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Dance, Oh My, Dance

That night, as so many, I woke and stepped, half asleep, featherlight out of bed, so steep, or did I forget As usual I fall, could not make legs stand at all. Lying on the ground, hurt and confused but sound, waiting for dawn... stifling a yawn, I opened my tablet and let my fantasy set the tone And with eyes closed, hands working, duvet warming me, I wrote, seeing me dance in trance, (euphoric on a cold floor), As I did in reality, so many years before *** March 17, 2017 https://www.poetrysoup.com/poem/i_dance_847400 1st place in Contest: The Tale of your best. Sponsor: Phillip Garcia.

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Date: 4/8/2017 4:44:00 AM
You've molded your poem so nicely, with the right words, expressing emotions that mirror in our thoughts.... Congrats Darren, for your placement in the contest!! ;-)
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Darren White
Date: 4/8/2017 7:04:00 AM
Thank you so much Teddy! :)
Date: 4/4/2017 9:27:00 PM
You describe this very well - and I got a chance to read the original poem which I had not yet seen when you had posted it. Beautiful.
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Darren White
Date: 4/5/2017 12:09:00 AM
Agnes, thank you so very much :)
Date: 4/4/2017 3:26:00 AM
I came back to gratulate you on your 1st place entry, Duir! Well done mate!
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Darren White
Date: 4/4/2017 6:31:00 AM
Thank you Budgie! <3
Date: 3/18/2017 10:40:00 PM
Beautiful, Darren, a 7+ , Good luck in the competition
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 11:35:00 PM
Wonderful Maria, thank you :)
Date: 3/18/2017 10:43:00 AM
Good luck Darren in the contest. This is a great write.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 11:35:00 PM
Elizabeth, thank you :)
Date: 3/17/2017 11:47:00 PM
Darren, I am awed by your talent.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:09:00 AM
As I am by yours :) Thanks my dear friend!
Date: 3/17/2017 9:25:00 PM
You are invincible my friend, never forget that! Best of luck in the contest, Duir! Awesome work.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:09:00 AM
Thanks Budgie! I will do my best <3
Date: 3/17/2017 9:24:00 PM
Never give up on your fantasies my sweet friend! Beautiful one ! Good luck on the contest :*
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:08:00 AM
Thanks my sweet friend, and no, never! <3
Date: 3/17/2017 5:57:00 PM
Hello Darren. The first line truly sets the tone and your ending line gives pause. Best of luck with the contest. Beautifully expressed.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:07:00 AM
Hi Lisa. Thank you so much :)
Date: 3/17/2017 5:22:00 PM
Lovely poem about freeing the mind.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:07:00 AM
Thanks Joyce :)
Date: 3/17/2017 5:01:00 PM
Let your mind free...beautiful
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:06:00 AM
Thanks Tim, yes, my mind is free :)
Date: 3/17/2017 4:54:00 PM
A 7 a beautiful poem.
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Darren White
Date: 3/18/2017 1:06:00 AM
Darlene, thank you so much for the 7 :)

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