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** This is a form I invented called "QARINAGE" - I hope you enjoy it. **

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oh, how a fair breeze of Autumn can stir my heart with reprieves - the redolent leaves remembrance of romance with you in a blur soft eyes in a camber of absinthe and amber wheaty hair spilling like corn silk, to shoulders framing two spicy bow lips as they smoldered - falling like leaves ... for you oh, how this time lifts me back to a dream our ivy-clad schools, such unripened fools a world as our oyster, and raw, it would seem escaped to the woods - discarding our goods we swam on a blanket of bright, leafy death straining in passions to fever our breath - falling like leaves ... for you oh, how the chill always kindled our flame pining each week for the rose of your cheek weekends, adoring the ways that you came our fleshy memoirs 'neath branches and stars each mutual climax, far sweeter than last the moments exhausted, like us, far too fast - falling like leaves ... for you oh, Autumn still sings in my sinews today the libertine flood yet coursing my blood you waken my core in the most vexing way when October flies I ache for your sighs tho' bones are now brittle, the mem'ries remain chaotic obsessions and prurient pains someday I'll lose them, like tears in the rain - falling like leaves for you ... still falling ... in Deja vu. ~ ~ 3rd Place ~ in the "Strand Choice B, Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Your Choice Seasons-Festivals Verse, Any Form" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Your Choice (6), Any Form, Any Theme" Poetry Contest, Brian Strand, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "2019 Poetry Marathon Mile 4" Poetry Contest, Mark Toney, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Into The Woods" Poetry Contest, Silent One, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 2nd Place ~ in the "Best Rhyming Poem July Thru September" Poetry Contest, John Hamilton, Judge & Sponsor. ~ 1st Place ~ in the "Autumn Romance" Poetry Contest, Julie Rodeheaver, Judge & Sponsor. ( This is a form I created called "QARINAGE" - it has a very unusual-but-specific rhyme scheme and rhythm with a repeating refrain that is also the title. This is a re-working of an older piece )

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Date: 7/2/2019 3:33:00 AM
Gregory congrats on your placement!;)
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/15/2019 10:01:00 PM
Thank you so much, Brenda! :-)
Date: 7/1/2019 4:20:00 PM
This romantic poem shines a beacon on your talent my friend. Congratulations on your second placement in Brian's contest. A first place for me! : ) xxoo
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 8/15/2019 10:01:00 PM
Oh, many kind thanks, my friend, I so greatly appreciate it - this one is VERY special to me. Blessings! :o) <3
Date: 6/13/2019 10:44:00 AM
Back with more congrats, Gregory.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 6/28/2019 4:54:00 AM
Thank you, Line.
Date: 1/13/2019 10:16:00 AM
A deep poem and one I enjoyed reading, however I did struggle a bit with your rhyme scheme...Congrats on your placement in the contest..
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 1/13/2019 11:34:00 AM
Thank you so much - the rhyme scheme is called Qarinage: A, Bb, A, Cc, Dd, Refrain, etc., and the rhythm changes as syllables dictate. There was an entire contest in this scheme last year, and a lot of fun.
Date: 1/13/2019 8:45:00 AM
Hi Greg, I read this before I enjoyed then and I enjoy it now. Congratulations on placing again with this beautiful write:-) Alexis
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 5:00:00 PM
Thank you so very kindly, Alexis, that means a lot to me ... I'm pleased you enjoyed it! :-) <3
Date: 1/1/2019 1:41:00 PM
Wonderfully executed, Gregory. Congrats on your gold medal win.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 4:59:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Line - so appreciated, friend! :-) <3
Date: 12/28/2018 8:49:00 PM
I enjoyed reading this great poem, Greg , very well written . Congratulations on your win! Happy New Year. Hugs Eve ~`*
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 4:59:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Eve, thank you so very much! :-) <3
Date: 12/27/2018 1:46:00 PM
Greg, congratulations on your passionate and well-penned piece, as well as your first-place win!! I hope and trust the holidays are being kind to you, my friend. Many, many blessings to you and yours! :) Bartholomew
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 4:58:00 PM
The same to you, My Good Friend, and thank you very much for the kind words - all the best! :-)
Date: 12/27/2018 1:43:00 PM
Another first-place win for this poem. Congratulations on your success in Mark's contest! Best wishes, Carolyn
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 4:57:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Carolyn - blessings! :-) <3
Date: 12/27/2018 1:34:00 PM
Greg, congrats on your "Deja vu" first-place win on mile 4 of my 2019 Poetry Marathon contest! This poem is captivating! ~Mark
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 3/26/2019 4:56:00 PM
Thank you very kindly, Mark, this one is very special to me ... for reasons that are probably obvious. I am honored by my placement - blessings, my friend! :-)
