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Covered eyes

'The rise and fall of the eyelids' I wrote last night As I pondered whether sleep would help But sleep felt like wakefulness And my moments of peace - too shallow So I'm drowning in the shallows Because I won't flail my arms I'm too ashamed that it's me Not putting my feet down Too tired now to know up from down I don't even know if drowning is Just how breathing feels Each capital letter the moment I breathe just enough To consider One deep breath That gets my feet moving Or my voice shouting I just met disapproval The words were 'are you ok?' As I held my phone typing this... Inwardly gasping for air Outwardly watching his eyes As soon as I got in I cried The dog did an amazing leap onto my knee I've cancelled my meetings without notice Because I need a moment to think

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Hilda Greenhough

Date: 1/24/2024 12:14:00 PM

It is difficult to plan when you've gone without sleep. I know. I was going to go to Costco three days ago, but I was too tired. Now fog is outside. Can't go. Your poem, though written in grogginess, is perfection.

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/24/2024 12:18:00 PM

Well thank you Hilda, I'd not imagined a cosmic Costco link! I love that poetry is absolutely free for the reader to interpret - proven here beautifully :) thank you for your lovely comment, it was a delight x

David Kavanagh

Date: 1/24/2024 3:02:00 AM

I’m not sure if a moment to think is what you need most, although I get the irony in that line Dilly, drowning in thoughts comes to mind, A stiff drink sometimes helps settle us down, but not always recommended, the dog’s amazing leap was a nice little tonic to juxtapose and offset the melancholic mindset throughout, thought provoking poem, but you probably didn’t want to hear that, cheers David

Di11y Da11y
Date: 1/24/2024 3:29:00 AM

The dog is the star of the show really - so cute, he was breezing about, heard a noise and did road runner legs into the room, leapt into the air and snuggled onto my knee. It's true thinking time is not the cure all it's made out to be. Thanks for taking the time to comment, appreciated.