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Discombobulation

Asserted, a decision. The g a p s start to form Creeping of notions Undermining the norm Confidence waning For and against Di s in te g r a ti on Nothing makes s e n s e Chaos, created. Part of the crew Gut instinct, disregulated Too m u c h now in view No-breath-taken-in As panic takes over Still beautiful from a distance Little Miss Super Nova

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Ann Peck

Date: 2/19/2024 1:27:00 PM

I love this! "Little Miss Super Nova" perfect! Congratulations!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/20/2024 9:29:00 AM

Thank you, I think it's my favourite last line I've ever come up with, glad you enjoyed it x

Robert Sidwell

Date: 2/15/2024 10:25:00 AM

I mean, come on, just great fun, great poem! Congratulations on the win!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/15/2024 10:48:00 AM

Why thank you :)

Paul Willason

Date: 2/1/2024 7:34:00 PM

Almost a mind read out of disintegration...an intriguing piece that draws you in. Do like that last line...has an element of surprise and novelty.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 2/3/2024 5:04:00 AM

Thanks Paul, I was quite pleased when the last line appeared. Always a joy when a poem falls I to place regardless of the condition of the poet :)

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 1/31/2024 9:48:00 AM

I enjoyed reading your fun write/great ending... Have a wonderful day writing away.............

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/31/2024 2:30:00 PM

Thanks Paula, you too x

David Kavanagh

Date: 1/31/2024 3:13:00 AM

This is brilliant Dilly, the disintegration is palpable throughout, but not in a menacing way, perhaps resignation and acceptance, but hey where’d you find such a line to finish on, still beautiful from a distance, little miss supernova, poetry personified, I’m all discombobulated, so must be a Fave from Dave!

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/31/2024 3:55:00 AM

I think this is the quickest poem I've ever written. 5 minutes this morning. The ending was flimsy for a second as a few dud word choices went before supernova - then it got a cuteness over load (maybe haha) when I thought of Little Miss :) appreciate the fave :)