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Written for the " scorpion, owl, serpentine" contest sponsored by Sara Jama,

this is written from the perspective of an individual going through psychosis, having seen it closely, seeing how the world can sometimes stigmatized these mental health issues, I wanted to once again, touch this subject.

Psychosis is a mental health condition, in which the individual goes through delusions, hallucinations, paranoia etc, and often requires right medication just like every other illness.. 

 

Freedom ~ an inked kingdom of macabre mirrors, a vermiform lie veiling the vehement suffering amidst serpent estuaries, surging within strangled skin, as if I am the living sin, jinxed by the crawling creatures in the lamented labyrinth of deceitful dreams, inhaling venomous vapors rising from the cursed creeks that failed to caress the brittle bones of delirious dawn, where the nocturnal owl sits, phasing stellar phantoms on tattered twigs, oblivious to the piercing pain I breathe, as poetry feels like a somatic hallucination, a reflection of the phoenix crescent, a dialect the naive can never comprehend, the voice of truth, the jaded outline of mortality, can never interpret~ as the last sacred light of twilight r e m a i n s unmarked and lost to the Earth. O wicked wind beneath the crestfallen wings of cruising constellations, will this piece of paper save me from the maleficent violets in the spitfire blaze of stigmatized stars? I am stuck ~ hell-bound, troubled placing my tongue on Freyja’s chalice of tears, for I feel oblivion closer than death, I taste the flames of Tartarus, I dance with demons, I sing to the malevolent moon, I see in distorted dimensions. But would the ignorant know I hear beyond what’s spoken, in search of Eden and love? I give gratitude to your God, but the veiled care not~ this is beyond the making of a self-forged inferno. I am the harbinger of harmony, my soul aches to paint your scarlet spheres in butterfly bliss, praying in secret that the deviant daggers in my spine would blossom into russet roses, their petals ~ like an elixir to my paranoid psyche, paralyzed in the catacomb chaos of insanity, as the scorpion Sun k i s s e s me one more time with sweetened poison. While you, the spectators of this twisted spectacle, condemn my insomniac aura to stain the essence of my existence with condescending colors, unaware that introspection is a powerful weapon~ all blood is blue, and we breathe hypocrisy scrutinizing the unknown....

