Element Wind

She wonders where to go, clueless in her ceramic cage,
with octaves oceanic (there's an oaf in my ocarina)
But Oh! Her delight when her Breather goes soprano
      a whippoorwill trying her      wings      in the sauna sky
laps of leisure in steamy cirrus clouds

(there's a glider on the Puget Sound)

And she knows the stories that abound 
in the sensation of a sonnet

            (though you may shake a speare at the classic verse)

She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets.

You could say she's been around ...

Fighting flights of fancy through Fraser fir,
as busy as a bee, like she's got somewhere to be

(an important meeting with the sea?
a journey through Farrah Fawcett follicles?)

And things aren't always what they seem,
keeping close ties with Elohim,
lubricating our lungs with lovely life      (and the pockets of air between the knife)

More hypocritical than Hebraic Hitler.

With tornadoes in tow
and summer waves that flow

(she has secrets to disclose
for elements in the know)



NOTE: Puget Sound is a sound along the northwestern coast of Washington. Elohim is a Hebraic term for God.

Written on March 18th, 2016
For the Element Wind Contest Hosted by Brian Davey

Placed 2nd
Copyright © | Year Posted 2016

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Inman Avatar
May 3, 2016 at 12:50 PM
I was visited by both Wind and Water last night as the Thunderbird flew across the sky. They were both in a very bad mood. Great write Timothy.
Hicks Avatar
May 16, 2016 at 11:10 AM
It's times like those you wish you had your camera out. Thanks for stopping by, James.
Cheema Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 2:21 AM
Read it twice to ingest your interpretations, Timothy! Creative and unique! Loved, ceramic cage, octaves oceanic, Fraser Fir, and Hebraic Hitler! Congrats!
Hicks Avatar
April 1, 2016 at 1:56 AM
Thanks so much, Balveen! My goal was to try my best, to reflect the sporadic-ness of the wind. Glad you liked :)
Mcclain Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 1:34 PM
Hi Timothy, That's a very creative personification of wind--took me a few lines to make that connection ("ceramic cage" had me thinking the protagonist was a bird at first). Some very clever turns of phrase, to be sure. Well done and congrats on your contest win! Cheers, Brian
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 8:08 PM
Thanks Brian! Much appreciated for the stop and leaving your comments. Yeah, that part temporarily confused another fellow reader, too ... I have a ceramic ocarina, but not everyone knows what an ocarina is.
Dutta Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 1:31 PM
Beautiful Poem Tim. Congrats to win.
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:50 PM
Thanks Anisha! Appreciate your feedback!
Smith Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 6:54 AM
Way to go Tim, nice win
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:36 PM
Thank you kindly Charlie!
A. Sharma Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 12:59 AM
Wonderful poetry n win Timothy.. big congrats!
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:14 PM
Thank you very much Upma!
Poteet Avatar
March 29, 2016 at 9:42 PM
Congratulations, Tim. My favorite line here: "Fighting flights of fancy through Fraser fir," I sit amazed at the mention of so many people in your personification piece on the wind. I like the random alliteration, a little more freely done. Great writing. The only thing I don't get is the Breather line; but I'm sure it makes perfect sense to some.
Poteet Avatar
March 31, 2016 at 5:09 AM
Thanks Tim, for the explanation below, it does make sense. Very interesting, did you play Zelda on Nintendo?
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:13 PM
Thanks for your very insightful comment, my friend. I really appreciate it, and the way you catch on to my person-references.
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 7:11 PM
That line is rather a bit abstract to tell you the truth. My intention was the "wind" that's trapped in the ocarina (which is an egg-shaped ceramic instrument) ... the "Breather" is the musician that's playing the ocarina ... when he/she goes soprano, it requires you to lift off your fingers so the air can escape.
Haight Avatar
March 29, 2016 at 12:44 PM
Clever and creative! Congrats on your nice win, Tim. Sandra
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 6:49 PM
Thanks Sandra! I enjoyed your poem very much also!
Allison Avatar
March 29, 2016 at 11:20 AM
I love your unique take on the theme which is beautiful and clever with wonderful alliteration congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 6:49 PM
Thank you Jan! :)
Davey Avatar
March 29, 2016 at 4:03 AM
This was such a clever take on the theme Timothy you are such a skilled writer with a unique style! Your poems always carry the reader through to the end enthralled the entire time. Congrats my friend
Hicks Avatar
March 30, 2016 at 6:39 PM
Thanks for placing me yet again, Brian. It's an honor to participate in your contests, and I so love to read your comments :)
Callus Avatar
March 22, 2016 at 6:18 PM
Beautiful and clever take on this topic, Timothy. I love your creative and natural way of writing. Well done with the alliterations, inserted deftly without stressing on the need to do so. Definitely a winner! #7 // paul
Hicks Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 12:50 AM
Thanks Paul! I'm not good at making every line into alliteration, so I tried to just sprinkle them through out, and hope it's enough.
Nance Avatar
March 22, 2016 at 6:17 PM
You are so awesome to read, a unique and creative way of expression. :)
Hicks Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 12:43 AM
Thanks Casarah! That's very sweet of you to say, and I'm glad you liked! :)
Marcum Wong Avatar
March 21, 2016 at 1:07 AM
I have fond memories of the sound Timothy, as I lived there for a few years. I love Seattle area so much. I love your unique entry Timothy. Pretty sure Brian will too. #7 for me. ; )
Hicks Avatar
March 23, 2016 at 12:33 AM
Was surprised that anyone would catch on! (though I guess it's a fairly popular landmark) ... thanks for stopping by and reading :)
Breidenthal Avatar
March 19, 2016 at 4:38 AM
"an important meeting with the sea? a journey through Farrah Fawcett follicles?" My goodness..this is fantastic!! Of course you've got great use of alliteration along with playful wordplay and clever lines. "She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets." What a line!!! "with octaves oceanic" Is beautiful phrasing as well. You've described the wind immaculately, playfully and colorfully all in one. Faving this for sure. Always, Laura
Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2016 at 12:53 AM
Three cheers for Laura! Whom always delights with immaculate, playful, and colorful feedback ... it works both ways :D I am delighted so much by your enthusiasm, my friend. This was fun for me to write ... and so I like to see others have fun reading it.
Fiery Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 11:55 PM
She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets....brilliant use of alliteration...!
Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2016 at 12:48 AM
A keen eye, Red. That was a line I quite liked myself.
Fiery Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 11:53 PM
I want to scan your beautiful brain, Timothy...the words are flowing so gracefully from your mind..I feel so captivated..all the best for the contest...!!! Hugs red
Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2016 at 12:46 AM
That's such a marvelously sweet thing for you to say, dear Red. I'm touched. Though it's probably something more like a squishy octopus up there!
Dietrich Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 9:50 PM
timothy you are amazing. Do you know who you resemble when you write like this? It looks like a poem that could have been written by my dear friend Maurice yvonne (real name Armand) He has many problems right now and has not been here often this year, but if you don't know him, check out his poetry sometime!! This is a treat to see. I loved the Elohim line. a word I actually knew!
Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2016 at 12:33 AM
Thanks for the recommendation. I'll be sure to check him out (I've seen his face, but don't remember clicking on his page) ... appreciate enthusiasm, always :) Elohim, to me, is a beautiful sounding word (had to include, and was thankfully easy to rhyme)
Kendrick Avatar
March 18, 2016 at 5:06 PM
Interesting work..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..I did not write "Out On The Piazza" with a contest in mind..I just wrote that one to be writing..Sara
Hicks Avatar
March 20, 2016 at 12:05 AM
Apologize for my misunderstanding, Sarah. Thanks for visiting.
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