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I sat on a bench beneath the willow tree, A bit far from home, sadly I had to be. My wife and I had a tiff, I was annoyed, Downhearted I felt, all my calm was destroyed. Dark clouds covered the sky as the sun was hid. So I trudged towards my house, I went unbid. Downhearted and so annoyed I still remained, My heart had to solve for my virtue was stained. On the lawn, I saw narcissus everywhere, Quickly I cut a small bunch with utmost care. Such lovely yellow flowers with fragrance sweet I gave them to her, she made our life complete. No idle discussions, she was to decide. She gave me a cuddle, my joy I couldn't hide. Placed 1 8 February 2023 Writing Challenge - D Words - Poetry Contest Sponsored by: Constance La France

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Date: 2/21/2023 2:17:00 PM
Victor, a beautiful poem and congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - D Forms, well done, I like the pic also, blessings, Constance
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Date: 2/18/2023 7:47:00 AM
Dear Victor, your beautiful poem, so rich in imagery, reveals depths of roiled emotion captured in your textured verses. I love the symbolism of the narcissus flower, as they symbolize a new beginning, their sunny color able to melt the cold felt in one's loving heart after a heated tiff. So exquisite for your poem to conclude with the continuation of an ageless love story. Perfectly penned and truly romantic, my friend, your poem touches my heart deeply. Belated congratulations for your wonderful win in Constance's contest. Warmest wishes.. ~Susan
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Date: 2/14/2023 4:00:00 AM
Good Morning Victor. This is just beautiful and loving filled with emotion that speaks poetry. Always, thank you for sharing your poetic talent. Have a beautiful day. Love and Blessings always. Remain safe.
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Date: 2/11/2023 4:45:00 PM
Back with congratulations on taking first place; this is a really well-written piece that demonstrates both skills and knowledge...dear friend.
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Date: 2/11/2023 2:02:00 PM
Back with congratulations on this winning work. Way to go. Sara
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Date: 2/11/2023 12:01:00 PM
Victor, this i so touching and sweet! Congratulations on your win! :)
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Date: 2/11/2023 7:24:00 AM
- Back with congratulations, Victor :) - hugs
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Date: 2/11/2023 2:01:00 AM
That’s so lovely Victor, say it with flowers, the smile makes it worthwhile. Congratulations on your win in Constance’s contest… Belle
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Date: 2/10/2023 5:02:00 PM
Gosh! How did I miss this? Wonderful write, Victor, so beautifully narrated, a lovely sonnet. Warmest congratulations on your well deserved top win
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Date: 2/9/2023 4:51:00 PM
I love this, Victor! The key: My heart had to solve for my virtue was stained. I likewise fight through my annoyance where the sun shines bright! God bless!
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Date: 2/9/2023 1:26:00 AM
Aha! You nailed it, Victor, such a lovely story of a fight, the feelings and the finale:)
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Date: 2/9/2023 12:45:00 AM
You have beautifully expressed your deep feelings for your wife,Victor. No words are needed; the gift of flowers That says it all. Good luck in the contest. Your Lovely poem is a winner for me. Take care, Shirley
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Date: 2/8/2023 8:36:00 PM
Darling poem with that happy ending, Victor!
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Date: 2/8/2023 6:59:00 PM
Beautiful poem Victor. Making up after a tif, can be so nice. Best wishes my friend.
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Date: 2/8/2023 4:07:00 PM
Flowers work wonders! Very nice, Victor. Bets wishes in the contest!
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Date: 2/8/2023 12:13:00 PM
A lovely write/ending. Beautiful flowers make a great gift. Have a blessed day..................
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Date: 2/8/2023 11:50:00 AM
Flowers will say everything, no need for words....Delice
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Date: 2/8/2023 11:08:00 AM
We all have those tiffs from time to time but when your love for each other is strong you soon get over it. Tom
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Date: 2/8/2023 10:27:00 AM
Beautiful poetry, sentiment! Truly expressed remorse, is priceless when it comes to relationships. We all mess-up...but not to apologize is adding Stupid to mess-up.
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Date: 2/8/2023 10:06:00 AM
Nothing says it like flowers! Your sweet tale of anger and reconciliation, is stirring and enjoyable reading, Victor. :)
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Date: 2/8/2023 9:23:00 AM
Lovely verse my friend and very well written sonnet. Many blessings
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Date: 2/8/2023 7:24:00 AM
Thus you turned to be a Victor :) Tiffs between husbands and wives can be easily settled with such small gestures of love. Well done.
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Date: 2/8/2023 6:16:00 AM
You, Victor, have the most amazing diction and the most beautiful analogies. This one's a romantic interpretation of the contest's theme. Good luck with the contest
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Date: 2/8/2023 6:12:00 AM
This is how lover's quarrel should end---with bouquet of flowers and a cuddle. Enjoyed your poem.
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Date: 2/8/2023 5:02:00 AM
I cannot hide my joy in seeing you posting a photo, and a lovely poem Victor, God bless your beautiful heart xo
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