/2014 11:35:00 AM

love the Haiku concept, and these are amazing...

Paul Callus
Date: 8/18/2014 11:13:00 AM

Thank you Harry. Your comments are much appreciated......paul

Sara Kendrick

Date: 3/22/2014 6:04:00 PM

Very descriptive and creative work..Enjoyed reading your Haiku..Thanks for the visit so my page..I like the first one the best of the four..Sara

Paul Callus
Date: 3/23/2014 5:10:00 AM

Good morning Sara. Thank you for stopping by and leaving such lovely comments :) cu // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/21/2014 10:32:00 PM

these are pretty cool. I love toasted marshmallows and really liked that one.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/22/2014 3:19:00 AM

Good morning Andrea. Thank you for stopping by and for your 'cool' comment :) glad you enjoyed these haiku. // paul

Sandip Goswami

Date: 3/10/2014 4:22:00 PM

Nice haiku...Best wishes from India Dear...

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2014 4:39:00 PM

Thanks a lot Sandip. Maltese wishes to you. cu around.

Donna Jones

Date: 3/3/2014 10:20:00 PM

These are wonderful haiku Paul...I really a enjoyed them all..

Paul Callus
Date: 3/10/2014 8:40:00 AM

Thank you Donna; I'm glad you like them. cu around. // paul

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 3/3/2014 1:04:00 PM

I kind of put 1 and two together. something very amusing about raosting marshmellows with dragons breath.

Paul Callus
Date: 3/3/2014 3:34:00 PM

ha...I get that :) :)

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 3/2/2014 7:48:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your haiku..Don't know which is my favourite if I had to pick...I love the 'morning dew haiku' a lot..so I guess I pick that.If you are interested,I can pass you names of magazines where your haiku might get published!Well done Paul!! Tnks for reading my humble verse-Charma

Charmaine Chircop
Date: 3/3/2014 12:29:00 AM

If you open the link profilic press you can see the mags. I'm referring too-These are few of them -Haiku journal,50 haikus,three little lines and there was something about a wolf haiku but I forgot the exact name on that.There is even the Vancouver contest going on...Good luck: )

Paul Callus
Date: 3/2/2014 7:57:00 AM

Thank you Charm for your continuous encouraging comments. Feedback is always important to me; it helps a lot.// Re mags I would be interested; txs for offering; very kind and thoughtful of you :) paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 3/2/2014 4:24:00 AM

Delayed gratification has never been my strong point. Yes, it does get me into trouble. If I want something....I want it NOW!!! I guess being the youngest and the only girl in the family....I got what I wanted pretty much. Lovely group of haiku. You are very talented!!! PC ;)

Paul Callus
Date: 3/2/2014 4:37:00 AM

Well, what can I say...your visit has made my day. You are one of a kind! Yes, I can tell that you go after what you want...and you get it, whenever you want it. I'm glad you like my humble haiku; your comments I happily do take very seriously! /x/ paul

Heather Secrest

Date: 3/1/2014 7:49:00 PM

Welcome to the soup!! And thanks for commenting! I love the second one!! Marshmallows are my temptations. Especially if I can toast them first!! I quite like haiku, and these are wonderful ones! Great write!!!

Paul Callus
Date: 3/2/2014 4:31:00 AM

Heather, thank you a lot; you flatter me :) /x/ paul

Heather Secrest
Date: 3/1/2014 7:51:00 PM

Ps. Added this to my favorites!!

Skat A

Date: 2/22/2014 7:57:00 PM

Paul, wow... Impressing Haiku. I like the 3rd haiku..... Hope to see a another new one from you.... SKAT

Paul Callus
Date: 2/23/2014 5:24:00 AM

Thank you SKAT. Feels good to have someone following my work and commenting on it. :-)