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Forgotten Path of Love

littered twigs now stale unlike past season, enhanced by rapture of air whistling shades of veiled light hide her bloomed navel with child on path of forgotten love hunched eyes fall on ground clawing moonstruck reveries of how he betrayed night's trust fetus kicks gently stirring her to warm hope's dream for new life cradled by womb ........ Forgotten Contest for Susan

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Kash Poet

Date: 9/7/2012 2:40:00 PM

Basically I am a technical person.Electrical Engineer.Trying to combine poetry with Engineering :(

Bukang Liwayway

Date: 7/29/2012 11:11:00 PM

congrats!!! keep up the good work :) Mary

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 7/22/2012 10:38:00 PM

nettecongratulations in Susan's, "forgotten" contest.. have your self a good night. ;-) always~PD

Dan Kearley

Date: 7/18/2012 2:10:00 PM

Congrats,on this very fine write...I love your wording. :o)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/18/2012 6:01:00 AM

Congratulations on your well deserved win in Susan's "Forgotten" contest Nette. Love, Carol

Linda-Marie Sweetheart

Date: 7/17/2012 8:19:00 PM

congrats Nette luv on a terrifice win for amazing woeds ... hope to be back full steam next week ..

Ralph Taylor

Date: 7/17/2012 1:57:00 PM

Congrats, nette. Excellent. Nice going. Kudos. hugs, Ralph

David Williams

Date: 7/17/2012 12:17:00 PM

Nette, congrats on your win.I like this one...David

Joyce Johnson

Date: 7/17/2012 12:06:00 PM

Sad but hopeful too. Very nice. Congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce

Black Eyed Susan

Date: 7/17/2012 7:28:00 AM

Congratulations on your #4 win in my contest! I like how you described forgotten love, a betrayal, yet something good came from it :)

Kash Poet

Date: 7/13/2012 8:41:00 AM

Beautiful Sedoka here Nette.Missing so much your poetry!

Don Johnson

Date: 7/12/2012 4:59:00 PM

touch of sadness, touch of pain, lifes mistakes relived again, poignant is the night...

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 7/12/2012 7:09:00 AM

Lovely written nette....we have a warm holiday with sunshine and alot of splashing in the pool....:) - home in Norway it is raining :( - oxox huggs Anne-Lise

Kash Poet

Date: 7/11/2012 7:33:00 PM

Replace your computer!!!!!!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/11/2012 4:56:00 PM

wow, what a beautiful sedoka. I see you did Susan's theme. I sure hope to do one this nice!! it's great to see you here, Nette. Luv, Andrea

Keith Bickerstaffe

Date: 7/11/2012 1:23:00 PM

I couldn't help but notice the long 'a' assonance sprinkled through your first three verses... nice! '...path of forgotten love,' so sad. That being said, there is hope expressed here that all will well. Marvelous imagery and word use! Best wishes, Keith :)

Carol Sunshine Brown

Date: 7/11/2012 1:12:00 PM

It was such a pleasure to read your poetry today Nette. I hope to be able in the next few weeks to find the time and energy to read and comment. May you walk through the garden of inspiration and continue to write and share your poetry with us. Love, Carol

Joann Grisetti

Date: 7/11/2012 12:44:00 PM

Lovely set of sedoka. Pregnancy is such a special gift.

Russell Sivey

Date: 7/11/2012 12:17:00 PM

Wow, quite the spectacular write my dear friend! I really loved the line, "womb kicks in tenderly" very impressive line Nette! Your descriptions are yet again truly the wondrous words of art! Such images created! I love your poem immensely! Great Work!!

Rachel St.Cross

Date: 7/11/2012 12:07:00 PM

‡ Ps. There Is Just Reasons Dark Elements Amid Life, Internal External, May They Co-Exist Until Their Purpose, Has Thus Been Fulfilled * Did I Ever Tell You, How Very Beautiful I Think You Are. ‡

Rachel St.Cross

Date: 7/11/2012 12:02:00 PM

‡ HE Pours These Waters As Blessings, Upon Into & All About & If A Bird Does Not Escape This Eye Than Surely How Can This, A Precious Child, My Sweet Beautiful Nette * Truly, One Is All & All Are 'One' For, How Else Could These Beauties In Truthfuls Light, Ever Be... * The Unborn Child, The Lioness Amid The Desert, Leviathan Within The Waters, The Stars & Moonbeams, The Bird Upon The Ground, Angels, 'You & Me' * This Is A Very Beautiful Poem As Always, Beautiful Nette * Stirring Your Words, Gripping Their Splendours * My Luv, Forever, Rachel ‡