Death

And when the end comes it comes very fast indeed Not always in slow motion but at breakneck speed Said the Woodpecker to the larva, I kill Swiftly to feed! But you’re just a Cuckoo see how, your head bleeds No wait! it’s a Hawk talon TWIST SNAP! When Crowing one should pay more heed Writing Challenge - D Words - Poetry Contest Sponsored by Constance La France #10 death 09/02/23

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Constance La France

Date: 2/21/2023 2:25:00 PM

David, congratulations on your win in my Writing Challenge - D Forms, well done, blessings, Constance

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/21/2023 2:45:00 PM

Heya Constance, I’m delighted as always with a mention and placing, cheers David

Valsa George

Date: 2/13/2023 8:20:00 PM

Everyone who has come to the fag end of life longs for a quick death without even one's knowing and not seeing death at our doorway for long and fearing it may barge in anytime! Great thoughts on death David. I liked the twist at the end.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/14/2023 12:31:00 AM

And indeed Valsa, another reason to try make the most of the here and now, instead of thinking one is invincible, and death only happens to the sick and elderly, thanks for sharing your thoughts, cheers David

Sara Kendrick

Date: 2/13/2023 12:58:00 PM

Congratulations on your winner in Constance's contest. I think most don't see death coming until it is too late. Sara

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/13/2023 1:08:00 PM

Heya Sara, you’re so right! and that fact makes it all the worse for the bereaved ones, thank you so much for stopping by, cheers David

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 2/12/2023 9:41:00 AM

you are GOOD!!

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/12/2023 10:39:00 AM

I have my moments Andrea, blink and you’ll miss them! Cheers David

Panagiota Romios

Date: 2/10/2023 4:57:00 PM

Best wishes for a win,David. Panagiota

Jenna Logan
Date: 2/11/2023 4:53:00 AM

I agree with you, David. It's condescending to suggest to a grieving person that he/she get over it. Such negativity only hinders healing.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/11/2023 12:13:00 AM

I do try enjoy every day to the max pangie, but some people take longer than others to grieve, it’s the price they pay for love, and it’s never one size fits all, I do get what you’re saying though, I’ve seen it in real life situations, but it’s hard to tell a genuinely upset person to get on with life, without upsetting them even more, most will come around themselves in time! Cheers David

Jenna Logan

Date: 2/10/2023 8:22:00 AM

I'm not going to ask what prompt flitted through your mind to write this morbid take on death... but since it will be inevitable for most mortals, you did it justice with your lines of avian death. Your senses have a depth that many would envy or despise. I feel a little of both when reading you, David.

Jenna Logan
Date: 2/11/2023 4:51:00 AM

My critiques of your poetry are always made in a positive light, David. I admire your poetry and your integrity.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/10/2023 9:05:00 AM

High praise Jenna, I think we all experience the world slightly differently through our mind processor or brain, my filter probably just sets more finely on some days, and courser on others, envy or despise, yep I’ll take your critique as positive, and thank you kindly, cheers David

Buhagiar Victor

Date: 2/10/2023 2:22:00 AM

I have come to the conclusion that the best way to die is while I sleep. But I'm sure it's not up to me. Loved your poem. Best for a win.

Andrea Dietrich
Date: 2/12/2023 9:41:00 AM

if only we could all be that lucky

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/10/2023 4:54:00 AM

I’m sure you’re right Victor peacefully in one’s sleep gotta be the way to go, I’ve seen both sides of the coin, and a lingering death although prolonged is not my choice, but like you said, it’s not up to us, take care, cheers David

Tom Cunningham

Date: 2/10/2023 12:01:00 AM

Best way to go David, quick and clean. Good luck in the contest. Tom

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/10/2023 1:57:00 AM

Lights out, without a doubt but very tough on the bereaved Tom, no easy way in the end to go, but this Woodpecker thing or whatever it is, got its comeuppance for cawing a bit too much lol, cheers David

Maureen Mcgreavy

Date: 2/9/2023 5:48:00 PM

Snappy little piece! I have a particular love of falcons, perfection with wings I say. Enjoyed this macabre penning. xomo

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/10/2023 1:50:00 AM

Aye snappy indeed Super Mo and a bit of a play on birds too, all birds of prey are poetry in motion, perfect for the job, thank your for stopping by, cheers David