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I must have watched him mildly wandering Along a balmy pond, his locks grown wild, With cheeks a hectic flush, bolder than Spring, As if on him amber twigs had compiled... I gaze at a form bending-- tall and brown Solemn those eyes like dewdrops weeping dim-- He laid a brightened wreath and cast them down; The north-wind on a face looking quite grim Under a young maple tree of furled leaves Perhaps, he mourns about love on dry sheaves. Constance La France's Contest HM's and NA's October 2020 Poetry Posted 11/2/2020 ~ From Completely Your Choice (25) Contest Written 10/12/ 2020 Judged 10/13/2020 Quatrain and Couple Form-- HM

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Date: 11/8/2020 5:16:00 AM
Nette, congratulations on your win in my HM's and NA's October 2020 Challenge with this excellent poem _Constance
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Date: 11/7/2020 10:14:00 AM
your exquisite poetic artistry brings me, oh so willingly, to the center of these melancholy moments.. "Solemn those eyes like dewdrops weeping dim-- " - so achingly beautiful, Nette. Congratulations for your wonderful win in Constance's contest.. ~Susan
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Date: 11/6/2020 8:30:00 PM
Lovely, moving poem, Nette. CONGRATS on your win. Janice
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Date: 11/6/2020 5:01:00 PM
An engaging write of sadness, nette. Congrats on your win ~ John
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Date: 11/6/2020 10:46:00 AM
Great imagery, Nete, and I like the change in the verse; He laid a brightened wreath and cast them down. Congratulations on Constance contest. Hugs Eve
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Date: 10/15/2020 9:32:00 AM
Congratulations on the win. You have a wonderful way with your words. Enjoy your win.................
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Date: 10/14/2020 7:27:00 PM
Breatakingly beautiful!!! i love the most the parting line, "Perhaps, his thoughts deep as the rustling sheaves." Congratulations and a fave for me..
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Date: 10/14/2020 6:03:00 AM
Very nice Nette. Smoothly written too :)
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Date: 10/13/2020 2:13:00 PM
very moving Nette. Congratulations on the win! Linda
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Date: 10/13/2020 1:59:00 AM
Such minute details that make this a picturesque portrait. I always love your poems. ~~
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Book: Shattered Sighs