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Date: 4/13/2025 8:57:00 AM
Dear Ink, soulful poet, your unique poetic perspective is ever impressive with your use of powerful symbolism, imagery and metaphors that brings the angst of psychosis in to focus. Your use of the prompt was ingenious and emphasizes an important mental health issue. Your poetic artistry and empathic intellect shines in this deep, dark, amazing piece. Congratulations for your trophy win in Sara's contest. Warmest wishes my dear poet friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 4/11/2025 6:31:00 PM
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Date: 4/11/2025 3:46:00 AM
Dearest Inky, back with a huge congratulations. So well deserved...Love and Light
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Date: 4/10/2025 10:36:00 PM
Dear Empress, each time I see a trophy against your poem, I feel quite excited as I believe, you are rightly recognized for your talent. So proud of you and a huge congratulation. Please excuse me, I am too busy at the home front. That's why, I don't read poems or respond to comments in time. Actually I had commented on this poem earlier without reading your notes.
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Date: 4/10/2025 10:54:00 PM
Dear sweet valsa; just know that i appreciate everytime you visit and i know when you dont you must be busy! I am so grateful for your support from the start and you celebrating my wins always shows what a beautiful soul you are! Sending you light always
Date: 4/10/2025 2:43:00 PM
This is deep, deep stuff, Ink. Wow. :) Congrats on your win! Lots of power...
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Date: 4/10/2025 10:53:00 PM
Iv missed you! Hope u are well! Im also a bit occupied as having some health issues but i will visit your page soon: sending you light always beautiful soul
Date: 4/10/2025 10:51:00 AM
Back to say congratulations on your much deserved first place win!!!
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Date: 4/10/2025 10:52:00 PM
Thank you always for being so kind and supportive dear beautiful soul! I appreciate you so very much! Truly
Date: 4/10/2025 10:08:00 AM
Congratulations on your win, Ink. I hope you only have to deal with "crawling creatures in the lamented labyrinth of deceitful dreams." Maybe singing to the malevolent moon will keep them away. Lovely writing, as you always manage to tie your lines together with a measure of lacy words. ;-)
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Date: 4/10/2025 10:44:00 PM
Thank you so much dear linnersz, its always so heart warming to see those that celebrate each other n lift each other up, in times of wins and loss and you just supported me in my win. So kind of you! I will always appreciate that! Thank you for coming back and commenting again on this with such a beautiful congratulation comment. Grateful truly
Date: 4/10/2025 8:41:00 AM
Congratulations on your placement in my contest. "I feel oblivion closer than death, I taste the flames of Tartarus, I dance with demons, I sing to the malevolent moon, I see in distorted dimensions" are absolutely amazing lines on the feeling of psychosis. The feeling of your own mind being your own worst enemy. You unique take on the prompt was brilliant.
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Date: 4/10/2025 9:21:00 AM
Ah thank you so much for the trophy win, this time im grateful and i appreciate it wholeheartedly, as its on an important subject and one close to my heart, and i hope many thats been through similar experiences would feel less alone. I love your prompts and i love your choice of winners! And your comments are always chocolate worthy, as they are rare and definitely like rose gold haha! Thank u again grumpy
Date: 4/10/2025 6:29:00 AM
What a magnificent piece, I cannot add to what all the other comments have said, just agree, congratulations
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Date: 4/10/2025 7:59:00 AM
Thank you so much dear terry always for being kind
Date: 4/9/2025 11:48:00 PM
I knew this would take the trophy. Big congrats to you.widb I had time to read poems. But it's so late now.
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Date: 4/10/2025 7:59:00 AM
You are so sweet sweet andrea. Same i need to catch up on soup soon
Date: 4/9/2025 9:33:00 PM
We breathe hypocrisy scrutinizing the unknown... Indeed... So many powerful words and incredible insights and wisdom. Only those who have been touched by psychosis can truly understand the overwhelming nature of this world... And you have done justice and more. Bravo my friend
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Date: 4/10/2025 7:58:00 AM
Thank you dear michelle, my warrior poetess, so happy to have you here in comments, and yes you are so right, unfortunately , i appreciate you always supporting me so selflessly and sincerely! You are the best! So good to wake up to your comment and voice note, sending you light always
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Date: 4/10/2025 5:34:00 AM
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Date: 4/9/2025 9:21:00 PM
gripping expression of what deeply, truly lies in one's mind...congrats on your win, ink! incredible use of imagism, metaphors...
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Date: 4/10/2025 7:57:00 AM
Thank you so very much truly talented soul
Date: 4/9/2025 1:39:00 PM
IE, you describe psychosis with passion and care. Yes, we can treat this form of illness. It's costly to do it right, and there are not a large inventory of truly smart individuals to deal with the many cases who have found their way to the streets in the USA. I think our priorities are leading us to ruin. If it were up to me, we'd see much better care and treatment available for the mentally ill. That is a war worth fighting for goodness sake.
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Date: 4/10/2025 7:56:00 AM
Thank you for your so many thoughtful and kind comments dear duke, i really do appreciate how you leave comments, and how you always feel the essence of words. Grateful always
Date: 4/9/2025 6:34:00 AM
You thought so deeply to give such an interesting perspective to the theme , Ink. I saw everything but the scorpion in here. You very smartly worked the owl and serpent into it with all your other clever phrasings. I just don't know how you are able to write this style so prolifically. Soupmail for you
