Fast Food On a Diet

View that cholesterol wad Sizzling cheeseburger Hold the veggies, add ketchup Tape burger to thighs Hungry heart pulsates Thump, thump, thump Stop!
April 28, 2011 *Entry for Gwendolen’s Fast Food Epulaeryu contest PS -- Some are misunderstanding. The "Stop" is the sound of the heart stopping when cholesterol clogs the arteries.
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Brown Avatar
May 7, 2011 at 6:53 AM
Congratulations Carolyn on your win in Gwendolen's contest. Love, Carol
Onclaud Avatar
May 7, 2011 at 2:22 AM
a calorific ," cellulitic ( ?)delight", carols... best cheers for the glowing win! :) huggs!
Dietrich Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 8:40 PM
Congratulations, CArolyn. This was sure to be a winner.
Ronthorpe Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 3:11 PM
Awesome! I especially liked the taping the burgers to thighs, brilliant! Very good.
Skyles-Theoklapoet Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 1:31 PM
Wow terrific 2nd.place win Carolyn.You take care.~LOTS OF LUV~Teresa
Horne Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 1:27 PM
Wow, a second here and another first, I see - well done, my friend : ) This one's scary LOL
Buckeridge Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 12:45 PM
A well deserved win, this is a fab epulaeryu :o)
Richards Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 12:37 PM
So funny, Carolyn!!! Congratulations on a great entry!!!
Poet Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 11:52 AM
Congrats Carolyn on your 2nd place win!Visit me--kash
Phookan Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 11:23 AM
Congrats Carolyn on your super win.burger anytime, cholesterol or no cholesterol :) wonderful write here...Love,gautami
Song Avatar
May 6, 2011 at 7:54 AM
Carolyn--reading C.L.'s comments below. I concur with him! You were the only entry that expressed concern from the woman's angle- first on the lips, then on the hips theme. It's as tho you were in a dilemma in this piece which I enjoyed. Sizzling and u knew it was unhealthy YET u modified it to a more unhealthier meal...then the heart gives out! The fast food joints should just give us gals duct tape to affix it to our thighs! Sure would be faster! High five girl! Congrats! Gwendolen
Vh Avatar
May 1, 2011 at 9:24 AM
I love "Tape burger to thighs"! Well done.
Poet Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 6:54 PM
LOL!Wonderful write!!Best wishes---kash
La France Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 5:07 PM
Yikes, that sizzling cheese burger sounded so good until the Stop! Best of luck in the contest. I have a weight scale in front of my refrigerator which gives one pause, but it will not fit in my purse~~
Oguejiofor Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 5:01 PM
I need to paste this poem on my fridge door or probably have it in my purse ;) very nice!!!
Locksley Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 3:28 PM
The cholestarol wads can lead to flatlines. I've seen a lot of entries about burgers for this contest. It makes me want to write about some decadent dessert like Dairy Queen smoothies! Good luck in the contest. Best to you, Diane
Horne Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 2:24 PM
Great write on the perils of cheeseburgers (guess what I've just stuffed myself silly on?) Wish I'd read this first...LOL
Brown Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 1:14 PM
I enjoyed reading your poetry today Carolyn. Wishing you a wonderful weekend filled with inspiration. I hope the sun shines down upon you and brings joy into your heart. Love, Carol
K. Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 9:47 AM
oh goshhhh now I want a Burger!!! why did you have to say stop??? Haha :) I think I am gaining weight with all these yummy writes! & yup I'd gladly have Burger King over McDonald's lol-- you'd have to visit branches over here to get those free massages though ;) hugs :)
Dietrich Avatar
April 29, 2011 at 12:05 AM
hahaha, it was so good until you said stop!
Johnson Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 11:51 PM
LWe both wrote about burgers. Actually I hardly ever stop at a fast food place. But when I was working there was a little restaurant across the street that made the most delicious hamburgers. And I had a bigger appetite in those days. Good luck to you. Love, Joyce
Buckeridge Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 11:45 PM
Great Epulaeryu Carolyn! This will make me think twice about eating a Juciy fat burger! Good luck in the contest. Oh and thank you for your kind comments xxx
Mister Roboto Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 11:24 PM
Nice reminder. And yes I hold the veg add the sugary ketchup! and yes the name of the poet is Randy Pritts. He is good! A couple good veteran poems. ~JSLambert J O E Y ! lol
Gorelick Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 6:24 PM
LNC..I will never eat a burger again without thinking of it taped to my thighs..sigh..good luck with the v8 juice...lol. BG
Maverick Avatar
April 28, 2011 at 4:04 PM
I must say Carolyn, i have no beef with this poem and am sure it will rate well in the contest! also soup mail reply!
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