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The doctor said you were depressed you’d not get dressed Doc heard you cry I want to die You grabbed your keys and drove away on the highway Where did you go … cops want to know The Sherriff confirmed my worst fears - can’t stop my tears They’d found you dead my heart’s like lead 12 Lines In Rhyme Poetry Contest Sponsored By Joseph May Checked with HMS 8,4,4,4 each stanza Checked with Rhymezone 07/22/21

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Kathryn Collins

Date: 7/30/2021 5:20:00 AM

Jan. It all fits Jan. The sadness, the sudden brevity when it’s too late. The matter of fact ness being left with it. Bravo. Kathy

Phyllis Babcock

Date: 7/27/2021 3:42:00 PM

That is tragic and so many suffer with untreated depression. I think more people need help and certainly more resources are needed. Well written. Hope all is well your way Jan. love phyl

White Wolf

Date: 7/27/2021 2:30:00 PM

Powerful writing, Jan. I think most of us can relate to this on one level or another. And may I might add, congratulations on your winning poem. Love to you and yours.

Sam Kauffman

Date: 7/27/2021 10:08:00 AM

Congratulations on your win Jan. It is so important that we bring to light the consequences of untreated clinical depression that robs so many of their talents, gifts and full life. Thank you many times over for your courageous poem shedding light on this the last of the "unacceptable" illnesses. All the best. hugs!

Joseph May

Date: 7/26/2021 12:32:00 PM

A tragic story Jan, Very nicely penned, Congrats on your win

Jennifer Proxenos

Date: 7/26/2021 11:51:00 AM

I have heard of a similar situation, a couple had an argument at a party and she grabbed the car keys and left without her phone. She had a tragic accident in the Magaliesberg mountains and her car went under a truck - it was in the early hours of a Sunday morning - she had no identification, no bag, they traced the registration of the car to her husband who was told some hours later. He committed suicide leaving two children orphans. Her parents adopted them. Sad, great write. Hugs Jenn.

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/26/2021 10:26:00 AM

Hi Jan, I'm just coming back to say congratulations on your win. It was well deserved. Have a great day- Alexis

Christuraj Alex

Date: 7/26/2021 10:15:00 AM

Beautiful. Congratulations on your win.

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 7/26/2021 9:32:00 AM

Congratulations on your win. A sad yet wonderful rhyme write. One never knows what others are going through. "Be Kind" Have a blessed day..............

Gershon Wolf

Date: 7/24/2021 8:21:00 PM

Ouch! Nothing like depression to sink our hopes and hearts --- 'like lead,' as you said, Jan.

Delice Arleen Skelly

Date: 7/23/2021 10:30:00 PM

Good luck in the contest Jan...Delice

Christopher Flaherty

Date: 7/23/2021 2:34:00 PM

Very sad Jan but a reality

Rico Leffanta

Date: 7/23/2021 11:24:00 AM

Well said, but I still do not understand why anyone would commit suicide; that is like failing in school, then dropping out only to have to do the same grade all over again until one passes!

Mike Gentile

Date: 7/23/2021 4:20:00 AM

Spot on slice of depression Jan. I witnessed it and the feeling of helplessness is dreadful as well, Good Luck xxoo

Victor Buhagiar

Date: 7/22/2021 10:39:00 PM

Depression is an ugly disease. Well written. Hugs

Rama Balasubramanian

Date: 7/22/2021 9:16:00 PM

So true Jan that is what happens when you let your negative thoughts get over you. Well penned friend

Alexis Y.

Date: 7/22/2021 6:09:00 PM

WoW! Jan, What a well-written and heart-tugging write on depression. So sad to see the ending. Your write seemed so real. Best wishes in the contest. Have a great day- Alexis

Michelle Faulkner

Date: 7/22/2021 4:39:00 PM

Very tragic and moving, I am glad this is fictional for you, but all too true for too many~

Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2021 4:41:00 PM

It is so tragic Michelle I know we have had increased rates in suicides on our Island especially with the younger generation:-( hugs Jan xx

Millard Lowe

Date: 7/22/2021 4:25:00 PM

A deep share, Jan. Just know that there is no heart too heavy for the Almighty not to lift. Through Him, be lifted up Grace, Faith, and Love. Soon, you will have tears of keloid memories of joys shared. Give those of pain to the ever-present Helper in times of need. Peace and Love.

Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2021 4:27:00 PM

Thanks Millard, for me it is fiction and written for a contest but sadly for others it is all too real:-( hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/22/2021 4:15:00 PM

so sad, and I think of the many people who killed themselves during lockdown and since. My nephew one of them. i read today that life expectancy for first time in ages has gone down by a year!!

Jan Allison
Date: 7/22/2021 4:27:00 PM

Its so tragic to hear how the suicide rate has risen so sharply with the pandemic and also mental illness, losing your nephew so young is so s sad:-( hugs Jan x