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Forbidden Mist

Banned from the heavens, Sparse fog descends to the land; Shackled to the ground .

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L'Nass Shango

Date: 5/26/2009 7:45:00 AM

This is not just good imagery ... it has a mystic seed longing to become a character in an extended write ... awesome flow. Bravo, my friend

Karen Feist

Date: 5/26/2009 3:30:00 AM

aul, Your talent is remarkable! I find these poems brilliant! I have trouble putting one of them together that makes sense...lol Thank you from the bottom of my heart for taking the time to read my work and comment on it. That was alot of time invested and I truely appreciate it! Have a wonderful day. Karen

James Fraser

Date: 5/22/2009 1:21:00 PM

Raul, your Haiku is in a different world, how you can set a scene with few words beats me, James

Lena Townsend

Date: 5/22/2009 7:30:00 AM

"Shackled to the ground"... WOW!!! Another amazing write from Master Raul! Well done. Smiles from Lolita

Jessica K

Date: 5/21/2009 9:26:00 PM

I can never compare to your poetry......Its flippin amazing!!! -Jessica

Barbara Gorelick

Date: 5/21/2009 6:44:00 PM

So whats left to say..you aare the master..Love..BG

James Faulkner

Date: 5/21/2009 5:33:00 PM

..........................wow.............................................................. love and peace:james

Sharon Winter

Date: 5/21/2009 3:40:00 PM

I am becoming more and more intimidated to even try to write one. You're too good. Stop it! Just kidding. : ) Too awesome. Love, Shar

Nathan Leccese

Date: 5/21/2009 2:26:00 PM

Great way to describe the mist o a cool morning. Love it at always! Thanks for the comment Raul. Your friend Nate

James Marshall Goff

Date: 5/21/2009 1:03:00 PM

cool title instructs the cool haiku....Jim

Laura Mckenzie

Date: 5/21/2009 12:55:00 PM

I love your Haiku's they have great color and they are different! Well Done! Laura :)

Darleen Bilyeu

Date: 5/21/2009 10:54:00 AM

lovely haiku!!! that last line was great!!!

Carolyn Devonshire

Date: 5/21/2009 10:35:00 AM

Amazing analogy in this clever and beautifully composed haiku, Raul! Love, Carolyn

Abe Lopez

Date: 5/21/2009 10:30:00 AM

A shackled cloud is an awsome vision!!!!! very nice!

Christopher Higgins

Date: 5/21/2009 10:26:00 AM

I feel like a broken record...so i won't say anything until your write a terrible haiku..LOL.