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Something dreadful is reflected in this scene Could be she's seen death in a horrid dream, or perhaps a relapse of an affliction or addiction has left her crestfallen, in an insentient state with the blood of her sin dripping from her eyes. In vines, she's entangled for having sat so long Grieving for whatever tragedy has gone wrong. Entwined in living vines of a scarlet rose more alive than she appears to be. Is it a dark disgrace she bears in this pose? One Poe would have drawn to illustrate a poem telling a dark tale as black ravens preen. With iridescent wings fluttering, they hover near plucking at an ornament worn round her neck Cawing attention to her pox in squawking voices, making her circumspect for being called a sinner. Has she committed some dark dastardly deed that's left her sitting on that garden bench as if in widow's threads, dreading her crime and praying Mea Culpas for forgiveness? Forlorn she sits, weary from existence, oblivious to the avian souls. Do they guard her or are they being persistent in cawing her shame? Has she been the victim of some abysmal crime? What horror must be kept secreted in her mind and what keeps her kohled eyes closed as if blind? Don't ask the black bird for he has sworn allegiance Nevermore would he tell the tale of it all as she falls ever deeper into the madness that has left her cold. Aa alabaster statue on a garden bench. Is she missing her beloved when he was claimed by death or a wench who in an act of jealousy killed her lover? The sin committed in passion is a mortal blunder and more... A flaw in the heart of one Poe would never call Lenore.

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Date: 5/13/2025 5:26:00 PM
This is absolutely darkly divine. Poe is my favourite poet and this definitely invokes him. "Nevermore would he tell the tale of it all as she falls ever deeper into the madness that has left her cold. An alabaster statue on a garden bench," this is brilliant. And I truly appreciate how you mentioned Lenore. Invokes The Raven. Just fantastic.
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Date: 5/13/2025 5:54:00 PM
Now, Sara... why am I not surprised that you favor Poe? lol I'm glad you appreciate him as much as I do. I thought about not using Lenore but then figured.. "if ya know Poe, ya know Lenore" Thanks a whole bunch for being a Poe Poet like I am. Now, we're sisters of the dark realm. lol.
Date: 5/13/2025 8:21:00 AM
Dear Lin, Oh so haunting and utterly evocative just like Poe himself for you’ve conjured a world where grief, guilt, and mystery entwine in every line. I really think you've captured the dark beauty of mourning and the complexity of sin with such empathy and depth that it lingers long after reading. I love a great haunt! Spring Blessings, My Dear Friend, Daniel
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Date: 5/13/2025 11:32:00 AM
Perhaps I'm the one who was captured. As I wrote about her, I felt her grief, for whatever reason she lingered for who knew how long on that garden bench. Thank you for enjoying my haunting tale, Daniel.
Date: 5/12/2025 10:53:00 PM
"Forlorn she sits, weary from existence, oblivious to the avian souls. Do they guard her or are they being persistent in cawing her shame?" -- Don't eat thine own heart, something I recall often, when thinking of the past. If not for the grace of God, there go I, is another. Is all we see an seem, but a dream within a dream, as Poe did say -- perhaps all his own nightmare, of his own making? A poem that makes one more deeply think. Well done, Lin!
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Date: 5/13/2025 5:30:00 AM
A dream within a dream, the further I got into writing this, the more I wanted to follow Poe's first lines and tell her, "Take this kiss upon the brow!" I wanted to waken her. I didn't want her to weep, but I'd already left her plight to readers. I'd choose to chase the crows away and untangle her from those vines, much the same way in which I'd have chosen to wake Poe from his nightmare. I'm grateful for the depth of your ideas.
Date: 5/12/2025 5:26:00 PM
Lin, you pose questions that ask me to examine my perceptions of this soul trapped in some kind of remorse or other bad state. I am having trouble deciding, but my inclination would be that she did something shameful that can't be undone. I try to treat my loved ones and keep my relationship up to date in case they need to go to the other side. No point waiting. Smiles to you...fantastic you are!!
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Date: 5/13/2025 5:21:00 AM
In your comments are the ideology of poetry. Did she injure, or was she injured? She cannot tell a reader, so it's left to each individual to read into my lines what they suspect. Fantastic are your reviews. Thank you, Duke.
Date: 5/12/2025 12:16:00 PM
Ever such a slight contrast from your previous poem "springs renewal" but I love it. Your talent knows no bounds. Danny
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Date: 5/13/2025 5:19:00 AM
Just a wee bit, Danny. Light to dark or dark to light. I guess I did kind of run the span of the spectrum. ;-) Thank you for your gracious compliments.
Date: 5/12/2025 9:46:00 AM
Haha I'm on a different page entirely it seems! I'd buy the dress and praise highly whoever designed the backdrop :) all it requires is a pint of Guinness and someone interesting to chat to :) Maybe get some Type O Negative playing. (Beautiful poetry of course, it goes without saying)
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Date: 5/12/2025 10:06:00 AM
Haha she's the epitome of beauty to me. :)
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Lin Lane
Date: 5/12/2025 10:01:00 AM
But thank you for saying, Dilly. The dress is much too beautiful to be worn by what appears to be a human become zombie. Take it from her if you can without tearing the lace on thorns. I'm all about the interesting conversation but with something more potent, like two fingers of amber liquid in my glass... neat. Thank you for visiting the garden, Dilly.
Date: 5/12/2025 8:45:00 AM
Im speechless! In tears! Reading this dark poem dear linnersz and with a touch of poe in it! I have no words but just cant help but say the evocative questions flowing throughout and the way youv played around with words delivering a dark ambience truly made my heart hurt! And i cant help but fave this! You really are good at writing dark too! You should do it more often! This is beyond impeccable! Every line i would love to quote! Sending you light always
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Date: 5/12/2025 9:15:00 AM
Dear Ink, thank you for always being so gracious in your comments on my poetry. When I see a picture such as this one, my mind goes into Poe mode. The lights go off around me, but I see in the darkness, and it's not always pretty.

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