Jan Allison Poet Free verse

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ORIGINAL TITLE - AND THEN I OPENED THAT DOOR

Enigma

All day long I dreamed of you
Lying there so temptingly
I couldn’t wait to hold you 

Just the thought of you filled me with desire 
I wanted you oh so badly…

And then I opened that door
The door that separated me from you

To my horror I found you had gone
You had simply vanished into thin air

Lying there in your place was a note 
I slowly scanned the lilac paper 
It read …

I’m sorry mum I couldn’t resist that last cream scone…
I slammed the fridge door shut so hard it nearly fell off its hinges!


06~09~15
Submitted to Mystery Contest Sponsored by Nayda Ivette Negron

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Nayda Ivette Negron Flores July 6, 2016 at 6:31 PM Congratulations Jan on the placement of the contest. Jan Allison July 11, 2016 at 6:28 PM Thanks Nayda:-) hugs jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma August 20, 2015 at 1:20 AM Congrats on ur awesome poem n win Jan! Jan Allison August 20, 2015 at 3:04 AM Thanks Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich August 19, 2015 at 8:57 AM I remember this one so funny, an. BIG congrats to you! Jan Allison August 19, 2015 at 5:50 PM Thanks Andrea I was pleased to place with it in the screwed contest:-) hugs jan xx

Skat A August 19, 2015 at 1:57 AM Jan, Congratulations.... SKAT Jan Allison August 19, 2015 at 4:01 AM thanks so much Skat:-) Hugs jan xx

Mary Rotman July 24, 2015 at 3:24 PM Very cute. You keep the reader guessing. Jan Allison July 24, 2015 at 3:39 PM Thanks Mary I do like to write poems with a twist at the end:-) hugs Jan xx

Carol Eastman June 28, 2015 at 8:51 AM Yep. Great write... But you can always make more...P.l.e.a.s.e... I want some too... Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:15 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez June 24, 2015 at 7:49 PM Of COURSE you had to take the humorous route...lol! The title just totally begs for your style, Jan. Loved it! PS. So unlike you to not to have a new post everyday. I do hope you're keeping well. hugs! :-) Jan Allison July 4, 2015 at 4:15 PM Thanks so much for dropping by to comment.I am not at my best at the moment and have not been around lately. hugs Jan xx

Lindsay Laurie June 20, 2015 at 7:29 PM Absolutely brilliant Jan... you had me going down the wrong path completely - great stuff - Lindsay Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 11:19 PM Thanks Lindsay:-) Hugs jan xx

Lawrence Eberhart June 20, 2015 at 5:59 PM Nice twist ending. Here is a case where to poem would be better submitted without a picture. Now 2 newbie questions.. Is the contest identification required on contest submissions? Is there a way to see all contest entries? Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 6:13 PM The image I posted was deliberately deceptive Lawrence lol :-) I always put which contest the poem is for - some ask for it some don't you need to see what rules the sponsor asks for - each one varies but putting specific things like visual number is important if asked for especially in the title to prevent the sponsor from reading it before judging. the only way to see entries is to read widely on the site - much easier if it is a specific form - I don't think I have ever read every entry for a contest prior to the results being shown:-) hugs jan xx

James Fraser June 20, 2015 at 11:58 AM Love the twist you clever woman, hugs//James xx James Fraser June 20, 2015 at 12:09 PM I love your combination then, keep them poops coming, and the twisty ones :) ;-) :0 Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 12:07 PM Hey James not only do I write 'poop poems' but I'm twisted too - what a combination lol:-) hugs jan xx

Daver Austin June 20, 2015 at 11:19 AM What a criminal! If the child only knew how sweet he/she was in your affections. Like this one a lot. Love, daver Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 12:06 PM Pure fiction write Daver.... BUT my son does return from university soon so it may turn out to be reality lol:-) hugs jan xx

Constance La France June 20, 2015 at 11:04 AM Jan, back to read this great poem again and thanks for visiting my fantasy poem, now titled Starry Dream, finished now Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 12:05 PM Oh will drop right by thanks you again for all your support:-) hugs jan xx

Rhonda Johnson-Saunders June 20, 2015 at 10:48 AM Haha...This is great, Jan! I've never had a cream scone before...maybe I should! Hugs, Rhonda Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 10:55 AM Get to the fridge before the kids lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux June 20, 2015 at 9:24 AM Ha ha, not what I suspected. Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 9:28 AM I do like to have a twist in the end occasionally Richard:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus June 20, 2015 at 7:58 AM I love the twist; for a minute you had me walking down the wrong path:) Pehaps we can get you another cream cake from Cordina's!! hugs // paul Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 9:27 AM Oh you sure know how to make me jealous Paul! Glad you had a lovely time out with the family:-) hugs to all Jan xx Paul Callus June 20, 2015 at 9:19 AM Been to Fontanella's a few days ago; shared a pizza with Vale on the veranda overlooking the ramparts; the ladies had creamy cakes:) // hugs ... paul Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 8:06 AM Oh I do like to write with a twist sometimes Paul and this was the ideal opportunity. Yes Yes yes to the cream cake - but it has to be at Fontanella's lol i just hope it is a little warmer than when Bob and i visited there. I am so looking forward to our holiday:-) hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian June 20, 2015 at 7:42 AM Good one, Jan! As always....you come though with the unexpected. Lovely piece. I take it it is for a contest? Good luck. My daughter is mad cause I ate the last of the chocolate cereal. Go figure! ;) Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 7:49 AM Yes its for the open door contest Eileen. My son will be back from uni soon so i can imagine this scenario happening lol:-) hugs jan xx

Arthur Vaso June 20, 2015 at 12:39 AM ok you got me there! Wasn't expecting that last verse! Loved this! Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:35 AM Lovely to see you back my friend and I love the creativity of your blog:-) hugs Jan xx

Eve Roper June 19, 2015 at 9:48 PM Oh, mom, no cream scone my fav. a 7 I love it Hugs Eve Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:35 AM Son comes back from university soon -then this may become reality lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 19, 2015 at 8:38 PM LIke how you ended it with her slamming the door. and how you tried to throw us off with the picture of a different kind of door. hahahaha Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:34 AM The choice of image was very deliberate lol:-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich June 19, 2015 at 8:37 PM oh Jan, when I read the first stanza, I got this crazy idea: hey, I want to do one and make it be a fridge door. I kind of wondered if you were going that way, and sure enough you WERE. Guess I can't do that idea. hahaha Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:33 AM I thought it the ideal opportunity to do one of my twist at the end poems not done one for a while:-) Hugs jan xx

Ilene Bauer June 19, 2015 at 8:10 PM you are so funny, jan, and such a master at conveying that humor in your poems! i love this one especially! Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:32 AM Thanks Ilene and you know I REALLY love your style too:-) Hugs jan xx

David Brown June 19, 2015 at 6:53 PM Haha, great surprise ending Jan! Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:32 AM Thanks so much David:-) Hugs Jan xx

Tim Smith June 19, 2015 at 6:49 PM Lol....surprised it lasted that long...great twist Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:31 AM Thanks Tim not done a twisted poem for a while - good to see you back hope you had a great time:-) hugs jan xx

Frederic Parker June 19, 2015 at 6:02 PM changed direction from where I thought you were heading..well done..good luck Jan Allison June 20, 2015 at 4:30 AM Thanks Frederic I haven't written a poem with a twist for a while and this was the ideal opportunity:-) Hugs Jan xx

Constance La France June 19, 2015 at 5:17 PM Jan, this is delightful, sweet 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, we nurses Jan Allison June 19, 2015 at 5:19 PM Thanks for dropping by Broken Wings:-) hugs jan xx

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