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Shades of Blue Swirling winds dashed in a frenzy Her composure tore apart, Then the lightning and the thunder All pitched in to break her heart. Darkness fell with little warning Thoughts got flooded in the rain And the only sense of feeling Left the ache of burning pain. Foaming waves kept on their pounding, Made it harder to resist Weary mind spoke of surrender: Why the trouble to persist? Then to mind came thoughts of sunrise Brilliance of the midday sun Magic of the twilight settling Lover’s promise to be won. Faces formed behind the curtain Of the deluge of her tears Through the howling winds, a whisper: “Give to me those raging fears. Think of all that still awaits you Places, dreams you’ve yet to see Turn away from blue that shades you I am Love, come walk with me.” ------------------------------------------ For Jan Allison's Collaboration Contest 10th July 2017

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Richard Lamoureux

Date: 6/23/2018 8:33:00 AM

I didn’t read any of the winners but I can’t imagine them being as good as this one. You and Eileen are two of my all time favorites here and this pier does not dissapoint.

Paul Callus
Date: 6/23/2018 3:11:00 PM

Thank you, Richard. Your complimentary comments are much appreciated. Placement in the contest succumbed to a mere technicality! Regards // paul

Susan Ashley

Date: 12/11/2017 7:23:00 PM

Paul, a lilting and lovely rhythm waltzes with the beautifully expressed anguish of your poem, to the brink of despair and back from the edge with a message of light, love and hope. A seamless and wonderful collaboration between you and Eileen with alluring content and captivating imagery. Warmest wishes ~Susan

Paul Callus
Date: 12/12/2017 7:56:00 AM

Well, what can I say, Susan...you have said it all:) I am glad that you enjoyed this poem, and I am sure that Eileen will be pleased with your comments and critique of the overall content. ~ Warm regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 11/17/2017 1:23:00 PM

Hi, Paul...I'm sorry we didn't make the cut. :( I love to write with you, nevertheless. Hugs, dear.

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2017 2:05:00 PM

No problem, Eileen; winning is not everything:) the contest served its purpose, and a new collaboration was born:) Hugs // paul

Anne-Lise Andresen

Date: 11/15/2017 2:00:00 PM

- A lovely co-writing ... who is your partner - Congratulations, Paul - hugs // Anne-Lise :)

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2017 9:59:00 AM

Thank you, Anne-Lise:) my partner was Eileen; I doubt if she knows as yet that the results are out. Hugs // paul

Jan Allison

Date: 11/15/2017 11:08:00 AM

A most beautiful poem Paul, unfortunately I had to award an HM as your partner didn't enter the contest too:-( hugs jan xx

Paul Callus
Date: 11/17/2017 9:58:00 AM

Glad you liked it, Jan. Pity about the final outcome. There must have been some glitch since I entered mine only after my partner had entered hers. Hugs // paul

Lynn Marie

Date: 8/20/2017 5:02:00 PM

A lovely collaboration. Her anguish and hope are beautifully expressive, the nature elements compliment the intense emotions and elevate the drama wonderfully. Stunning imagery one easily can visualize as a short film. I love everything about this. Excellent writing, a pleasure to read:) a fave

Paul Callus
Date: 8/22/2017 10:34:00 AM

Thank you Lynn....your excellent feedback and the fav are very much appreciated...so are each and every one of your visits:) Best regards // paul

Eve Roper

Date: 7/25/2017 9:16:00 PM

Love the imagery you have both created , the flow is perfect, the of love and deluge of tears :-) a winner already.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/26/2017 3:33:00 PM

So glad you enjoyed it, Eve:) Thank you for the lovely comments. Warm regards // paul

Akkina Downing

Date: 7/25/2017 6:56:00 PM

Wow, what an outstanding piece! I really like this a lot. So beautiful, Paul and Eileen :)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/26/2017 3:31:00 PM

Your 'wow' says it all, Akkina:) Thank you! Regards // paul

Ralph Sergi

Date: 7/20/2017 6:19:00 PM

beautiful collaboration, Paul very emotional with such imagery.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 9:25:00 AM

I am pleased you found this to your liking, Ralph...thank you. Regards // paul

Ravi Sathasivam

Date: 7/17/2017 1:28:00 AM

Excellent and perfect collaboration. Lovely flow. Enjoyed reading it. Thanks for sharing it.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 9:24:00 AM

Thank you for reading and enjoying, Ravi. Regards // paul

Kim Rodrigues

Date: 7/16/2017 10:39:00 AM

Sounds like a winner! We can feel her torment then her hope! Kudos, Paul and Jan!

