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Escaping From the Concrete Jungle

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' ' ' ' ' ' ' ' ' ' ' my dream is to reside in a cottage by the sea a safe haven where I’m not surrounded by enormous towering skyscraper buildings where everything is dreary, lifeless, dull and so grey I yearn for w i d e open spaces where I fill my lungs with pure unpolluted air. Waking up every morning to the sight of seagulls flying high in azure sky and seeing . waves crash onto soft golden sand with palm trees which sway in a cool breeze To feel the warm sun on my face and wind in my hair but sadly in reality it’s just a dream. I’m stuck in an ugly concrete jungle until the day I die Something Concrete Contest Sponsored by Maureen McGreavy 3/25/18

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Paul Callus

Date: 3/30/2018 3:54:00 PM

Well done, Jan! A concrete poem containing a cute cottage and a dream which many would like to become reality. I'm afraid that even small islands like ours will one day fall victims of speculators! Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 3/30/2018 3:56:00 PM

Thanks for dropping by Paul. I hope our little island never gets transformed into a concrete jungle ... in fact i read today that people are leaving and the population isn't rising like they'd hoped. hugs Jan xx

Cheryl Hoffman

Date: 3/26/2018 9:17:00 PM

Love the message in this creative concrete cottage form Jan; Very well done! Good luck in the contest!~Che :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2018 4:05:00 AM

Thanks Che:-) it was a challenge for me to write but I did have fun and have had some lovely comments:-) hugs jan xx

Sandra Haight

Date: 3/26/2018 8:18:00 PM

This is great, Jan! Very creative artwork, and I was happy to see that you don't really live in a concrete jungle, but you certainly expressed the sad emotions as if you did so well. All the best for the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2018 4:04:00 AM

Thanks Sandra, I struggle with things like this as I am not artistic at all. I've seen some awesome poems for the contest and as its a premier one I doubt it wil place but i had fun with the challenge:-) hugs jan xx

John Gondolf

Date: 3/26/2018 2:02:00 PM

Nicely done, Jan. My escape would be a log cabin in the woods with a gentle flowing stream nearby. Best of luck in the contest. John

Jan Allison
Date: 3/27/2018 4:03:00 AM

Sounds idyllic John. I'm glad I live in a little village and we have no high rise buildings on our Island so it is pure poetic licence:-) hugs jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 3/25/2018 7:14:00 PM

oh you were SO clever, Jan. I hope I can think of such a cool way to do this contest. This kind of thing is so difficult with me to have to match it up with Soup's system and even think of an idea. This should place!!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2018 3:54:00 AM

It took a while to compose as I'm not arty so I'm delighted with the result:-) hugs jan xx

Fj Thomas

Date: 3/25/2018 5:46:00 PM

Ahh sounds wonderful Jan! I hope I haven't missed any mail from you. I logged in yesterday and my inbox was empty for some reason. All of my messages were gone.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/26/2018 3:53:00 AM

Thanks Shadow I struggle with 'arty creative forms' as I'm no good at art but I am overjoyed at all the comments i've had on this one. Yes I had mailed you quite recently but I'm darned if i can remember what it was about:-( soup is acting strange wish they'd focus on the glitches and not the adverts:-( hugs jan x

Carole Duet

Date: 3/25/2018 4:42:00 PM

What a heavenly dream! I hate those concrete jungles. Lovely dream, lovely poem. Love the little cabin image too. Very clever.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 4:44:00 PM

It's fiction for me Carole as I live in a village on a little Island and even our capital Douglas is not a concrete jungle:-) hugs Jan xx

Dale Gregory Cozart

Date: 3/25/2018 1:07:00 PM

It is truly amazing how you did this! Again you've shown how clever you are.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 4:40:00 PM

You are so kind Dale, I just try my best and I found this quite challenging to create:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 3/25/2018 12:02:00 PM

Your rural cottage setting sounds euphoric, right down to the smoke escaping the chimney. Great work on many levels, Jan.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 4:39:00 PM

Thanks Lin, I'm delighted with the comments as I am not artistic at all and found this quite challenging to create:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 3/25/2018 9:45:00 AM

Nicely done Jan.. I love it hugs eve

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 4:37:00 PM

Thanks Eve, it was quite a challenge as I'm not artistic at all:-) hugs Jan xx

James Inman

Date: 3/25/2018 8:09:00 AM

What artistry Jan, both your words and their shape. That is what vacations are for, they make the cottage even more special.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 4:37:00 PM

Thanks so much James. I'm actually very fortunate as we live in a small village on a little Island and we don't have sky scrapers at all:-) hugs Jan xx

Caren Krutsinger

Date: 3/25/2018 1:57:00 AM

What a darling house, and a whimsical poem, that I hope in no way describes your real feelings, Jan. Good luck in the contest!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:30:00 AM

Pure poetic licence Caren i don't live in the city just in a little village on a tiny Island in the middle of the Irish Sea :-) hugs jan xx

Laura Leiser

Date: 3/25/2018 12:22:00 AM

I really like your concrete poem, Jan! Couldn’t agree with you more! Good luck in the contest :)

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:29:00 AM

I'm glad its fiction for me Laura:-) hugs jan xx

Matthew Anish

Date: 3/25/2018 12:09:00 AM

Very nice work here! So you live in a big city? I like to go upstate in the summer although Manhattan is exciting. I live in the fabled Lower East Side. Peace & Love Matthew Anish

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:28:00 AM

No its pure poetic licence Matthew I live on a little Island, not in a cottage but I am 5 mins walk from the sea and we are surrounded by the natural beauty of the Island:-) hugs jan xx

Susan Ashley

Date: 3/24/2018 10:08:00 PM

Wow! Jan, your poem is amazing.. so clever and creative and that's just the shape.. your content, adorned with beautiful imagery, is superb! Best wishes for a win! ~Susan

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:27:00 AM

Thanks Susan, I've given it a go but I'm not artistic and found it a real challenge:-) hugs jan xx

Mick Talbot

Date: 3/24/2018 9:58:00 PM

See, now who is being creative, woot woot! Good luck in the contest... hugs Mick

Mick Talbot
Date: 3/25/2018 10:47:00 PM

You did very well, loves the smokin chimney!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:26:00 AM

I struggle to do this style of poem as i am not at all artistic:-)hugs jan xx

Line Gauthier

Date: 3/24/2018 9:00:00 PM

What a visual delight and wonderful poem to boot. A rea l beauty. Beautifully done, Maureen. Bravo.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:25:00 AM

Thanks Line:-) hugs Jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 3/24/2018 8:25:00 PM

This is so clever and beautiful, love it!

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:24:00 AM

aww thanks Arthur:-) hugs jan xx

Chris Green

Date: 3/24/2018 8:03:00 PM

Love the poem and the image of a cottage it portrays. Good luck in the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 3/25/2018 7:23:00 AM

Thanks so much Chris i am not artistic at all so i found this a real challenge:-) hugs jan xx