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Famous Last Line

My Brief Sweet Breath of Yesterday You stole my breath away that day we met. As dark clouds burst, you led me by my arm inside a small café out of the wet, but I could not escape your rain of charm! With idle chat, you knew how to disarm me. How you poured it on! I was a flower that blossomed from your smile so soft and warm as there we lingered for more than an hour. I watched your moving lips and felt their power, just thinking of them placed upon my own! Then suddenly my reverie turned sour. You reached into your wallet; I was shown a photo of your lovely fiancé. You were my brief sweet breath of yesterday! You Were You were my brief sweet breath of yesterday, a fresh red rose too beautiful too last, and I, the fool who let you slip away. You were my brief sweet breath of yesterday. Would love have withered had I made you stay? Through poetry, I resurrect the past. You were my brief sweet breath of yesterday - a fresh red rose too beautiful too last. Second Poem Written March 11,2016 for the Famous Last Line contest of Laura Loo The first one a sonnet, but the second a triolet about a different situation

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Date: 4/23/2016 3:57:00 PM
A fine triolet. What could have been makes for interesting speculation and nostalgia. P.S. Was she lovelier than you in that photo? Just curious....
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Date: 3/20/2016 11:43:00 PM
Andrea, Congratulations on your awesome "Famous last line win." ~LINDA~
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:36:00 PM
Well done and a novel approach with two different forms. congratulations on your win. Love, Joyce
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:21:00 PM
Back to congratulate you on your win:)
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Date: 3/17/2016 9:00:00 PM
H Andrea, Congratulations on your win in the contest. I do love the simple and beautiful way you present each poem. Each is beautiful in its own right. I enjoyed each write. Your words of Love always caress the heart Andrea. This is definitely a seven for a double delight and they go into my faves....MIKE.
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Date: 3/17/2016 8:16:00 PM
Dropping back with my congrats Andrea:-) No matter what form you write in you always nail it ! hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/17/2016 5:44:00 PM
Congrats on your win, Andrea :)
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Date: 3/17/2016 11:51:00 AM
Andrea, I love these triolets, I have never used that form, but I think I may try it. Awesome poems, thank you for being a part of my contest Congrats on your placement :)-luloo *Smiles*
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Date: 3/16/2016 10:03:00 PM
G'day Andrea ... your sonnets never fail and your bonus second charm is just as delightful - Lindsay
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Date: 3/16/2016 3:09:00 AM
Language is so malleable ... both poems have their own unique flavor to them. And you do really well in the triolet form ... it really is a pretty way of writing (only wish I tried it more). Perhaps I ought to try for this contest before it fills up ... lol.
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Date: 3/13/2016 4:51:00 PM
Dear Andrea Done well, expressed with perfection just a wonderful piece all around, loved them both, what a elegant blending of flow, glad I stopped by to read on your site tonight, cheri
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Date: 3/13/2016 10:14:00 AM
this is well expressed, both poems are wonderful...excellent you Andrea
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Date: 3/13/2016 8:46:00 AM
I enjoyed both the poems Andrea:}"a fresh red rose too beautiful to last" - Lovely line..
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Date: 3/13/2016 8:21:00 AM
Andrea, both poems are beautiful, your line "through poetry, I resurrect the past" really touched my soul, I am loving this 7 ~
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Date: 3/13/2016 4:49:00 AM
Well done Andrea. Enjoyed reading. A wonderful entry.
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Date: 3/12/2016 6:36:00 PM
both poems are gorgeous, andrea! what a pleasure to read your work!
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Date: 3/12/2016 5:48:00 PM
I adore both versions of the poem Andrea - love the bitter sweet ending - good luck with the contest :-) a very well deserved 7 from me:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 3/12/2016 4:35:00 PM
The repeating lines make this poem perfect Andrea. You know how to use them to make an impact. I loved both and this bitter sweet lament the best! ; ) I gave it a #7
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Date: 3/12/2016 3:12:00 PM
Very beautiful Andrea....so lovely
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Date: 3/12/2016 2:32:00 PM
Oh my, I am caught exactly in that place this evening Andrea. Waiting for the phone to ring as we speak....you express my torment so well. Fantastic poem.
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Date: 3/12/2016 1:31:00 PM
WOMAN...This is one of your BEST. How you dance with words...I'm just...enthralled. You played to your audience. She did say she would go for romance. Silly me. I got her and Lin Lane confused and I wrote a funny one...thinking Lin was the sponsor. Oh well! ;) Your first stanza....my favorite. It's just...PERFECT. Yes, I'm gushing....I loved it.
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Date: 3/12/2016 12:20:00 PM
Beautiful unforgettable memory penned wonderfully my lovely friend. Good luck, bl
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Date: 3/12/2016 10:16:00 AM
Very nice, Andrea......an exercise and a creative process, indeed.
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