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Forbidden Mist

Banned from the heavens,
Sparse fog descends to the land;
Shackled to the ground .

Copyright © Raul Moreno | Year Posted 2009

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May 26, 2009 at 7:45 AM

This is not just good imagery ... it has a mystic seed longing to become a character in an extended write ... awesome flow. Bravo, my friend

May 26, 2009 at 3:30 AM

aul, Your talent is remarkable! I find these poems brilliant! I have trouble putting one of them together that makes sense...lol Thank you from the bottom of my heart for taking the time to read my work and comment on it. That was alot of time invested and I truely appreciate it! Have a wonderful day. Karen

May 22, 2009 at 1:21 PM

Raul, your Haiku is in a different world, how you can set a scene with few words beats me, James

May 22, 2009 at 7:30 AM

"Shackled to the ground"... WOW!!! Another amazing write from Master Raul! Well done. Smiles from Lolita

May 21, 2009 at 9:26 PM

I can never compare to your poetry......Its flippin amazing!!! -Jessica

Barbara Gorelick

May 21, 2009 at 6:44 PM

So whats left to say..you aare the master..Love..BG

May 21, 2009 at 5:33 PM

..........................wow.............................................................. love and peace:james

May 21, 2009 at 3:40 PM

I am becoming more and more intimidated to even try to write one. You're too good. Stop it! Just kidding. : ) Too awesome. Love, Shar

May 21, 2009 at 2:26 PM

Great way to describe the mist o a cool morning. Love it at always! Thanks for the comment Raul. Your friend Nate

James Marshall Goff

May 21, 2009 at 1:03 PM

cool title instructs the cool haiku....Jim

May 21, 2009 at 12:55 PM

I love your Haiku's they have great color and they are different! Well Done! Laura :)

May 21, 2009 at 10:54 AM

lovely haiku!!! that last line was great!!!

Carolyn Devonshire

May 21, 2009 at 10:35 AM

Amazing analogy in this clever and beautifully composed haiku, Raul! Love, Carolyn

May 21, 2009 at 10:30 AM

A shackled cloud is an awsome vision!!!!! very nice!

Christopher Higgins

May 21, 2009 at 10:26 AM

I feel like a broken record...so i won't say anything until your write a terrible haiku..LOL.

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