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She wonders where to go, clueless in her ceramic cage, with octaves oceanic (there's an oaf in my ocarina) But Oh! Her delight when her Breather goes soprano a whippoorwill trying her wings in the sauna sky laps of leisure in steamy cirrus clouds (there's a glider on the Puget Sound) And she knows the stories that abound in the sensation of a sonnet (though you may shake a speare at the classic verse) She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets. You could say she's been around ... Fighting flights of fancy through Fraser fir, as busy as a bee, like she's got somewhere to be (an important meeting with the sea? a journey through Farrah Fawcett follicles?) And things aren't always what they seem, keeping close ties with Elohim, lubricating our lungs with lovely life (and the pockets of air between the knife) More hypocritical than Hebraic Hitler. With tornadoes in tow and summer waves that flow (she has secrets to disclose for elements in the know) NOTE: Puget Sound is a sound along the northwestern coast of Washington. Elohim is a Hebraic term for God. Written on March 18th, 2016 For the Element Wind Contest Hosted by Brian Davey Placed 2nd

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Date: 5/3/2016 12:50:00 PM
I was visited by both Wind and Water last night as the Thunderbird flew across the sky. They were both in a very bad mood. Great write Timothy.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 5/16/2016 11:10:00 AM
It's times like those you wish you had your camera out. Thanks for stopping by, James.
Date: 3/31/2016 2:21:00 AM
Read it twice to ingest your interpretations, Timothy! Creative and unique! Loved, ceramic cage, octaves oceanic, Fraser Fir, and Hebraic Hitler! Congrats!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 4/1/2016 1:56:00 AM
Thanks so much, Balveen! My goal was to try my best, to reflect the sporadic-ness of the wind. Glad you liked :)
Date: 3/30/2016 1:34:00 PM
Hi Timothy, That's a very creative personification of wind--took me a few lines to make that connection ("ceramic cage" had me thinking the protagonist was a bird at first). Some very clever turns of phrase, to be sure. Well done and congrats on your contest win! Cheers, Brian
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 8:08:00 PM
Thanks Brian! Much appreciated for the stop and leaving your comments. Yeah, that part temporarily confused another fellow reader, too ... I have a ceramic ocarina, but not everyone knows what an ocarina is.
Date: 3/30/2016 1:31:00 PM
Beautiful Poem Tim. Congrats to win.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 7:50:00 PM
Thanks Anisha! Appreciate your feedback!
Date: 3/30/2016 6:54:00 AM
Way to go Tim, nice win
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 7:36:00 PM
Thank you kindly Charlie!
Date: 3/30/2016 12:59:00 AM
Wonderful poetry n win Timothy.. big congrats!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 7:14:00 PM
Thank you very much Upma!
Date: 3/29/2016 9:42:00 PM
Congratulations, Tim. My favorite line here: "Fighting flights of fancy through Fraser fir," I sit amazed at the mention of so many people in your personification piece on the wind. I like the random alliteration, a little more freely done. Great writing. The only thing I don't get is the Breather line; but I'm sure it makes perfect sense to some.
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Date: 3/31/2016 5:09:00 AM
Thanks Tim, for the explanation below, it does make sense. Very interesting, did you play Zelda on Nintendo?
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 7:13:00 PM
Thanks for your very insightful comment, my friend. I really appreciate it, and the way you catch on to my person-references.
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 7:11:00 PM
That line is rather a bit abstract to tell you the truth. My intention was the "wind" that's trapped in the ocarina (which is an egg-shaped ceramic instrument) ... the "Breather" is the musician that's playing the ocarina ... when he/she goes soprano, it requires you to lift off your fingers so the air can escape.
Date: 3/29/2016 12:44:00 PM
Clever and creative! Congrats on your nice win, Tim. Sandra
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 6:49:00 PM
Thanks Sandra! I enjoyed your poem very much also!
Date: 3/29/2016 11:20:00 AM
I love your unique take on the theme which is beautiful and clever with wonderful alliteration congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 6:49:00 PM
Thank you Jan! :)
Date: 3/29/2016 4:03:00 AM
This was such a clever take on the theme Timothy you are such a skilled writer with a unique style! Your poems always carry the reader through to the end enthralled the entire time. Congrats my friend
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/30/2016 6:39:00 PM
Thanks for placing me yet again, Brian. It's an honor to participate in your contests, and I so love to read your comments :)
Date: 3/22/2016 6:18:00 PM
Beautiful and clever take on this topic, Timothy. I love your creative and natural way of writing. Well done with the alliterations, inserted deftly without stressing on the need to do so. Definitely a winner! #7 // paul
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/23/2016 12:50:00 AM
Thanks Paul! I'm not good at making every line into alliteration, so I tried to just sprinkle them through out, and hope it's enough.
Date: 3/22/2016 6:17:00 PM
You are so awesome to read, a unique and creative way of expression. :)
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/23/2016 12:43:00 AM
Thanks Casarah! That's very sweet of you to say, and I'm glad you liked! :)
Date: 3/21/2016 1:07:00 AM
I have fond memories of the sound Timothy, as I lived there for a few years. I love Seattle area so much. I love your unique entry Timothy. Pretty sure Brian will too. #7 for me. ; )
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/23/2016 12:33:00 AM
Was surprised that anyone would catch on! (though I guess it's a fairly popular landmark) ... thanks for stopping by and reading :)
Date: 3/19/2016 4:38:00 AM
"an important meeting with the sea? a journey through Farrah Fawcett follicles?" My goodness..this is fantastic!! Of course you've got great use of alliteration along with playful wordplay and clever lines. "She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets." What a line!!! "with octaves oceanic" Is beautiful phrasing as well. You've described the wind immaculately, playfully and colorfully all in one. Faving this for sure. Always, Laura
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/20/2016 12:53:00 AM
Three cheers for Laura! Whom always delights with immaculate, playful, and colorful feedback ... it works both ways :D I am delighted so much by your enthusiasm, my friend. This was fun for me to write ... and so I like to see others have fun reading it.
Date: 3/18/2016 11:55:00 PM
She's licked the pearl pages of such pretty pamphlets....brilliant use of alliteration...!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/20/2016 12:48:00 AM
A keen eye, Red. That was a line I quite liked myself.
Date: 3/18/2016 11:53:00 PM
I want to scan your beautiful brain, Timothy...the words are flowing so gracefully from your mind..I feel so captivated..all the best for the contest...!!! Hugs red
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/20/2016 12:46:00 AM
That's such a marvelously sweet thing for you to say, dear Red. I'm touched. Though it's probably something more like a squishy octopus up there!
Date: 3/18/2016 9:50:00 PM
timothy you are amazing. Do you know who you resemble when you write like this? It looks like a poem that could have been written by my dear friend Maurice yvonne (real name Armand) He has many problems right now and has not been here often this year, but if you don't know him, check out his poetry sometime!! This is a treat to see. I loved the Elohim line. a word I actually knew!
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/20/2016 12:33:00 AM
Thanks for the recommendation. I'll be sure to check him out (I've seen his face, but don't remember clicking on his page) ... appreciate enthusiasm, always :) Elohim, to me, is a beautiful sounding word (had to include, and was thankfully easy to rhyme)
Date: 3/18/2016 5:06:00 PM
Interesting work..Reads like a winner..Thanks for stopping by..I did not write "Out On The Piazza" with a contest in mind..I just wrote that one to be writing..Sara
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Timothy Hicks
Date: 3/20/2016 12:05:00 AM
Apologize for my misunderstanding, Sarah. Thanks for visiting.