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Date: 4/9/2025 6:38:00 AM
Scorpion is there too sweet andrea! Aww means alot receiving such feedback from experienced poets like u! Waiting for ur soupmail
Date: 4/9/2025 3:12:00 AM
Dearest Inky,this is such a powerful and deeply evocative poem. The way you express the weight of emotional and psychological struggle is both haunting and beautiful. Your imagery captures the chaos of inner torment while also hinting at resilience and a longing for peace. It’s not just poetry—it’s a brave reflection of a mind navigating pain with raw honesty and artistic grace. Truly moving. I hope you're doing ok, I've been a bit busy but catching up today on a few poets work. Love and Light always...Hugs
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Date: 4/9/2025 7:15:00 AM
Great Minds think alike . lol
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Date: 4/9/2025 5:44:00 AM
Ah there you ding me on whatsapp before i could respond or msg haha
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Date: 4/9/2025 5:43:00 AM
Dear beautiful soul maria, im doing ok, i hope you are too, i was just thinking of messaging you today! Miss you! So happy to see you here in comments truly
Date: 4/9/2025 1:40:00 AM
A dialect line hit me/ i have seen shrinks since i was a teenager/paranoid schizoid, bi-polar they all had their guesses. None. Of them come close to the truth.
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Date: 4/9/2025 7:08:00 AM
Im so sorry youv been through all that, being misdiagnosed can be so challenging and difficult. Thank you so much for sharing your experience with us all
Date: 4/9/2025 1:09:00 AM
As one who has been diagnosed as bipolar and with other afflictions I deal with stigmas but the worst one is self inflicted. I love your heart so big as to embrace this with words like, “O wicked wind beneath the crestfallen wings of cruising constellations, will this piece of paper save me from the maleficent violets in the spitfire blaze of stigmatized stars? Wow. My words are not accurate enough to describe the beauty and grace that you possess share within your work! Fav and love this
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Date: 4/9/2025 7:11:00 AM
Dear Karen, yes the society is so judgmental but theres so many that understand mental health challenges too, you are an amazing and talented soul, so kind and supportive, and im grateful to have met you here. Thank you so much for sharing a little so sincerely about your experience too, and i appreciate also your fave truly. Always sending you light
Date: 4/8/2025 10:40:00 PM
"amidst serpent estuaries, surging within strangled skin, as if I am the living sin, jinxed by the crawling creatures in the lamented labyrinth" Dear Empress, you have carried the topic to such stellar levels. I thought of entering this contest, but I can think of the scorpion as the venomous thing that stings, the snake, as the crawling and coiling thing with fangs and the owl as the nocturnal bird that preys. To what metaphoric level you have raised your poem. Phrases like' self forged inferno, paranoid psyche, catacomb chaos of insanity' are so powerful and points to your mental state, because you are kissed not in sweet love but with sweetened poison. However you wish to forgive and come out of this state of mind....."I am the harbinger of harmony, my soul aches to paint your scarlet spheres in butterfly bliss" Amazing poem. All the Best dear friend.
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Date: 4/8/2025 5:02:00 PM
My brain danced reading this Ink E! Great enjoyment thanks!
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Date: 4/8/2025 1:21:00 PM
Just because people don't have a bandage on does mean that they are not suffering mental illness of some kind, sadly years ago they were put in an asylum and forgotten about. Thankfully there's help out there now but only if those suffering want it, you described it so well IE. Tom
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Date: 4/8/2025 12:04:00 PM
vermiform lie veiling the vehement suffering amidst serpent estuaries, oooo come through alliterations!!! jinxed by the crawling creatures in the lamented labyrinth of deceitful dreams,.. mmmm live a good creature moment … brittle bones of delirious dawn, oblivious to the piercing pain I breathe, the heaviness in this piece is absolutely stunning! this is beyond the making of a self-forged inferno… ooo the intensity!!!! Love the imagery.. deviant daggers in my spine would blossom into russet roses,. Dayum!!! Love pairing or softness and depth in this!!! This piece is an absolute beauty papii…
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Date: 4/8/2025 12:02:00 PM
Well, my dear, Ink. You certainly went from not knowing what to write for Sara's contest to plugging in to sub surface channels of seeing, tasting, dancing, singing, seeing AND expressing those emotions in so many lines of your Monologue. Dramatic it is and if that's what happens when kissed by the scorpion sun, I have been forewarned to keep my distance. Seriously, in depth focusing, Ink.
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Date: 4/8/2025 11:57:00 AM
If I could only have an ounce of your poetic magic, I’d be a greater person. You have touched on the struggles of an illness so well. Very powerful write.
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Date: 4/8/2025 11:49:00 AM
Never been with a person experiencing psychosis per say, though my relative has gone through it several times, usually alcohol and/or drug induced. However, I have had numerous dealings with schizophrenics, often off their meds, and this is a pretty close approximation I think. You've written about the experience powerfully
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Date: 4/9/2025 9:57:00 AM
Thank you so much for sharing your thoughts and experience too, grateful always for your support tomsz
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Tom Woody
Date: 4/8/2025 11:49:00 AM
Dang! Thought I beat Aura to the punch. Of course, my comment was much longer lol
Date: 4/8/2025 11:48:00 AM
Well said! When I went through whah I went through , I spoke to the moon . So I could relate to it .
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Date: 4/8/2025 12:10:00 PM
Dahlin! You are one amazing fighter! I love you

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