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ORIGINAL TITLE - AND THEN I OPENED THAT DOOR

All day long I dreamed of you Lying there so temptingly I couldn’t wait to hold you Just the thought of you filled me with desire I wanted you oh so badly… And then I opened that door The door that separated me from you To my horror I found you had gone You had simply vanished into thin air Lying there in your place was a note I slowly scanned the lilac paper It read … I’m sorry mum I couldn’t resist that last cream scone… I slammed the fridge door shut so hard it nearly fell off its hinges! 06~09~15 Submitted to Mystery Contest Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron

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Nayda Ivette Negron Flores

Date: 7/6/2016 6:31:00 PM

Congratulations Jan on the placement of the contest.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/11/2016 6:28:00 PM

Thanks Nayda:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 8/20/2015 1:20:00 AM

Congrats on ur awesome poem n win Jan!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/20/2015 3:04:00 AM

Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/19/2015 8:57:00 AM

I remember this one so funny, an. BIG congrats to you!

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2015 5:50:00 PM

Thanks Andrea I was pleased to place with it in the screwed contest:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A

Date: 8/19/2015 1:57:00 AM

Jan, Congratulations.... SKAT

Jan Allison
Date: 8/19/2015 4:01:00 AM

thanks so much Skat:-) Hugs jan xx

Mary Rotman

Date: 7/24/2015 3:24:00 PM

Very cute. You keep the reader guessing.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/24/2015 3:39:00 PM

Thanks Mary I do like to write poems with a twist at the end:-) hugs Jan xx

Carol Eastman

Date: 6/28/2015 8:51:00 AM

Yep. Great write... But you can always make more...P.l.e.a.s.e... I want some too...

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:15:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 6/24/2015 7:49:00 PM

Of COURSE you had to take the humorous route...lol! The title just totally begs for your style, Jan. Loved it! PS. So unlike you to not to have a new post everyday. I do hope you're keeping well. hugs! :-)

Jan Allison
Date: 7/4/2015 4:15:00 PM

Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

Date: 6/20/2015 7:29:00 PM

Absolutely brilliant Jan... you had me going down the wrong path completely - great stuff - Lindsay

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 11:19:00 PM

Thanks Lindsay:-) Hugs jan xx

Lawrence Eberhart

Date: 6/20/2015 5:59:00 PM

Nice twist ending. Here is a case where to poem would be better submitted without a picture. Now 2 newbie questions.. Is the contest identification required on contest submissions? Is there a way to see all contest entries?

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 6:13:00 PM

The image I posted was deliberately deceptive Lawrence lol :-) I always put which contest the poem is for - some ask for it some don't you need to see what rules the sponsor asks for - each one varies but putting specific things like visual number is important if asked for especially in the title to prevent the sponsor from reading it before judging. the only way to see entries is to read widely on the site - much easier if it is a specific form - I don't think I have ever read every entry for a contest prior to the results being shown:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser

Date: 6/20/2015 11:58:00 AM

Love the twist you clever woman, hugs//James xx

James Fraser
Date: 6/20/2015 12:09:00 PM

I love your combination then, keep them poops coming, and the twisty ones :) ;-) :0

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 12:07:00 PM

Hey James not only do I write 'poop poems' but I'm twisted too - what a combination lol:-) hugs jan xx

Daver Austin

Date: 6/20/2015 11:19:00 AM

What a criminal! If the child only knew how sweet he/she was in your affections. Like this one a lot. Love, daver

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 12:06:00 PM

Pure fiction write Daver.... BUT my son does return from university soon so it may turn out to be reality lol:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 6/20/2015 11:04:00 AM

Jan, back to read this great poem again and thanks for visiting my fantasy poem, now titled Starry Dream, finished now

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 12:05:00 PM

Oh will drop right by thanks you again for all your support:-) hugs jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders

Date: 6/20/2015 10:48:00 AM

Haha...This is great, Jan! I've never had a cream scone before...maybe I should! Hugs, Rhonda

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 10:55:00 AM

Get to the fridge before the kids lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/20/2015 9:24:00 AM

Ha ha, not what I suspected.

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 9:28:00 AM

I do like to have a twist in the end occasionally Richard:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 6/20/2015 7:58:00 AM

I love the twist; for a minute you had me walking down the wrong path:) Pehaps we can get you another cream cake from Cordina's!! hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 9:27:00 AM

Oh you sure know how to make me jealous Paul! Glad you had a lovely time out with the family:-) hugs to all Jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 6/20/2015 9:19:00 AM

Been to Fontanella's a few days ago; shared a pizza with Vale on the veranda overlooking the ramparts; the ladies had creamy cakes:) // hugs ... paul

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 8:06:00 AM

Oh I do like to write with a twist sometimes Paul and this was the ideal opportunity. Yes Yes yes to the cream cake - but it has to be at Fontanella's lol i just hope it is a little warmer than when Bob and i visited there. I am so looking forward to our holiday:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 6/20/2015 7:42:00 AM

Good one, Jan! As always....you come though with the unexpected. Lovely piece. I take it it is for a contest? Good luck. My daughter is mad cause I ate the last of the chocolate cereal. Go figure! ;)

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 7:49:00 AM

Yes its for the open door contest Eileen. My son will be back from uni soon so i can imagine this scenario happening lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso

Date: 6/20/2015 12:39:00 AM

ok you got me there! Wasn't expecting that last verse! Loved this!

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:35:00 AM

Lovely to see you back my friend and I love the creativity of your blog:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper

Date: 6/19/2015 9:48:00 PM

Oh, mom, no cream scone my fav. a 7 I love it Hugs Eve

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:35:00 AM

Son comes back from university soon -then this may become reality lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2015 8:38:00 PM

LIke how you ended it with her slamming the door. and how you tried to throw us off with the picture of a different kind of door. hahahaha

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:34:00 AM

The choice of image was very deliberate lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 6/19/2015 8:37:00 PM

oh Jan, when I read the first stanza, I got this crazy idea: hey, I want to do one and make it be a fridge door. I kind of wondered if you were going that way, and sure enough you WERE. Guess I can't do that idea. hahaha

Jan Allison
Date: 6/20/2015 4:33:00 AM

I thought it the ideal opportunity to do one of my twist at the end poems not done one for a while:-) Hugs jan xx