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FIRST  PLACE

 September 22, 2023

" Floating, Fading, Fluttering" Words Poetry Contest

 Sponsor: Constance La France

 

years and years have gone by… all the tiny fragments of life blended in coherence  when I met my first love again in the lustre of twilight sunset, beside the ancient dock with grey planks,  my heart fluttering, probably his too. The champagne rays of sun surrounding our existence,  glimmering with a gorgeous glow,  We remembered what we lost!  As if this is our first, and last - no tomorrow!  I remembered picking of the sprawled jasmine flower-buds at dawn,  with pearls of dew still glinting on them,  remembered the necklaces made,  priceless than of glistening diamonds.  remembered getting drenched with occasional drizzle of rain - like waves of music caressing our hearts,  when we savoured the ambrosial togetherness.  We remembered the long walks holding hands, yearning spreading the electrifying hues of our dream,  As if we would never let each other go!  After years and years, our eyes meet in the shimmering light of dusk,  I see our hearts glow in the twilight hours,  drowned in the same enthralling light,  encompassed  by the same engulfing trance,  And once again our fluttering hearts melt  in the cascade of love!

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Date: 10/9/2023 2:28:00 PM
Mala, excellent writing and congratulations on your win in my contest, Constance
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Date: 10/1/2023 9:20:00 PM
Back with congrats on this gem
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Date: 9/29/2023 10:37:00 AM
- Year after year with an eternal round dance in the waltz of love - the eyes of passion exchange glances ... a romantic and beautiful poem, Mala :) - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - I wish you a lovely weekend :) - hugs
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Date: 9/29/2023 10:45:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Anne-Lise. I feel inspired by your poems, Dear Friend! Your poems are very original!Love and Hugs ~
Date: 9/28/2023 2:53:00 PM
a beautiful write...romantic in it own way...of the yearning and the remembrance. I loved the upbeat ending verse. 'fluttering hearts' grabbed me. Well done, Sara
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Date: 9/29/2023 5:42:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Sara, for your beautiful comment. Your encouraging words inspired me - will look forward to reading more of your remarkable poems. Love and Hugs ~
Date: 9/28/2023 7:45:00 AM
Lovely write, sweet lady. Congratulations and God bless you, Much love, Gina
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Date: 9/29/2023 5:39:00 AM
Thank you so much, Dear Gina. You are one of the sweetest friends here. I enjoy your poems, and your loving presence.
Date: 9/28/2023 2:42:00 AM
This meeting after years in the shimmering light of dusk is as emotionally charged as your first meeting beside the ancient dock. Very romantic and written with fervor in your beautiful flowing style. Enjoyed much ! Congratulations dear Mala on your high placement.
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Date: 9/29/2023 5:38:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Valsa. Your comment is more beautiful than my poem. Enjoy reading your poems with remarkable style and vocabulary, and get inspired.
Date: 9/27/2023 5:53:00 PM
Simply stunning. A poem readers will fall in love. the words embrace us in warmth every line is a gem ...
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Date: 9/29/2023 5:35:00 AM
Thank you, Dear Debjani. Appreciate your thoughtful, inspiring words.
Date: 9/27/2023 2:03:00 PM
ahhh, the hearts that flutter in love. Nothing else like it, and this poem is very pretty!
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Date: 9/27/2023 4:27:00 PM
Thank you, Andrea. Your comment is so beautiful!
Date: 9/26/2023 8:37:00 AM
Dear Mala, this is such a gloriously romantic, exquisite and tender poem full of sweet love- lost and rekindled over many years. Such wonderful poetic lines full of vivid imagery so masterfully described that it’s so easy to picture the scenes that play out,’The champagne rays of sun’ ‘ pearls of dew‘’glow in the twilight hours’, Heavenly. Good luck in the contest! I loved it! Hugs and smiles to you my poetic friend. Xx
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Date: 9/26/2023 8:47:00 AM
Dearest Christina, I feel over the moon when receive your inspiring comments. I am fortunate to have found such a poet as my friend, Dear Christina! I am also fortunate to read your amazing poems - this is my learning journey. Love and hugs ~ Mala
Date: 9/23/2023 3:42:00 AM
This is so lovely and romantic.. a real journey of love that has lasted over time.. this would have been perfect for the real love contest also... You have a wonderful way with words..
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Date: 9/23/2023 6:41:00 AM
Thank you, Dear SO, for always being so supportive and kind. Your comments are really precious on my learning journey. Best wishes ~
Date: 9/22/2023 4:36:00 PM
Very lovely poem dear lovely Malabika! Good luck and best wishes & regards, have a nice day ~AA
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Date: 9/22/2023 4:47:00 PM
Thank you, Dear Poet. I really appreciate you reading my poems. Thank you for the inspiring comment.

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