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Day of Memory was set up in honour of Shafilea Ahmed who was murdered by her parents for being too westernised and not agreeing to an arranged marriage

Forbidden Love

Forbidden love, bought you disgrace As my parentage wasn’t of your race And I’d got my white skin on my face Forbidden love, bought you disgrace Were you returned to your birthplace At your desk there’s an empty space How I long to see your pretty face Were you returned to your birthplace? I can’t contact you through cyber space And have to hide my tear stained face All thoughts of you I've been told to erase I can’t contact you through cyber space Young Fatima vanished without a trace I wish that we could just touch base Does her body now rot in a suit case Young Fatima vanished without a trace Forbidden love, bought you disgrace Were you returned to your birthplace I can’t contact you through cyber space Young Fatima vanished without a trace Monorhyme form that I've amended with a repeated line and the first line of each stanza making up the final stanza Fatima Poetry Contest Sponsored by Kai Michael Neumann 11/13/20
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Goldsmith Avatar
December 1, 2020 at 7:14 AM
Congratulations on your win. What a tragic story. A "wonderful" write. Enjoy your win with a hug.................
Fowler Avatar
November 30, 2020 at 10:18 AM
Chilling Jan - very nice penning! :) Congratulations on the win! Linda
Agustin Avatar
November 30, 2020 at 12:30 AM
Thanks for sharing this. Congrats likewise. God bless you.
Andresen Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 11:15 AM
- Congratulations on your win in the Fatima contest, Jan :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Medders Tobechi Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 7:48 AM
Very well written and informative Jan. The monorhyme is skillfully done. Congrats. Janis
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 7:09 AM
While the poem is touching, compassionate and awesomely rendered yet it is of utmost importance to know the truth about honour killings. First of all many are publicised but are actually fake false cases and stories , like the recent best seller story on a supposed honour killing of a Jordanian was shown to be fake. Secondly honour killing is a cultural thing that happens among Arabs, Indians, Pakistanis etc for personal cultural reasons and have nothing to do with religion. Islam totally forbids honour killing. Then there are honour killings done in a fit of rage or by individuals on medications that are known to cause aggression. My own son was once prescribed antidepressants for PTSD after he suffered an accident and these come with a warning label so we had to stop the meds as he was becoming too violent.
Kamoonpuri Avatar
November 29, 2020 at 7:11 AM
Read this passage I copy pasted to enlighten on the truth: By Tom Ough, Friday 8th July 2016 "..the practice ( of honour killings) ..takes place predominantly in India or Pakistan, it has also happened in Sikh, Hindu and Christian families. “It doesn’t have anything to do with religion - it’s about control,” says documentary maker Sharmeen Obaid-Chinoy. Her Oscar-winning film, is.. A Girl in the River, '. "
Faulkner Avatar
November 15, 2020 at 3:35 PM
Your monorhyme tells a painful story with tenderness and respect, hoping it does well in the contest~
Allison Avatar
November 16, 2020 at 6:14 AM
Thanks Michelle, I wasnt sure what Kai was after on the 'Fatima' theme:-) hugs Jan xx
Leffanta Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 12:56 PM
WELL done, Jan! I often wonder what other planet people are from, as all I ever wished for my daughter was that she was healthy and happy with the freedom to make her own choices. I do not understand people who want to make their children into someone else! Aloha! Rico
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:13 PM
she is lucky to have such a wonderful father:-) hugs jan xx
Y. Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 7:14 AM
Hi Jan, You wrote such a well written poem about a tragic and horrific story. A person should be free to love whoever they fall in love with. Sad, but good content and rhymes. Best wishes in the contest. Have a wonderful weekend- Alexis
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:13 PM
thanks Alexis there is still so much prejudice and children who are living a western lifestyle are expected to conform with their parents wishes :-( hugs jan xx
Watt Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 11:47 PM
Heartbreaking subject matter. Amazing monorhyme. Hugs ~ John
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:05 PM
I do surprise with a more serious poem from time to time:-) I originally started off with free verse but then challenged myself to write using monorhyme:-) hugs Jan x
Brul Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 9:11 PM
Oh so very heart-piercing dear Jan.. So very sad...But you did this profound poem excellently..Goodluck. Blessings..
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:04 PM
thanks JCB:-) hugs Jan xx
Roper Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 6:04 PM
beautiful poem Jan, good luck in the contest. Hugs eve
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:03 PM
thanks so much Eve:-) hugs jan xx
Lawrence Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 5:37 PM
Jan, Very strong ...a call to the unknown ...a beckon, a hope ,a yearning, a voice seeking connection. It is clear and memories arise of the time they shared. Thank you for this. Susan
Allison Avatar
November 14, 2020 at 5:03 PM
Thanks Susan:-) hugs jan xx
Krutsinger Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:33 PM
Good luck in the contest. A completely imaginative write.
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:36 PM
thanks Caren:-) hugs jan xx
Mcintosh Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:09 PM
This contest was a difficult one and you gave it such a incredible write! I appreciate your lovely poem and it touches hearts with it's depth and insight. A inspiration indeed, coloring the thoughts with melancholy and reflections of such horrific injustice. God bless you for writing about it. Love your pen!
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 4:14 PM
Thanks Regina, I'm not sure if its what Kai is looking for but I am so happy the poem turned out like this, the original start was free verse:-) hugs Jan xx
Michael Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 3:50 PM
Well done...I like what you did here...
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 3:59 PM
Thanks Arturo:-) hugs Jan xx
Cunningham Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 2:27 PM
Hard to believe that this still goes on today Jan, that sort of thinking belongs in medieval times. Well written and good luck. Tom
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 2:29 PM
Thanks Tom:-) hugs jan xx
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November 13, 2020 at 1:57 PM
Good work on a difficult subject Jan, a marvellous Monorhyme... Belle x
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 2:17 PM
Thanks Belle:-) hugs Jan xx
Buhagiar Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 1:41 PM
Difficult to write such a monorhyme. You did well. ~~
Allison Avatar
November 13, 2020 at 1:46 PM
Thanks Victor, my original poem was going to be free verse but i got this idea and went with it:-) hugs jan xx
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