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Exile

The dreary drudgery of detachment straps the stinging strings of loneliness around the bleeding bastion of my soul when you abandoned me to dwell in an eternal emptiness where my heart lays hidden and wounded deep in the dire depths of secluded shadows beneath a sun that has been washed away by dark cumulus clouds colliding on my horizon where the sounds of thunder ring in my ears as terrible tears fall from trembling eyes when you exiled me from the garden of your heart and left mine to wilt and die in a black wilderness of empty emotions where nothing will grow again from the sacred seeds of love 4/27/23 contest Writing Challenge-Words with "X" sponsor Constance La France "EXILE"

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Date: 5/12/2023 7:27:00 AM
Well this is certainly a somber piece Frederic.. One wonders when you might attempt a blacker Perspective.? Not saying that you should btw I suppose the correct comment for this type of Write is to remark on how dispiriting it all is oh Woe is me.' LOL)) so much for encouragement From me..No doubt I have indeed just broken The rules yet have smashed them..Thats violence with no intent..? Or should that content? I enjoyed commenting anyhow.'
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Date: 5/5/2023 1:09:00 AM
- ... die ... in a black wilderness of empty emotions ...so sad, Frederic - Congratulations on your win in the contest :) - hugs
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Date: 5/4/2023 6:23:00 AM
Frederic, thank you for sharing your excellent poem with us in my Writing Challenge congratulations and I love the music !
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Date: 5/3/2023 9:41:00 PM
WoW! Frederic, You penned a good poem on the chosen word. I found it to be sad and dark. Congratulations on your 1st place win. Have a wonderful evening-Alexis
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Date: 4/28/2023 9:56:00 AM
Wow Frederic. This is very dark but then so is loneliness. You always seem to have a great understanding of your thoughts and skillfully put them to paper. A good read (as usual). Haven excellent weekend my friend:)
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