Devastation - Emotive Write

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Anacreontic Verse I’m feeling so blue. My tears fall drip, drip, drip. Eyes bright red as the deluge flows unceasingly. My broken heart aches and cannot be fixed … such intense pain so deep inside. Why did you leave me all alone, expecting me to soldier on without you? I don’t need a photograph to see your face as it is printed indelibly in my mind. Your parting was so sudden. No phone call or letter just intense silence. Drugs took your life, but your memory will live on forever. Submitted to Best sad poem ever II Sponsored by Laura Loo 01~02~16

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Date: 1/28/2016 9:20:00 PM
Jan, CONGRATS, ON YOUR Anacreontic Verse 2- WIN. Luv ~LINDA~-
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Date: 1/29/2016 7:54:00 AM
Thanks Linda:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/20/2016 11:46:00 AM
right on, jan.. big congrats!..huggs
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Date: 1/24/2016 12:53:00 PM
Thanks so much Nette:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/20/2016 4:47:00 AM
Quite an emotive verse Jan... congrats on big win!
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Date: 1/24/2016 12:53:00 PM
Thanks so much Dr Sharma:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 9:56:00 PM
Emotions dripped from your sensible write... touched my heart... hugs, Bobby
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Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM
Thanks so much Bobby it is a very emotive poem:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 9:24:00 PM
Jan,,, Congratulationson your Anacreontic Verse 2 win. Luv *Skat*
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Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM
Thanks so much Skat:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 6:56:00 PM
Beautiful write Jan...Congrats on your win!
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Date: 1/24/2016 12:52:00 PM
Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 1:41:00 PM
Wonderful poem Jan, congrats on your win! *smiles* -luloo
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Date: 1/19/2016 4:10:00 PM
Thanks so much LuLoo:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 1:11:00 PM
Nice poem.Congrats Jan To win. Best Wishes
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:17:00 PM
Thanks so much Anisha:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 10:06:00 AM
Truly deeply emotive and very well written, Jan. Another wasted life among many! ~ Congratulations on your high flying win....much deserved. Hugs // paul
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:16:00 PM
Thanks so much Paul. I always think of my son's 2 young friends who died and the devastation that caused:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 9:00:00 AM
Way to go, congrats on your top spot!
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM
Thanks so much Richard:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 8:21:00 AM
Congratulations, Jan, on your top of the class wonderful win! Well-deserved! Pandita
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM
Thanks so much Pandita:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 6:15:00 AM
Greetings Jan. Congrats on your #2 placement in the contest! ;-)
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM
Thanks so much Teddy:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/19/2016 3:14:00 AM
Jan no wonder you were placed high...A great write... Seren
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:15:00 PM
Thanks so much Seren:-) hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/18/2016 10:39:00 PM
Wow Jan, congrats on your win and thank you for entering :)
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Date: 1/19/2016 1:14:00 PM
Wow thanks Ed:-) I am delighted to place so highly - it is an emotive write but my son's 2 friends died in a drugs related incident and they are always in my thoughts and I guess that is what inspired this poem:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 1/9/2016 3:40:00 PM
You did an excellent job. Intense read.
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Date: 1/9/2016 3:42:00 PM
It is a deep poems ... We sadly lost two friends brothers aged 19 and 20 to a drugs related incident - they are always in my thoughts:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/5/2016 9:10:00 AM
Such a good job, Jan - the emotion is very strong and I, personally, can certainly relate. All the best ... CayCay
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Date: 1/5/2016 12:51:00 PM
It is a hard hitting sad poem CayCay there are too many lives lost to drugs - Jacques and Torin's deaths are always on my mind:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/4/2016 10:27:00 AM
An excellent poem bears a very deep passion of sadness. Drug use kills many innocent people. Good luck. Loved always my lovely friend,bl
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Date: 1/4/2016 12:56:00 PM
Thanks Bl It is a subject I feel very strongly about:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/3/2016 5:44:00 PM
Glad this is fiction as one feels the deep sadness in this write, Jan. Sadly, drug use is more prevalent in any society than we care to know. Cheer up, my friend. Will check for more of your fun writes. hugs!
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Date: 1/3/2016 5:54:00 PM
It is always on my mind after Jacques and Torin's tragic deaths in 2014 - makes me so so sad to see these tragedies still happening:- hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 6:42:00 PM
very emotive, Jan. I think you feel this so strongly because of what happened to those kids you told me about. well done.
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Date: 1/2/2016 6:53:00 PM
You are probably right Andrea and sadly a man from the Island died in the UK last week and that would appear to be drugs related - oh it breaks my heart to see the devastation drugs continue to cause to so many lives:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 6:42:00 PM
soupmail for you.
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Date: 1/2/2016 6:50:00 PM
Replied:-) hugs jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 4:39:00 PM
Your words fit the scene.. dark and so sad.
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Date: 1/2/2016 4:45:00 PM
I have to go with the flow of my pen Lin and this is how my muse is behaving today :-( We have had 2 tragedies of Island residents in the last week and it is so so sad especially the death of a young man of 19 who fell in the harbour and drowned after going out on New years Eve:-( :-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 10:19:00 AM
Really devastating Jan, wish you well dear
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Date: 1/2/2016 3:11:00 PM
alright, that's calming...poets always have the ability to express of others mind, and you've got the art right
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Date: 1/2/2016 10:22:00 AM
Pure fiction for me but I read about a local man dying on Boxing Day from a drugs related incident and i guess that was what prompted this sad poem:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 8:12:00 AM
Jan, this is so sadly beautiful, I was in rapture of each word, it left me broken hearted, well done 7
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Date: 1/2/2016 9:12:00 AM
It is a sad poem but as we know the path of life is not smooth and sadness does overtake our lives. I was reading about another death from a drugs related incident and this poem was the result:-( hugs Jan xx
Date: 1/2/2016 8:11:00 AM
So touching, Jan. You can write humor and sorrow well, sweetie. Good luck in the contest. Hugs
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Jan Allison
Date: 1/2/2016 9:10:00 AM
I truly have no control over what I will write next Eileen - such a deep sad write yet I am happy lol:-) hugs Jan xx
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