DIVORCE

Dwelling in twisted tulips of fate, I'm etching life's blackened stars beneath Vehement veil of thunderstruck twilight, for, Obsidian tornados have crushed affectionate shorelines. Remorseful roses now unfurl like love's last perfume and Crestfallen silence nestles in eclipsed eden, sighing at the End of our poetic lifelines - lost within timeless agony.

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Kim Rodrigues

Date: 1/18/2024 5:03:00 AM

Those final three lines especially powerful! Congratulations on your impressive win, Hiya!

Matt Caliri

Date: 1/17/2024 9:54:00 PM

This was beautifully written, and should be ranked higher. Regardless, congrats on 9th place out of 49 entries! And exquisite piece!

Stephan McBride

Date: 12/21/2023 8:25:00 AM

Wow, this is the most beautiful poem , I could read this over and over today to get to the intensity of the depths of the meaning within these lines , love it : )

Karen Jones

Date: 12/12/2023 5:15:00 AM

WOW. What a beautiful way to describe the angst of divorce Hiya! Love your idea fresh and original. Good luck in the contest. And you are a huge talent at a tender wonderful age. Amazing.

I Am Anaya

Date: 12/10/2023 10:05:00 AM

Carefully and tenderly penned. Such a serious and keep-away subject, you expressed upon with such delicateness. Wowed me, sweet Hiya! You are inspiring. Blessings ~Anaya

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/12/2023 3:40:00 AM

Oh my, thank you so much dear Anaya! Indeed, it was a difficult subject to write on especially with feelings, because I'm 18 and it was quite complex to dive in this inexperienced emotion~ but, I'm so glad that you enjoyed reading this, means a lot to me :)

Valsa George

Date: 12/10/2023 4:51:00 AM

You write as if you have years of experience in this world. You can think and express yourself only in poetic language. Your comments too are poetry. Felicity of expressions is your forte. At this young age, if you can write so well, when you reach my age where you will be !!"Obsidian tornados have crushed affectionate shorelines." This single line is enough to illustrate how the vessel of life got shattered on the rocks by the sweeping tornadoes and how the life fell into crestfallen silence. Wonderful Hiya....

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/12/2023 3:43:00 AM

Awwn, dear poetess... You're so sweet! Your kind words always melt my heart and make me feel that I'm learning the right way. You, amongst many others, are truly my inspiration and I keep admiring your gorgeous poems whenever I visit your page.. And to receive such a golden feedback, ahh what more can a young poetess like me ask for!? It's just a blessing to have your presence :) sending love & light..

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/10/2023 1:13:00 AM

A well written acrostic Hiya, covering what was once a taboo subject. I always feel sorry when there are children involved. But if a relationship is toxic and abusive sometimes it's the only way forward. Tom

Anitha Jayasankar

Date: 12/10/2023 12:17:00 AM

This is such an excellent acrostic on a difficult to execute topic 'Divorce', and I feel you are too young to write about it, still you have done a great job here and that is real talent. Best wishes and hugs dear Hiya...~ Ani

Paige Hind

Date: 12/9/2023 5:38:00 PM

Very honest and feeling... I think it's such a hard topic to speak, especially, write about. You did so well.

Sara Etgen-Baker

Date: 12/9/2023 4:35:00 PM

emotional and powerful Acrostic, Hiya. Your imagery on a tough topic was just exquisite and captivating. The last few words struck a chord "lost within timeless agony." A great contest contender. Best wishes & have a pleasant evening, hugs, Sara

Mat Ignacio

Date: 12/9/2023 10:50:00 AM

Powerful and deeply expressed, capturing the essence and emotion

Hilo Poet

Date: 12/9/2023 8:02:00 AM

A soothing harmonic poetic whisper but alas be it a poignant claim. Ne'ertheless, a poetess etched a beauty. I'm charmed, Hiya, for this defines you. Aloha, William

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/9/2023 7:33:00 AM

Remorseful roses now unfurl like love's last perfume and Crestfallen silence nestles in eclipsed eden, sighing at the End of our poetic lifelines - lost within timeless agony---Simply awesome! Yet another FAVE for your splendid descriptions, simile, and metaphors.

Sotto Poet

Date: 12/9/2023 7:19:00 AM

Dear Hiya, an incredibly touching, sensitive, and expressive poem, it thrives splendidly in originality. Excellent word choice for your acrostic, Hiya. Your encapsulation is impeccable, and that last line is profound: poetry and divorce are both akin to an author permanently abandoning his quill. Your linguistic proficiency is at once delicate and profound. BOL with the contest.

Sara Kendrick

Date: 12/9/2023 7:07:00 AM

I especially like the last line. Divorce is horrible for sure and it can be deadly. Thanks for sharing this one with us and for dropping by my page. If this one is for a contest, it reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. your visits to my pages add a special touch. Sara K

Daniel Turner

Date: 12/9/2023 7:03:00 AM

This is the best divorce poem I have read. Excellent acrostic on a very tough subject. Reads like a winner to me, Hiya. A pleasure to read this morning.

Silent One

Date: 12/9/2023 7:01:00 AM

Great selection of words for you acrostic dear Hiya.. You have summed it up so well and that list line is so profound.. poetry and divorce are like a writer leaving his pen forever... but there are always others pens.. right? Good luck in the contest.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/13/2023 2:26:00 AM

Oh haha your perspective is profound too, well, thank you so much for your beautiful words dear Silent One, so kind of you.. It was quite a delicate subject & kinda different for me, to write on.. So, I'm really grateful for ur feedback :)

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 12/9/2023 6:14:00 AM

What I like about this Acrostic piece is that it doesn’t feel like one. This is so well articulated and the poetic I imagery is both beautiful and sad. I expect this will do well in the contest.

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/13/2023 2:23:00 AM

Oh, thank you so much for your very kind feedback, this was actually my first acrostic poem as I wanted to try the form.. So these beautiful compliments really warmed my heart, I'm grateful :)

Tom Woody

Date: 12/9/2023 6:12:00 AM

I'll bet no one has written something this creative about such a sad event. Poetic lifelines list, forever separated. Very nice

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/13/2023 2:20:00 AM

Awh, thank you so much dear Tom, receiving such kind & honest feedbacks from you really encourages me to improve n write.. Very grateful for ur support :)

Ink Empress

Date: 12/9/2023 5:18:00 AM

Ah your acrostic is way better than mine and you have never experienced or seen divorce close up. This is beyond profound and flows very well too. Theres so many lines that stood out for me like “ thunderstruck twilight” i use that alot too in poems.. and u and i always think alike. “ Obsidian tornados have crushed affectionate shorelines. “ great symbolism and metaphors throughout. “ Remorseful roses now unfurl like love's last perfume and” i just love that!!! And those last two lines are so

Hiya Sharma
Date: 12/13/2023 2:19:00 AM

Awh, yes, this was indeed a delicate topic to write about & a bit overwhelming too, that's why I was nervous to post but your encouraging words worked like a spell as always - my dear lovely Ink! Thank you so much for ethereal support always, I'm beyond grateful for the fav as well awwwm :)

Ink Empress
Date: 12/9/2023 5:19:00 AM

Beautiful how you’ve described lifelines and the end of a marriage .. i am in absolute awe angelic star. I think this should get first place. In my opinion its the best iv read on this acrostic challenge . Best of luck. And pleasure always reading you. Fave