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Elemental Concerns (Revised)

Grassy plains and fields were blanketed by tar Paved parking lots for vacant malls take their toll Abuse of resources was taken too far Ash spews from volcanoes, earthquakes on a roll Brisk breezes bring relief; sultry, summer days Be grateful as gentle gusts grace our land When hurricane winds whip fiercely, homes are razed An omen we’ve been chastised by nature’s hand Fire provides comfort on chilly winter nights But the explosion over Hiroshima Demonstrates man’s abuse of the atom’s might Keeping fire, emotions reigned, the dilemma Water gave birth to our planet’s first life forms Pollution, man-made disasters now rampant Sea life endangered as ocean water warms To preserve them, efforts must be diligent Though elements withstand ravages of time Diminishing resources reflect man’s crimes *For Barbara Gorelick's Earth, Wind, Fire and Water challenge

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Date: 9/14/2010 8:24:00 PM
I never told you congratulations yet here. I am reading some wonderful entries tonight. Great win for you on this wonderful entry. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 9/4/2010 7:36:00 AM
Many congratulations Carolyn on your win in Barbara's contest. I am forever in awe at the way you write >> James,xx
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Date: 9/3/2010 7:20:00 AM
Congratulations on the win for this wonderful poem, Carolyn
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Date: 9/2/2010 7:04:00 AM
I love the theme of this poem....how the greed of man, and the wrath of nature, take such a toll on our ailing planet....we need these reminders indeed, if we are to have a future for planet, and future generations. We cannot ignore the damage we do. Well done, Carolyn! ~ Love, Carrie
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Date: 9/2/2010 4:33:00 AM
Congratulations on your win Carolyn in Barbara Gorelick's contest "The Four Elements". Love, Carol
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Date: 9/1/2010 10:23:00 PM
Great work Carolyn. You covered all of the aspects of the elements. Congratulations. I have been gone from home for two full days and trying to catch up. Love, Joyce
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Date: 9/1/2010 10:04:00 PM
LNC, congrats my dear..This poem should be printed for all the public to read..BG
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Date: 8/13/2010 8:44:00 PM
ooooh your final couplet really spells out your theme very well!! Good entry and good luck, Carolyn. LUv, Andrea
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Date: 8/13/2010 2:44:00 PM
i really enjoyed your stanza about wind.it sounds peaceful especially when its a breeze. theres someting to think about when natural disasters happen, interesting.& great write, Carolyn.i hope your day is a breeze(: ~Always&Forever Lynette
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Date: 8/13/2010 11:37:00 AM
Very beautiful poetry, my friend. You know that I always love your nature conservation poems. I think you will do well in the challenge with this one. SMILES, Dane Ann
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Date: 8/13/2010 5:54:00 AM
wonderful Quatrain, Carolyn. good luck in the contest. Harry
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Date: 8/12/2010 8:59:00 PM
a very intriguing and wisdom filled write my friend,,beautifully penned ,,all the best in the contest,,I always look forward to your writes,if I had more time i would be here much more and comment much more but with working here lately from 8 to 12 hours a day, it barely leaves time for writing,,,Blessings..Cecil
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Date: 8/12/2010 6:11:00 PM
Awesome. Good luck in the contest dear. Hope you have a great day! Scarlett
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Date: 8/12/2010 7:15:00 AM
good entry for the contest. good luck
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Date: 8/11/2010 9:00:00 PM
Carolyn another brilliant piece, all the best for Barbara's contest.. I send you a quick soupmail as well, love Wilma
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Date: 8/11/2010 2:50:00 PM
Good luck in the contest with this thoughtful write..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by and commenting on my work..I appreciate you taking the time to do that..Sara
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Date: 8/11/2010 2:48:00 PM
Awesome write my friend....good luck in the contest....I didn't even know about a contest til I read Catie's entry.....Larry
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Date: 8/11/2010 2:29:00 PM
Another great entry in her contest. HOw will she ever judge this one? I enjoyed this, Carolyn. About sonnets. They are TOTAL 14 lines: 3 quatrains adding up to 12 lines and the finishing couplet. There are specialty types of sonnets in other forms, and they might sometimes add up to a different count. Well, I should not even be here right now. I just came to check on something and then i'm gonna get to my "sun bathing" for the day! Luv, Andrea
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Date: 8/11/2010 2:29:00 PM
PS. Italian sonnet and English both have 14 lines, but the rhyming patterns are different.
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Date: 8/11/2010 12:50:00 PM
A splendid write, denouncing the contradictions the beauty of nature and the ugliness of misuse. Thanks for sharing and thank you for your great comments on mine today, Carolyn. Your friend, Caroline.
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Date: 8/11/2010 11:23:00 AM
Quality Quatrain and quality poetry as we have come to expect from you Carolyn. Good luck in Barbara's contest with this fine poem packed with the truth >> James
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