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For Them, He Now Barely Exists

Forlorn and forsaken, for them he now barely exists Alive but forgotten, his soul pines away, alone and lonely They leap and laugh and love, leading their merry lives Drained of joy he waits, longing for a glimmer, a spark Alive but forgotten, his soul pines away, alone and lonely Today is his birthday; might they send greetings his way Drained of joy, he waits, longing for a glimmer, a spark Will they pick up the phone, sing him a gay melody Today is his birthday; might they send greetings his way The afternoon shadows lengthen; the daylight grows dim Will they pick up the phone, sing him a gay melody Hope crawls into a corner and wipes a tear from its eye The afternoon shadows lengthen, the daylight grows dim They head off to a gala evening; fate seals his cruel decree Hope crawls into a corner and wipes a tear from its eye They drink, they eat, they are merry; all's well in their world They head off to a gala evening; fate seals his cruel decree They leap and laugh and love, leading their merry lives They eat, they drink, they are merry; all's well in their world Forlorn and forsaken; for them, he now barely exists...

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Date: 1/9/2019 1:53:00 PM
Wow. So sad, and yet well written with this challenging Pantoum form! Congratulations for your win! :)
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/9/2019 2:47:00 PM
Thank you, Heidi, for your encouraging feedback on this poem, despite how negatively things turned out. :) gw
Date: 1/8/2019 10:49:00 PM
Beautifully done - the pantoum was an excellent choice, Gershon. Congrats on your well deserved top win.
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/9/2019 12:37:00 PM
Thank you for the positive feedback on this 'negative' poem, Line! :)
Date: 1/8/2019 5:17:00 PM
How sad - so well written that I began to feel real empathy for the neglected man. Congratulations,Gershon. A touching poem.
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/9/2019 12:36:00 PM
Thank you for the feedback, Wendy. :)
Date: 1/8/2019 1:28:00 PM
I feel for this poor lonely man; well crafted pantoum, gw!
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/9/2019 12:36:00 PM
As well one should. He doesn't deserve the treatment he gets, but such is too often the way of the world...
Date: 1/6/2019 8:10:00 PM
Tough form very well done Gershon...
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/6/2019 9:18:00 PM
It took me a few seconds to figure out what you meant by 'tough form.' I think I've got it now, though. Thank you very much, Charlie. Best wishes, Gershon
Date: 1/6/2019 7:24:00 PM
A well written pantoum, orchestrated to perfection,
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Gershon Wolf
Date: 1/6/2019 9:17:00 PM
Wow. Thanks for the appraisal, Pixie! Appreciated. ~ Gershon

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