Descent and Ascent

Poet's Notes
(Show)

Become a Premium Member and post notes and photos about your poem like Valsa George.


Nov.30. 2024
Descent and Ascent Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Unseeking Seeker
~ Placed Third~

 

“on an as is where is basis we choose descent of consciousness into the gross then we rise again following heart’s muse higher than where stood, bearing love’s cross”
When I see others getting much ahead of me, And ascending the ladder of success one by one, I wonder why I am descending lower and lower, Get struck down by the crushing blows of life, And why fail in everything I undertake, Though I have been striving hard for so long. I see I am far away from my destination And there is no finish line in view. Why day by day, I grow desperate and lonelier? Why of all the people, I alone am dumped in to the pit? I have been asking this question for long And desperately looking for an answer. I heard someone whisper- “reach out to people, Look into your consciousness, shatter ego Humble yourself, follow your heart’s muse, Carry love’s cross, see nature in a new light” A wave of energy coursed through my veins. Suddenly I had in me a yearning, so concrete, For a beginning, a new beginning To fill my heart with love, to see beauty around, Fleeing away and darting out of hazy shadows. I decided to look for the landscape never explored, Feast upon the colors of the rainbow, Feel the cool breeze upon my face, Bathe in the raindrops that splatter down, Get ensnared by the breathtaking view of the sunset. I lifted my face up and looked into the sky, Reveling in its aquamarine shade, Stellar fragments afloat in the immensity of space, And the beauty and briskness of the sailing clouds. I looked at nature and saw its variety as never before. Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, That despite dark days and stormy hours Love has the power to rewrite our destiny. It may demand sacrifices and pain, Yet bearing the cross makes our journey worthwhile. Now as a voyager upon life’s sea, I meet with storms and face the turbulent waves. But I strive to be brave of heart and strong of arm. Even when the world is cold and dark, I have learnt to keep an aim in view. I now know that this path I am on, Of self- discovery, faith, love and hope Will eventually, lead me to joy and inner peace. Like a butterfly that emerges from the cocoon’s bind, I will soar and ascend higher and higher!

Copyright © | Year Posted 2024



Post Comments

Poetrysoup is an environment of encouragement and growth so only provide specific positive comments that indicate what you appreciate about the poem. Negative comments will result your account being banned.

