Drifting

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Monotangled Sense Contest ~ Sponsor: Dilly Dally

November 27, 2023

freed captive, tears spilled ~ unfulfilled in shallows and shadows

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Karen Croft

Date: 12/9/2023 2:17:00 AM

Congratulations on your win

Lin Lane
Date: 12/10/2023 6:45:00 AM

Thank you very much, Karen.

Unseeking Seeker

Date: 12/9/2023 12:28:00 AM

Wow! Congratulations on your win, Lin

Lin Lane
Date: 12/10/2023 6:45:00 AM

Thank you for the 'wow,' Seeker. I am honored to read your remarks.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/7/2023 12:57:00 PM

Happy to return with congratulations on your win, enjoyed reading this once more~

Lin Lane
Date: 12/7/2023 1:17:00 PM

You were right, and so I thank you again. ;-)

Di11y Da11y

Date: 12/7/2023 12:30:00 PM

Congratulations Lin, beautiful wordplay

Lin Lane
Date: 12/7/2023 1:17:00 PM

Thanks, Dilly. I'm delighted to have found a place on your winner's list.

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 12/3/2023 4:26:00 PM

I like the contrasts here, and the imagery of shallow shadows, a wonderful write, Lin~

Lin Lane
Date: 12/7/2023 1:16:00 PM

Thank you very much for your thoughts, Michelle.

Jeff Connelly

Date: 11/29/2023 6:43:00 AM

This has such a wonderful rhythm when read out loud Lin. The first two words are really a great juxtaposition; followed by the spill and fill and sh's of shallows and shadows. Really nice. Thanks

Lin Lane
Date: 11/29/2023 6:50:00 AM

Hi Jeff. It's always a pleasure to read your comments. You always catch my drift (pun intended on the title). You know it's difficult for me NOT to rhyme somewhere within my lines. Thanks so much.