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Deception- Chanso

Within her sensitive heart, a storm brewed. No one could see her inner agony, Even when her mind to suffering glued. Beneath the calm and serene appearance, In her mind's cavern dwelt a silent grief, And none could find in her a discordance. She did not complain or show any guile. Persevered not to make her pain outward. Always faced the people with a sweet smile. . Instant joy and cheer she could ever feign. Even in her life's most trying moments, A calm equipoise, she tried to maintain. She purposely put on this deception, Not to make her ailing parents troubled, While her heart was bleeding in dejection. Such double life was so hard to endure. How long she could do this, she was not sure. May. 9.2023 Take a Chance on Chanso Poetry Contest Sponsor- Kim Rodrigues 5 Verses and 1 envoi 10 syllables in each line.

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Linda Alice Fowler

Date: 7/15/2023 10:39:00 AM

Hi Valsa. If we only take the time to care...nice job on the double life so many live. Congrats! :)

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/11/2023 6:32:00 PM

Worthy topic! It’s hard to lead a double life. Congratulations, Valsa!

Valsa George
Date: 7/11/2023 11:30:00 PM

Thanks a lot Kim for picking up my poem for a win.

Joanna Daniel

Date: 5/16/2023 8:10:00 AM

Sounds like me, Valsa, maybe:) well written:)

Sotto Poet

Date: 5/13/2023 7:54:00 AM

She seemed both composed and concerned. She was able to fake the brightest, most genuine smile and enthusiasm in an instant. You did a great job at portraying her, Valsa, even in the worst times of her life.

I Am Anaya

Date: 5/10/2023 7:49:00 PM

She could be a Saint, a diagnosis composed to suit what life threw at her, such discipline should be rewarded. Valsa b0l in the contest!

Paige Hind

Date: 5/10/2023 2:10:00 PM

Beautiful and sad. Good luck in the contest!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 5/10/2023 12:58:00 PM

well done, Valsa. I did one of these, not posted yet. It's a pretty hard form to do!!

Janice Canerdy

Date: 5/10/2023 6:51:00 AM

The best masks will eventually crack! Valsa, this is a very moving, expressive piece. Janice

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 5/10/2023 1:04:00 AM

There are people who are always sad, like me. Since I live alone, I have nothing to hide.

Gershon Wolf

Date: 5/9/2023 7:12:00 PM

Double life = Double strife. ~ Troubled Wife

Valsa George
Date: 5/9/2023 8:36:00 PM

:) :) Liked it, Gershon. Thanks a lot !

Yann Rolland

Date: 5/9/2023 4:51:00 PM

so touching are the apparences, when life goes apart, we try but not always succeed, a beautiful and emotional penning

Valsa George
Date: 5/9/2023 8:35:00 PM

Thanks a lot dear yaan

Stephan McBride

Date: 5/9/2023 12:11:00 PM

Love your wording and description in details in your poems, sadly this is for many people troubled these days and don't know where to go to find relief

Valsa George
Date: 5/9/2023 8:34:00 PM

This is the mental scanario of many. From outward appearance, we can never judge people. Thanks a lot Stephan!

Tom Cunningham

Date: 5/9/2023 7:19:00 AM

We never know what's going on in people's minds Valsa, many put on a brave face. Good luck in the contest. Tom

Valsa George
Date: 5/9/2023 8:32:00 PM

Yes, indeed ! Beneath the calm seas there are whirls and eddies. Thanks a lot Tom.

Vijay Pandit

Date: 5/9/2023 6:02:00 AM

Calm yet troubled was she. Instant joy and cheer she could ever feign. Even in her life's most trying moments--you portrayed her well, Valsa. Best to you.

Valsa George
Date: 5/9/2023 8:30:00 PM

Thank you so much Vijay !