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Crippled Ships

Neptune's net strikes on floating flames
Her souls sounding faint gossamer goodbyes
Ocean's octaves murmur mute
Dim dives to a regretful reef
Blue grief blurs, sailors say
In twilight tides, widows whisper
Their lost laments for crippled ships

12/19/21

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Debra L Brown

Date: 12/30/2021 12:50:00 PM

Michelle, a nice write on the Neptune. HNY ~ Debra

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 12/28/2021 2:13:00 PM

This is a real stunner Michelle. From the vision of lamenting widows to your glorious imagery. Outstanding! Have a wonderful new year. Blessings xxoo

Mystic Rose Rose

Date: 12/28/2021 11:51:00 AM

I see you love water and ocean waves, fluid poetry here, nicely done dear friend, keep well :)

Gershon Wolf

Date: 12/27/2021 7:48:00 PM

Fantabulous utilization of the English language, Michelle. Your phraseology is as deep as the ocean of which you write --- and takes time and effort on the part of the reader for it to sink in. Masterful! Joy forever, Gershon

John Watt

Date: 12/25/2021 3:45:00 PM

Michelle, a striking salute to the power of the deep blue sea, and the sadness its depths can bring. Are we taming the waves, or are they taming us? I particularly love the line 'Ocean's octaves murmur mute'. Great alliterations and compact writing. I fondly foresee a wondrous win with this nautical narrative. Merry Christmas, friend ~ John

Ann Peck

Date: 12/23/2021 11:41:00 AM

Really good alliteration, Michelle! "in twilight tides, widows whisper" so beautiful. Good luck in contest :)

Bill Baker

Date: 12/22/2021 3:14:00 PM

Fine alliteration, Michelle. Enjoyed the poem. Good luck! A poet friend, Bill Merry Christmas!

Lin Lane

Date: 12/21/2021 1:32:00 AM

Sometimes alliteration causes the tongue to be tied, but yours is well done, Michelle.

Tom Cunningham

Date: 12/20/2021 2:35:00 PM

Many have lost their lives at sea, it must be one of the most dangerous jobs in the world. Best of luck in the contest Michelle. Merry Christmas. Tom

Rico Leffanta

Date: 12/20/2021 10:27:00 AM

Well said, but Davey Jones is now welcoming astronauts, too! Enjoyed!

Paula Goldsmith

Date: 12/20/2021 9:19:00 AM

I enjoyed your "Crippled Ships" write. Glad to see a new write from you. Have a Blessed Christmas and 2022.....................

Vijay Pandit

Date: 12/20/2021 5:09:00 AM

Twilight tides, windows whisper--great vocabulary, as always, Michelle, in your splendid alliteration.

Anil Deo

Date: 12/19/2021 11:19:00 PM

MICHELLE, thanks for writing this and for all your presence during 2021. many of s were buoyed when a great cascade washed over us, by your well-chosen, beautiful ... words. shalom shalom & holiday cheer. anil deo