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Anacreontic Verse I’m feeling so blue. My tears fall drip, drip, drip. Eyes bright red as the deluge flows unceasingly. My broken heart aches and cannot be fixed … such intense pain so deep inside. Why did you leave me all alone, expecting me to soldier on without you? I don’t need a photograph to see your face as it is printed indelibly in my mind. Your parting was so sudden. No phone call or letter just intense silence. Drugs took your life, but your memory will live on forever. Submitted to Best sad poem ever II Sponsored by Laura Loo 01~02~16

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Poet Destroyer A

Date: 1/28/2016 9:20:00 PM

Jan, CONGRATS, ON YOUR Anacreontic Verse 2- WIN. Luv ~LINDA~-

Jan Allison
Date: 1/29/2016 7:54:00 AM

Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx

Nette Onclaud

Date: 1/20/2016 11:46:00 AM

right on, jan.. big congrats!..huggs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thanks so much Nette:-) hugs Jan xx

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 1/20/2016 4:47:00 AM

Quite an emotive verse Jan... congrats on big win!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2016 12:53:00 PM

Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx

Anindya Mohan Tagore

Date: 1/19/2016 9:56:00 PM

Emotions dripped from your sensible write... touched my heart... hugs, Bobby

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM

Thanks so much Bobby it is a very emotive poem:-) hugs Jan xx

Skat A

Date: 1/19/2016 9:24:00 PM

Jan,,, Congratulationson your Anacreontic Verse 2 win. Luv *Skat*

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM

Thanks so much Skat:-) hugs Jan xx

Joseph May

Date: 1/19/2016 6:56:00 PM

Beautiful write Jan...Congrats on your win!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Lu Loo

Date: 1/19/2016 1:41:00 PM

Wonderful poem Jan, congrats on your win! *smiles* -luloo

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 4:10:00 PM

Thanks so much LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx

Anisha Dutta

Date: 1/19/2016 1:11:00 PM

Nice poem.Congrats Jan To win. Best Wishes

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:17:00 PM

Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

Date: 1/19/2016 10:06:00 AM

Truly deeply emotive and very well written, Jan. Another wasted life among many! ~ Congratulations on your high flying win....much deserved. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:16:00 PM

Thanks so much Paul. I always think of my son's 2 young friends who died and the devastation that caused:-( hugs Jan xx

Richard Lamoureux

Date: 1/19/2016 9:00:00 AM

Way to go, congrats on your top spot!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Richard:-) hugs Jan xx

Pandita Sietesantos

Date: 1/19/2016 8:21:00 AM

Congratulations, Jan, on your top of the class wonderful win! Well-deserved! Pandita

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx

Teddy Kimathi

Date: 1/19/2016 6:15:00 AM

Greetings Jan. Congrats on your #2 placement in the contest! ;-)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx

Seren Roberts

Date: 1/19/2016 3:14:00 AM

Jan no wonder you were placed high...A great write... Seren

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM

Thanks so much Seren:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

Date: 1/18/2016 10:39:00 PM

Wow Jan, congrats on your win and thank you for entering :)

Jan Allison
Date: 1/19/2016 1:14:00 PM

Wow thanks Ed:-) I am delighted to place so highly - it is an emotive write but my son's 2 friends died in a drugs related incident and they are always in my thoughts and I guess that is what inspired this poem:-) hugs jan xx

Sarah Stein

Date: 1/9/2016 3:40:00 PM

You did an excellent job. Intense read.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/9/2016 3:42:00 PM

It is a deep poems ... We sadly lost two friends brothers aged 19 and 20 to a drugs related incident - they are always in my thoughts:-( hugs Jan xx

Caycay Jennings

Date: 1/5/2016 9:10:00 AM

Such a good job, Jan - the emotion is very strong and I, personally, can certainly relate. All the best ... CayCay

Jan Allison
Date: 1/5/2016 12:51:00 PM

It is a hard hitting sad poem CayCay there are too many lives lost to drugs - Jacques and Torin's deaths are always on my mind:-( hugs Jan xx

Bl Devnath

Date: 1/4/2016 10:27:00 AM

An excellent poem bears a very deep passion of sadness. Drug use kills many innocent people. Good luck. Loved always my lovely friend,bl

Jan Allison
Date: 1/4/2016 12:56:00 PM

Thanks Bl It is a subject I feel very strongly about:-( hugs Jan xx

Kp Nunez

Date: 1/3/2016 5:44:00 PM

Glad this is fiction as one feels the deep sadness in this write, Jan. Sadly, drug use is more prevalent in any society than we care to know. Cheer up, my friend. Will check for more of your fun writes. hugs!

Jan Allison
Date: 1/3/2016 5:54:00 PM

It is always on my mind after Jacques and Torin's tragic deaths in 2014 - makes me so so sad to see these tragedies still happening:- hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/2/2016 6:42:00 PM

very emotive, Jan. I think you feel this so strongly because of what happened to those kids you told me about. well done.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 6:53:00 PM

You are probably right Andrea and sadly a man from the Island died in the UK last week and that would appear to be drugs related - oh it breaks my heart to see the devastation drugs continue to cause to so many lives:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 1/2/2016 6:42:00 PM

soupmail for you.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 6:50:00 PM

Replied:-) hugs jan xx

Lin Lane

Date: 1/2/2016 4:39:00 PM

Your words fit the scene.. dark and so sad.

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 4:45:00 PM

I have to go with the flow of my pen Lin and this is how my muse is behaving today :-( We have had 2 tragedies of Island residents in the last week and it is so so sad especially the death of a young man of 19 who fell in the harbour and drowned after going out on New years Eve:-( :-( hugs Jan xx

White Sage

Date: 1/2/2016 10:19:00 AM

Really devastating Jan, wish you well dear

White Sage
Date: 1/2/2016 3:11:00 PM

alright, that's calming...poets always have the ability to express of others mind, and you've got the art right

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 10:22:00 AM

Pure fiction for me but I read about a local man dying on Boxing Day from a drugs related incident and i guess that was what prompted this sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

Date: 1/2/2016 8:12:00 AM

Jan, this is so sadly beautiful, I was in rapture of each word, it left me broken hearted, well done 7

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 9:12:00 AM

It is a sad poem but as we know the path of life is not smooth and sadness does overtake our lives. I was reading about another death from a drugs related incident and this poem was the result:-( hugs Jan xx

Eileen Manassian

Date: 1/2/2016 8:11:00 AM

So touching, Jan. You can write humor and sorrow well, sweetie. Good luck in the contest. Hugs

Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 9:10:00 AM

I truly have no control over what I will write next Eileen - such a deep sad write yet I am happy lol:-) hugs Jan xx