Dawn

Dawn you were my sunrise my beginning my one and only the hope for my future the thought of you yet lingers like colors in my morning sky now you are gone and my Dawn is Dusk as colors fade to blue, I still miss you 08/26/15

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Daver Austin

Date: 11/22/2016 9:48:00 AM

Fine handling of this form. Congrats. daver

James Inman
Date: 11/22/2016 10:24:00 AM

Thanks Daver.

Skat A

Date: 10/16/2015 9:40:00 PM

James, Congratulations on your win. -SKAT-

James Inman
Date: 10/17/2015 10:41:00 AM

Thanks SKAT!

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 10/16/2015 8:02:00 PM

I had quite liked this. Surprised it was not higher on the list, my friend. Congrats though!!

James Inman
Date: 10/17/2015 10:40:00 AM

Thanks Andrea, it is what it is.

Julia Ward

Date: 10/15/2015 3:03:00 PM

Reflective - most enjoyable...

James Inman
Date: 10/17/2015 10:40:00 AM

Thanks Julia, glad you enjoyed.

Charlotte Puddifoot

Date: 10/15/2015 2:23:00 PM

a very nice, poignant etheree here, it's a very popular form! congrats on your win in the contest

James Inman
Date: 10/17/2015 10:39:00 AM

Thank you Charlotte, I've done a few lately. I like the form. It makes a shape that can set the mood of the poem whether its standard, backward or multi-poems combined.

Sandra Haight

Date: 10/15/2015 9:02:00 AM

Love the feeling in your Etheree, James, that can be interpreted so many ways. Congratulations on your nice win. Sandra

James Inman
Date: 10/15/2015 10:02:00 AM

Thank you, Sandra, a bit of a play on the name.

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 10/15/2015 2:17:00 AM

Congrats on superb win James with this wonderful write!

James Inman
Date: 10/15/2015 9:59:00 AM

Thank you Dr.

Michael Tor

Date: 10/15/2015 12:47:00 AM

James one of my favorites. Nice win!!!

James Inman
Date: 10/15/2015 9:59:00 AM

Thanks Michael.

Lin Lane

Date: 10/14/2015 11:24:00 PM

Great work, James. You have a new Dawn to look forward to each day! Congratulations on a well written gem. ~ Lin ~

Robert Lindley

Date: 10/14/2015 8:46:00 PM

Congrats on your win with this fine poem! A7

Caycay Jennings

Date: 9/1/2015 11:40:00 AM

Oh but that is lovely. I enjoy poems so much that echo feelings within me. You have that talent ... CayCay

James Inman
Date: 9/1/2015 12:27:00 PM

My favorite comment so far. Thank you.

Emile Pinet

Date: 8/28/2015 9:56:00 AM

This reads as a beautiful tribute to a person you loved. Emile.

James Inman
Date: 8/30/2015 11:10:00 PM

Secrets, secrets. Perhaps someone from another life.

Kp Nunez

Date: 8/27/2015 10:13:00 PM

Hi James. This is simply beautiful. I am encouraged to try this form. PS. About your earlier comment, I am fully made up with the sponsor's comment on my birthday month acrostic though there was a glitch and it didn't get to enter. Thanks! Kim

James Inman
Date: 8/30/2015 11:08:00 PM

Kim, thank you and you really should try it. I'm becoming very fond of this form. Andrea has challenged me to start doing one a week, don't know if I'm that fond of it, ha, we'll see.

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 8/27/2015 4:05:00 PM

this would be so neat if it were written to an actual girl who had the name Dawn. I love it. Etheree is one of my favorite forms for writing short poems!

James Inman
Date: 8/27/2015 4:56:00 PM

I have grown to really like Etherees as well.