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Freed Spirit

If I could make myself strong enough to stand firmly in front of the gun, Do you love me enough to pull the trigger? Releasing me. Freeing my mind from this hell. Captured behind my eyes. Bleeding in disguise. Freedom is worth dying for. Life is worth being free. I live in a world that confuses me. I have the world on the surface for everyone to see. Then shadowed by my mind, I have a world for only me. Trapped behind my eyes, misery and lies, betrayal and lust, laughter and pain. Shatters of un comfort rage destroys the happiness of my reality. Caught up in the raptured discomfort of what I've created. Purity is lost, sanity is the cost. Haunted by my childhood, the curse that lust invoked. I feel it all around me, absorbing and consuming me. Attempting escape, yet by my hand just a waste. I want someone to believe me. Stand here freely and have the sympathy to release me.

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Date: 5/26/2011 11:57:00 PM
congrats on your first place win in Drakes contest with this intense write. Love gf
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Date: 5/26/2011 11:23:00 PM
... so well! great job. congrats on the top award,latisha! : huggs!
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Date: 5/26/2011 12:33:00 PM
Powerful and intense lines! Congrats latisha on your 1st place win..love, gautami
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Date: 5/26/2011 11:33:00 AM
A deep write from you Latisha.Congrats on your well deserved 1st place win..
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Date: 5/26/2011 7:19:00 AM
Congratulations
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Date: 5/25/2011 3:53:00 PM
Congrats on your big win!
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Date: 5/25/2011 2:05:00 PM
Congrats on this prize-winner! Gwendolen
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Date: 5/25/2011 10:53:00 AM
Awesome poem, Latisha! Congratulations on your first-place win in Drake's contest. Love, Carolyn
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Date: 5/25/2011 10:12:00 AM
Congratulations on yor win in Drake's contest Latisha. Love, Carol
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Date: 5/25/2011 7:09:00 AM
Big congratulations, Latisha!!!! Hope to hear you read this in the future on Drake's radio show!! Hooray for you!!
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Date: 5/25/2011 6:18:00 AM
Congratulations on the first win in the contest, Latisha
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Date: 5/25/2011 5:21:00 AM
Super congrats Latisha on your first place win in Drake's I roam contest.. u are going to be on his radio program with your poetry read..how awesome..congrats ..good luck.. excellent write.. glorious win ..enjoy with luv..
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Date: 5/15/2010 3:51:00 PM
Hi Latisha, glad to see you separated into verse, now, another suggestion, your lines are too long, either shorten or make other 4 line verses.. you can have as many as you want.. for example If I could make myself strong enough// To Stand firmly in front of the gun// Do you love me enough to pull the trigger//Releasing me, freeing my mind from hell//.. you basically want each line to be of the similiar length...let me know how it looks.. and how you feel about it.. love constance
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Date: 5/15/2010 8:22:00 AM
Powerful and dramatic, words Latisha, but not Lyric (in my humble opinion, anyways) If you break it up into verses of lets say four lines, you will have what is referred to as dramatic verse..you will have to add a line, as you have 15 lines now and if I can ever be of any help, please contact me... love Constance
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