Please Login to post a comment

Date: 12/4/2024 4:58:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, your heart's muse delivered an intimate, expressive introspection that captured one's descent and ascent in life with potent poetic finesse. Your imagery and metaphors are rich and deep, filling me with wonder at the artistry you apply to turbulent emotions and insightful thoughts. I adore you last two lines for a breathtaking finale to an exquisite piece of transformation. Congratulations for your success in Seeker's contest. It's an honor to share the podium with you, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes, the gift of your golden pen shines.. ~Susan
Login to Reply
Date: 12/1/2024 8:19:00 PM
A journey of ups and doens, we all face. Nicely done.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/1/2024 11:54:00 AM
I love how your poem is a journey of self-reflection, struggle, and eventual transformation, exploring themes of despair, personal growth, and hope. It poetically speaks to the transformative power of love, faith, and a shift in perspective. It suggests that, even in the darkest moments, one can find strength through introspection, connection with others, and a deeper appreciation of the world around them. The journey from despair to self-realization is both personal and universal, offering hope to anyone struggling to find meaning and peace in their own lives.
Login to Reply
Date: 12/1/2024 3:56:00 AM
Dear Valsa your poem is truly a journey of transformation and hope. It beautifully captures the raw struggles of despair and self-doubt, only to rise triumphantly with a message of renewal and resilience. Love the meaning...Hugs
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 10:35:00 PM
"Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, That despite dark days and stormy hours Love has the power to rewrite our destiny." -- rewrite destiny, heal and restore. "I will soar and ascend higher and higher!" What we speak willfully, lovingly, we will have. Of course, in God's Time, not necessarily the same as ours. Great lesson for all of us! Thank you.
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 4:11:00 PM
The struggles we face and try to overcome hoping for better days is reflective of this great Poetry of yours Valsa. Such creative and unique verses to marvel at. A great write for Unseeking Seeker to enjoy. Best wishes in the contest Valsa. Blessings your way...
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 11:24:00 AM
Dear valsa, this is such a powerful poem so well written and expressed, has a very sincere voice from the very start. I especially loved also the lines “ Stellar fragments afloat in the immensity of space, And the beauty and briskness of the sailing clouds.” the seamless flow of imagery youv painted there is so celestial and so captivating! Youv depicted your experience through ups and downs and highs and lows of life, and you did it effortlessly in such a way that readers can feel you. Best wishes. And sending you light always
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 7:49:00 AM
The ups and downs that we encounter in our lives sometimes makes us want to give up, but we should never give up on hope and tommorow is always a brighter day but we should be patient. Best of luck Valsa.. Tom
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 6:06:00 AM
Dear Valsa wow, what a deeply introspective exploration of struggle, hope, and the journey toward self-discovery. Your words are filled with raw honesty with which you express feelings of despair and the longing for connection. My favorite line was "Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, that despite dark days and stormy hours, love has the power to rewrite our destiny." Maybe because it beautifully encapsulates the transformative power of love. A fav! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 5:58:00 AM
Would be nice to soar on to the nectar of the flowers on a warm day in spring and summer. Thanks for sharing this contest entry. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 3:35:00 AM
so beautiful poem, life has ups and downs, i think others live the same troubles, an enticing poem, enjoyed
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 2:57:00 AM
I very much enjoyed reading this, it is very descriptive I felt you were describing my own journey I couldn't have said it better myself, thanks for sharing Valsa.
Login to Reply
Date: 11/30/2024 2:45:00 AM
Life has its ascents and descents. It is a constant battle. Still, one can achieve success if one is spiritually concentrated on doing good. It is a beautiful poem where, in the end, joy reigns.
Login to Reply
Get a Premium Membership
Get more exposure for your poetry and more features with a Premium Membership.
Book: Radiant Verses: A Journey Through Inspiring Poetry

Member Area

My Admin
Profile and Settings
Edit My Poems
Edit My Quotes
Edit My Short Stories
Edit My Articles
My Comments Inboxes
My Comments Outboxes
Soup Mail
Poetry Contests
Contest Results/Status
Followers
Poems of Poets I Follow
Friend Builder

Soup Social

Poetry Forum
New/Upcoming Features
The Wall
Soup Facebook Page
Who is Online
Link to Us

Member Poems

Poems - Top 100 New
Poems - Top 100 All-Time
Poems - Best
Poems - by Topic
Poems - New (All)
Poems - New (PM)
Poems - New by Poet
Poems - Read
Poems - Unread

Member Poets

Poets - Best New
Poets - New
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems
Poets - Top 100 Most Poems Recent
Poets - Top 100 Community
Poets - Top 100 Contest

Famous Poems

Famous Poems - African American
Famous Poems - Best
Famous Poems - Classical
Famous Poems - English
Famous Poems - Haiku
Famous Poems - Love
Famous Poems - Short
Famous Poems - Top 100

Famous Poets

Famous Poets - Living
Famous Poets - Most Popular
Famous Poets - Top 100
Famous Poets - Best
Famous Poets - Women
Famous Poets - African American
Famous Poets - Beat
Famous Poets - Cinquain
Famous Poets - Classical
Famous Poets - English
Famous Poets - Haiku
Famous Poets - Hindi
Famous Poets - Jewish
Famous Poets - Love
Famous Poets - Metaphysical
Famous Poets - Modern
Famous Poets - Punjabi
Famous Poets - Romantic
Famous Poets - Spanish
Famous Poets - Suicidal
Famous Poets - Urdu
Famous Poets - War

Poetry Resources

Anagrams
Bible
Book Store
Character Counter
Cliché Finder
Poetry Clichés
Common Words
Copyright Information
Grammar
Grammar Checker
Homonym
Homophones
How to Write a Poem
Lyrics
Love Poem Generator
New Poetic Forms
Plagiarism Checker
Poetics
Poetry Art
Publishing
Random Word Generator
Spell Checker
Store
What is Good Poetry?
Word Counter