Crippled Ships

Neptune's net strikes on floating flames
Her souls sounding faint gossamer goodbyes
Ocean's octaves murmur mute
Dim dives to a regretful reef
Blue grief blurs, sailors say
In twilight tides, widows whisper
Their lost laments for crippled ships

12/19/21
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Brown Avatar
December 30, 2021 at 12:50 PM
Michelle, a nice write on the Neptune. HNY ~ Debra
Marcum Wong Avatar
December 28, 2021 at 2:13 PM
This is a real stunner Michelle. From the vision of lamenting widows to your glorious imagery. Outstanding! Have a wonderful new year. Blessings xxoo
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December 28, 2021 at 11:51 AM
I see you love water and ocean waves, fluid poetry here, nicely done dear friend, keep well :)
Wolf Avatar
December 27, 2021 at 7:48 PM
Fantabulous utilization of the English language, Michelle. Your phraseology is as deep as the ocean of which you write --- and takes time and effort on the part of the reader for it to sink in. Masterful! Joy forever, Gershon
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December 25, 2021 at 3:45 PM
Michelle, a striking salute to the power of the deep blue sea, and the sadness its depths can bring. Are we taming the waves, or are they taming us? I particularly love the line 'Ocean's octaves murmur mute'. Great alliterations and compact writing. I fondly foresee a wondrous win with this nautical narrative. Merry Christmas, friend ~ John
Peck Avatar
December 23, 2021 at 11:41 AM
Really good alliteration, Michelle! "in twilight tides, widows whisper" so beautiful. Good luck in contest :)
Baker Avatar
December 22, 2021 at 3:14 PM
Fine alliteration, Michelle. Enjoyed the poem. Good luck! A poet friend, Bill Merry Christmas!
Lane Avatar
December 21, 2021 at 1:32 AM
Sometimes alliteration causes the tongue to be tied, but yours is well done, Michelle.
Cunningham Avatar
December 20, 2021 at 2:35 PM
Many have lost their lives at sea, it must be one of the most dangerous jobs in the world. Best of luck in the contest Michelle. Merry Christmas. Tom
Leffanta Avatar
December 20, 2021 at 10:27 AM
Well said, but Davey Jones is now welcoming astronauts, too! Enjoyed!
Goldsmith Avatar
December 20, 2021 at 9:19 AM
I enjoyed your "Crippled Ships" write. Glad to see a new write from you. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022.....................
Pandit Avatar
December 20, 2021 at 5:09 AM
Twilight tides, windows whisper--great vocabulary, as always, Michelle, in your splendid alliteration.
Deo Avatar
December 19, 2021 at 11:19 PM
MICHELLE, thanks for writing this and for all your presence during 2021. many of s were buoyed when a great cascade washed over us, by your well-chosen, beautiful ... words. shalom shalom & holiday cheer. anil deo
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December 19, 2021 at 5:47 PM
This was an exciting read, Michelle, with excellent metaphors. I wish you luck in the contest.
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