Date: 5/26/2018 7:21:00 AM
A very lyrical write Greg and interesting form.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/26/2018 7:58:00 AM
Many kind thanks, James - I'm pleased you enjoyed it, my friend! :-)
Date: 5/22/2018 1:01:00 PM
Nyssssse...! This awesome, so complex and elegant. Love the format, I think I'll give it a try!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/26/2018 7:57:00 AM
Thank you very much, Lycia - I look forward to reading your entry! Blessings, my friend! :-) <3
Date: 5/18/2018 10:35:00 AM
This was amazingly beautiful. The best thing I've read in a long time. It looks like quite a challenge for the contest.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/26/2018 7:57:00 AM
What a wonderful comment, Madeline - these words made my day, thank you so very much! Blessings! :-) <3
Date: 5/8/2018 1:29:00 PM
Thanks for directing us to this little gem Greg, not sure if I can come up with a poem but I'll see if my muse is willing:-) hugs JAN XX
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/8/2018 7:05:00 PM
Thank you kindly, Jan, and I KNOW you can rock this form! It's really a lot of fun and an enjoyable rhythm. Blessings, Friend - I'm looking forward to reading! :-) <3
Date: 5/7/2018 8:24:00 AM
Greg, this is such a beautifully penned poem, I am not surprised it is a top winner. I love this form created by you and what a great example for your current contest, I do not know if I can top your beauty here but I will give it a whirl ~
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 5/8/2018 7:03:00 PM
Thank you so very much, Constance, I so appreciate the kind words - and I'm SURE you can top it, as you are a very talented poet ... I am just a hack, and still learning this poetry thing! :-) <3
Date: 10/27/2017 3:30:00 PM
Congratulations Greg on having this fantastic poem number one on the Best New Poems list! You already know how much I loved this from my fave! : )
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/27/2017 3:45:00 PM
That's very sweet of you, Connie, and I am so appreciative of your kindness, friendship and encouragement ... you are one of the brightest stars in the Poetry Soup sky, and I am honored to know you and get such wonderful comments from you! Blessings, friend! :-) <3
Date: 10/24/2017 3:49:00 AM
One word "Incredible"....
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/24/2017 9:45:00 PM
Very kind of you, Stephen, thanks so much! :-)
Date: 10/23/2017 10:28:00 PM
Simply Beautiful!!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/24/2017 9:44:00 PM
Thank you so kindly, Fariq - much appreciated! :-)
Date: 10/22/2017 8:57:00 PM
Truly enjoyable. Such a beautiful write.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 10:27:00 PM
Thank you very much - I greatly appreciate the kindness! :-)
Date: 10/21/2017 6:49:00 AM
So beautiful! A wordsmith treasure! Congrats on a well-deserved win, Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:14:00 PM
Thank you so much, Kim - I greatly appreciate it! :-) <3
Date: 10/21/2017 1:32:00 AM
Oh man I am ecstatic for you. This is Masterclass all over again. Congratulations. Remember when you were still doubting? Lookit you go man.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:17:00 PM
Very kind of you, Jannie - I greatly appreciate your comment, Brother ... you were the first person to reach out to me here and the first to follow me, I believe. I probably wouldn't have stuck around if it hadn't been for you and John ... I didn't think anyone would ever read my stuff, lol. Blessings, Bud! :-)
Date: 10/20/2017 11:55:00 PM
Now you have the number one poem again, that is amazing, very worthy of all the accolades, congrats Greg!
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:19:00 PM
Many thanks, Brother - was just telling Jannie that I probably wouldn't still be here if it hadn't been for you guys and your encouragement, and I certainly wouldn't be writing as much as I am. I so appreciate your friendship and support - beyond words! :-)
Date: 10/20/2017 8:10:00 PM
Felt almost like I was reading John Milton -- beautifully constructed verse, Greg! My best regards - Cheers! :) john
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:20:00 PM
Wow - I am honored that I'd even be in a sentence with such a name - thank you so much, John - I truly appreciate the wonderful comment! Blessings, friend! :-)
Date: 10/20/2017 5:57:00 PM
Hi Greg, This is just beautiful. The rhymes and imagery are top notch. The line "Falling like leaves...for you" added more depth to a well written piece. It's well deserving of the accolades it has received :-)Alexis
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:23:00 PM
Hi! Thanks so much, Alexis - it felt like it needed that refrain, just to keep it all in context, (and it had a sing-songy kind of rhythm to it) ... blessings for the wonderful comments, my friend!
Date: 10/20/2017 1:28:00 PM
Hello Gregory,I like your poetry. I like the first verse and last verse the best. have a nice day my friend.
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Gregory Richard Barden
Date: 10/22/2017 2:25:00 PM
Hi, Darlene - and thank you very much for the sweet comments - I'm so pleased you liked this one! :-) <3
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