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Entangled

When did I become entangled in you? Your vines wrapped around my heart. Squeezing The life from me. Tighter and tighter with each breath. Your vines wrapped around my heart. To be this close was a silent dream. Tighter and tighter with each breath. Encased by you I start to scream. To be this close was a silent dream. Now I live within a silent nightmare. Encased by you I start to scream. Soon I will be unrecognizable. Now I live within a silent nightmare. Squeezing the life from me. soon I will be unrecognizable. When did I become entangled in you? Entangled Vines contest July 19, 2013 No worries I am not in a challenged relationship, drawing from past experience.

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Eileen Manassian

Date: 4/19/2020 7:54:00 PM

Loved the content and form. I've never written one of these.... at least not that I remember. You've done a fantastic job of it. Hope all is well.

Just That Archaic Poet

Date: 8/19/2013 4:54:00 PM

Though I wish the whole piece had rhymed, it truly touched me emotionally, as I am sure it has everyone else. I love it when a poet expresses a universal sentiment; I think all of us know exactly what you mean and have felt a similar way many times over. I have struggled with addiction for many years, and this also reminded me of my "entanglement" with addiction. Thank you for sharing an awesome piece :)

Milton Toran

Date: 7/23/2013 10:01:00 AM

The genius of imagery and metaphor has spoken! Well done!!...Milt

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/23/2013 2:44:00 PM

Thanks Milt I appreciate you taking a look at my poems. Take care.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/21/2013 1:03:00 AM

hey, this makes a great metaphor. I had considered going this route, using it for romance or love. Vines gone amuck. Love it.

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/21/2013 6:44:00 AM

Thanks Andrea;0)

Colleen Bono

Date: 7/19/2013 9:14:00 PM

Nicely done as usual. I am home but that is all I can say. Love Colleen

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/21/2013 6:43:00 AM

Thanks Collen

Sara Kendrick

Date: 7/19/2013 5:00:00 PM

Glad that this is past and only good is now and the future..Reads like winning material for the contest..Sara

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 6:02:00 PM

Thanks Sara, I was blessed to find the love of my life. Twenty years and counting.

Charmaine Chircop

Date: 7/19/2013 3:49:00 PM

Its all about changes from something beautiful to something so scary you d rather live without...I guess those past experiences make us a wiser person in tomorrow s choices. Excellent Richard

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 4:05:00 PM

Some make the same mistake over and over again. Thanks for commenting.

Delysia Hendricks

Date: 7/19/2013 1:44:00 PM

Oooh, nice. I like how you describe the dream evolving into a nightmare. A damn good write, Richard. Good luck in the contest with this strong entry, my friend. Licia :-)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 4:06:00 PM

Thanks can always use a bit of luck

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/19/2013 1:22:00 PM

THIS ABSOLUTELY.....WITHOUT THE SHADOW OF A DOUBT ROCKS! Ok....will calm down now. Seriously...like...how? How, Richard. This contest....I couldn't even muster a thought! This is amazing! Good job, good luck, good night! ;) I had to put that last bit in. It's almost 10:30 pm, but I'm NOT sleepy. It just sounded good! ;)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 4:08:00 PM

What a great comment, you just made my day.:0)

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/19/2013 12:49:00 PM

you had this all knitted together in a most wired way... i am impressed with the poetic appeal of your art-words... :) huggs

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 4:09:00 PM

Thanks so much Nette

Heather Ober

Date: 7/19/2013 11:48:00 AM

Oh, Rick... I can relate to this poem. You have captured the hopelessness (and near-suffocation) perfectly. I'm glad to hear you broke free! And you can add "pantoum" to the list of forms you have mastered!! :)

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 11:54:00 AM

Thanks Heather

Poet Tacito

Date: 7/19/2013 11:33:00 AM

Amazing, sad, yet poignant. Falsified love can do that to a person. Fantastic job!

Richard Lamoureux
Date: 7/19/2013 11:55:00 AM

Thanks Drake, you are on a roll today really enjoyed your wedding poem.