Dancing

"Dance! Dance!" he constantly told his dancers. They danced morning, afternoon, and evening. So exhausted they were, they died. Now he keeps their bones in his closet, fastened with strings like marionettes...

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Joseph Kimbugwe

Date: 10/11/2016 10:44:00 AM

This is a very nice analogy poem Teddy. I would like to select it to use in my poetry lessons. kindly help me out with the subject matter of this great piece. thank you

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 10/12/2016 5:09:00 AM

The dancers' skeletons represents the citizens' burden to meet their leaders expectations, which is passed to their children after they are long gone.

Joseph Kimbugwe

Date: 10/11/2016 10:42:00 AM

This is a very nice analogy poem, Teddy. I would wish to use it to teach my poetry class. Kindly help me with the subject matter of this poem to see if it matches with what I think it is.

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 10/12/2016 5:07:00 AM

Greetings Joseph. I'm glad you've enjoyed my piece!! ;-) It would be an honor to have my work used in your poetry class!! The dancers portray how the sweat of citizens' work is taken advantage by our leaders in form of corruption or dictatorship.

Sara Chansarkar

Date: 5/24/2016 9:25:00 AM

Well written Teddy!

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 5/24/2016 10:27:00 AM

Thank you so much Sara!! *^_^*

Skat A

Date: 5/23/2016 12:35:00 AM

Teddy, Congratulations and thank you for sharing a poem you are proud of. Stop by my latest blog "Innocent of All" and enjoy the warm smile. :) **SKAT**

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 5/23/2016 10:45:00 AM

You are very much welcome, Skat!! *^_^* It was an awesome contest!! ;-) Thank you so much for your applause!! *^_^*

Vladislav Raven

Date: 4/1/2016 3:04:00 PM

Hi Teddy, Congratulations on your win in the contest. Enjoyed the write my Friend....Vlad.

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/2/2016 5:26:00 AM

Thank you so much Vlad!!! :-)

Dr. Upma A. Sharma

Date: 4/1/2016 2:06:00 AM

Congrats on ur superb win with this lovely write Teddy..

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/1/2016 5:24:00 AM

Thank you so much Dr. Upma!!!! *^_^* <3

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/31/2016 11:56:00 PM

Teddy, Congratulations on your Awesome Any Poem #38 win. Stop by my blog "GONE," drop by and leave a smile if you'd like. :) Always & Forever ~LINDA~

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/1/2016 5:23:00 AM

Thank you so much for your applause Linda!!!! *^_^* <3

Poet Destroyer A

Date: 3/31/2016 7:49:00 PM

Teddy, you've expressed yourself well, I enjoyed your poem. Please keep writing and sharing your poetry XOX ~LINDA~

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/1/2016 5:22:00 AM

Thank you so much in loads Linda!!! *^_^* <3 <3

Constance La France

Date: 3/31/2016 9:11:00 AM

Teddy, this is absolutely wonderful, I can relate as a former dancer, it was exhausting, and the teachers sometimes were tyrants, I am loving this 7 ~

Teddy Kimathi
Date: 4/1/2016 5:21:00 AM

Lol. Thanks so much for your votes and loving my work, BW!!! *^_^* <3 I would sure have loved seeing you dancing!!! ;-)