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Nov.30. 2024
Descent and Ascent Poetry Contest
Sponsor- Unseeking Seeker
~ Placed Third~

 

“on an as is where is basis we choose descent of consciousness into the gross then we rise again following heart’s muse higher than where stood, bearing love’s cross”
When I see others getting much ahead of me, And ascending the ladder of success one by one, I wonder why I am descending lower and lower, Get struck down by the crushing blows of life, And why fail in everything I undertake, Though I have been striving hard for so long. I see I am far away from my destination And there is no finish line in view. Why day by day, I grow desperate and lonelier? Why of all the people, I alone am dumped in to the pit? I have been asking this question for long And desperately looking for an answer. I heard someone whisper- “reach out to people, Look into your consciousness, shatter ego Humble yourself, follow your heart’s muse, Carry love’s cross, see nature in a new light” A wave of energy coursed through my veins. Suddenly I had in me a yearning, so concrete, For a beginning, a new beginning To fill my heart with love, to see beauty around, Fleeing away and darting out of hazy shadows. I decided to look for the landscape never explored, Feast upon the colors of the rainbow, Feel the cool breeze upon my face, Bathe in the raindrops that splatter down, Get ensnared by the breathtaking view of the sunset. I lifted my face up and looked into the sky, Reveling in its aquamarine shade, Stellar fragments afloat in the immensity of space, And the beauty and briskness of the sailing clouds. I looked at nature and saw its variety as never before. Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, That despite dark days and stormy hours Love has the power to rewrite our destiny. It may demand sacrifices and pain, Yet bearing the cross makes our journey worthwhile. Now as a voyager upon life’s sea, I meet with storms and face the turbulent waves. But I strive to be brave of heart and strong of arm. Even when the world is cold and dark, I have learnt to keep an aim in view. I now know that this path I am on, Of self- discovery, faith, love and hope Will eventually, lead me to joy and inner peace. Like a butterfly that emerges from the cocoon’s bind, I will soar and ascend higher and higher!

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Date: 12/4/2024 4:58:00 PM
Dearest Valsa, your heart's muse delivered an intimate, expressive introspection that captured one's descent and ascent in life with potent poetic finesse. Your imagery and metaphors are rich and deep, filling me with wonder at the artistry you apply to turbulent emotions and insightful thoughts. I adore you last two lines for a breathtaking finale to an exquisite piece of transformation. Congratulations for your success in Seeker's contest. It's an honor to share the podium with you, my sweet friend. Warmest wishes, the gift of your golden pen shines.. ~Susan
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Date: 12/1/2024 8:19:00 PM
A journey of ups and doens, we all face. Nicely done.
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Date: 12/1/2024 11:54:00 AM
I love how your poem is a journey of self-reflection, struggle, and eventual transformation, exploring themes of despair, personal growth, and hope. It poetically speaks to the transformative power of love, faith, and a shift in perspective. It suggests that, even in the darkest moments, one can find strength through introspection, connection with others, and a deeper appreciation of the world around them. The journey from despair to self-realization is both personal and universal, offering hope to anyone struggling to find meaning and peace in their own lives.
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Date: 12/1/2024 3:56:00 AM
Dear Valsa your poem is truly a journey of transformation and hope. It beautifully captures the raw struggles of despair and self-doubt, only to rise triumphantly with a message of renewal and resilience. Love the meaning...Hugs
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Date: 11/30/2024 10:35:00 PM
"Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, That despite dark days and stormy hours Love has the power to rewrite our destiny." -- rewrite destiny, heal and restore. "I will soar and ascend higher and higher!" What we speak willfully, lovingly, we will have. Of course, in God's Time, not necessarily the same as ours. Great lesson for all of us! Thank you.
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Date: 11/30/2024 4:11:00 PM
The struggles we face and try to overcome hoping for better days is reflective of this great Poetry of yours Valsa. Such creative and unique verses to marvel at. A great write for Unseeking Seeker to enjoy. Best wishes in the contest Valsa. Blessings your way...
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Date: 11/30/2024 11:24:00 AM
Dear valsa, this is such a powerful poem so well written and expressed, has a very sincere voice from the very start. I especially loved also the lines “ Stellar fragments afloat in the immensity of space, And the beauty and briskness of the sailing clouds.” the seamless flow of imagery youv painted there is so celestial and so captivating! Youv depicted your experience through ups and downs and highs and lows of life, and you did it effortlessly in such a way that readers can feel you. Best wishes. And sending you light always
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Date: 11/30/2024 7:49:00 AM
The ups and downs that we encounter in our lives sometimes makes us want to give up, but we should never give up on hope and tommorow is always a brighter day but we should be patient. Best of luck Valsa.. Tom
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Date: 11/30/2024 6:06:00 AM
Dear Valsa wow, what a deeply introspective exploration of struggle, hope, and the journey toward self-discovery. Your words are filled with raw honesty with which you express feelings of despair and the longing for connection. My favorite line was "Once I filled my heart with love, I learnt, that despite dark days and stormy hours, love has the power to rewrite our destiny." Maybe because it beautifully encapsulates the transformative power of love. A fav! Autumn Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 11/30/2024 5:58:00 AM
Would be nice to soar on to the nectar of the flowers on a warm day in spring and summer. Thanks for sharing this contest entry. It reads like a good contender to me. Way to go. Sara K
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Date: 11/30/2024 3:35:00 AM
so beautiful poem, life has ups and downs, i think others live the same troubles, an enticing poem, enjoyed
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Date: 11/30/2024 2:57:00 AM
I very much enjoyed reading this, it is very descriptive I felt you were describing my own journey I couldn't have said it better myself, thanks for sharing Valsa.
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Date: 11/30/2024 2:45:00 AM
Life has its ascents and descents. It is a constant battle. Still, one can achieve success if one is spiritually concentrated on doing good. It is a beautiful poem where, in the end, joy reigns.
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