crows feet

years go by like birds flew past our eyes ~ to perch on the periphery

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Daniel Henry Rodgers

Date: 2/2/2024 12:32:00 PM

Your poem really made me pause and reflect. It's how quickly time passes and how it leaves its mark on us. Your words stirred up introspective thoughts about the passage of time and the moments we often overlook. Very Well Done! - Blessings, Daniel

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/2/2024 2:51:00 PM

Heya Daniel, I’m delighted you felt the essence of my monoku, time is impossibly fleeting, yet it’s always there just the same, perspectively a paradoxical illusion, cheers David

Arlo Parker

Date: 2/1/2024 11:09:00 AM

Evocative, DK, and terrific perspective presented. :o)

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/1/2024 12:08:00 PM

Thank you Arlo, perspective was always the aim within this one, cheers David

Di11y Da11y

Date: 1/31/2024 11:38:00 PM

This has horror vibes when visualised - a bit like the fact we eat at least 8 spiders in our lifetime when asleep, now birds perch positioned ready to peck out your eyes, so you'd better keep them closed :o it's a great monoku though - apologies for bringing this interpretation haha... NB still thinking about it...

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/1/2024 12:27:00 AM

I didn’t know about us eating spiders when asleep, one would think those damn crows feet would scare them off, but I always like to bring food for thought into my monokus, and you just helped me out with your comment Dilly lol, cheers David

Lin Lane

Date: 1/31/2024 4:12:00 PM

Crows roosting on a perch... I think I wrote a poem about that some time back. You're probably asleep as I write this, getting some beauty sleep to prevent crow's feet.

David Kavanagh
Date: 2/1/2024 12:22:00 AM

Heya Lin, yes I often wonder about those birds once they go out of eyeshot, do they perch somewhere on the periphery and leave foot prints behind, I most definitely was asleep when you left the comment, no crows feet this morning lol! Cheers David

I Am Anaya

Date: 1/31/2024 1:53:00 PM

A part of life, too quickly now for some! Easy to understand and makes sense! Discombobulated, never :)

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/31/2024 2:49:00 PM

A crown of sonnets needs a fresh mind, I will check it out tomorrow I’m on the periphery of sleep at the moment, thanks for the pointer!

I Am Anaya
Date: 1/31/2024 2:23:00 PM

aha, balance is so well rounded, grounded, you need to check this out: "Have we seen God" U.S. 1/30/24 if you get a chance...blew my mind!

David Kavanagh
Date: 1/31/2024 2:11:00 PM

Heya Anaya, finding balance is important, I like to give the reader something to think about without discombobulating them, this one is perhaps deep, but not perplexing, cheers David