Paul Callus
Date: 7/16/2017 3:27:00 PM

Thank you for reading and liking, Kim! Regards // paul

Jack Horne

Date: 7/16/2017 9:10:00 AM

love this, Paul - you both work so well together

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 9:08:00 AM

Thank you, Jack; always a pleasure to have you stopping by, my friend. Regards // paul

Connie Marcum Wong

Date: 7/14/2017 2:06:00 PM

Wow, a collaboration that is sure to find its way to the top of any list! I love the subtle rhythm change of the eight/seven syllable count. You two shine brilliantly in this wonderful piece! Bravo! ; )

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 9:07:00 AM

Thank you, Connie...you have a keen eye; the 8/7 syllable count always sounds melodic. I'm so pleased you enjoyed our collaboration. Hope surgery has come and gone successfully. Regards // paul

Nette Onclaud

Date: 7/12/2017 12:49:00 PM

captivated by the essence of this mystical work, paul... what a heady sensation and collab.. huggs

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 8:42:00 AM

Your lovely comments are music to the ear, Nette...thank you! Hugs // paul

Maria Williams

Date: 7/12/2017 6:42:00 AM

Paul what an impressive collaboration you and your partner have come up with. I particularly love the Hope that you have ended on, bringing that sense of Peace. I love it and must fave it for sure. A winner in my eyes already...Maria

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 8:40:00 AM

Thank you for reading and liking, Maria; the fav is also truly appreciated. Regards // paul

Andrea Dietrich

Date: 7/11/2017 6:32:00 PM

I saw this over at Eileen's and am certain you guys are on the winners' list!! What a gem this is.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 8:10:00 AM

Many thanks, Andrea...yours are glowing comments:) Regards // paul

Charlie Smith

Date: 7/11/2017 3:22:00 PM

I just finished reading this one on Eileen's post. My opinion didn't change. I believe you two will place very high in the contest, great work...

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 8:08:00 AM

Thank you for your generosity, Charlie. I always give weight to your words. Regards // paul

Eileen Manassian

Date: 7/11/2017 2:49:00 PM

Who might your collaborator be? I wonder! :) Always an immense pleasure to work with someone whose work I greatly admire and value. You are very kind to ask me to collab with you. We should get another few collabs out and print a book! :) Hugs

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 7:59:00 AM

A Callus~Manassian special edition!! Worth thinking about Eileen:)) The pleasure is mine...it is not always that simple to meet people who are very much on the same wavelength. Excuse the late reply to your lovely comment...time is definitely not on my side!! Hugs // paul

Freddie Robinson Jr.

Date: 7/11/2017 2:37:00 PM

This is such a beautiful poem, Paul. And the ending is priceless. You and your collab partner did a magnificent job w/this gorgeously written poem. An instant fave of mine. Love and peace always, my friend.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 7:44:00 AM

Your priceless comments and the fav are indeed much appreciated, Freddie! Thank you! Regards // paul

Joanna Daniel

Date: 7/11/2017 10:24:00 AM

Excellent collaboration, both of you, I say, Jan is gonna have a really tough time judging this contest:) your entry just adds to it:)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 7:43:00 AM

Excuse the late reply, Jo. Thank you for the 'excellent' comment :) Regards // paul

Daniel Turner

Date: 7/11/2017 8:58:00 AM

A beautiful collaboration, Paul and partner. Love can take us to the depths of despair or soaring with elation. You should write longer poems. You express your thoughts so well:)

Paul Callus
Date: 7/23/2017 7:41:00 AM

Thank you, Danny. It's not that I don't write 'long' poems, but short forms appeal to me more, I suppose:) Regards // paul

James Inman

Date: 7/11/2017 8:11:00 AM

Paul, a wonderfully constructed poem by you and your partner, darkness turning to light, despair turning to hope.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/16/2017 4:27:00 PM

Many thanks, James. I enjoyed your co-write with BW, too. Regards // paul

Joseph May

Date: 7/11/2017 5:39:00 AM

I love the lyrical flow to this beautiful poem, and the storm that gathered within...Great collaboration....best wishes

Paul Callus
Date: 7/11/2017 4:14:00 PM

Thank you, Joseph. I have just read yours...much impressed! Regards // paul

M. L. Kiser

Date: 7/11/2017 4:34:00 AM

Flows rather musically with a great sentiment. Good luck with the contest.

Paul Callus
Date: 7/16/2017 10:15:00 AM

Thank you, ML. Best regards // paul

Supraja Kannan

Date: 7/10/2017 9:19:00 PM

Beautiful poem Paul... Great flow and perfect collaboration... Very well done... Good luck in the contest...

Paul Callus
Date: 7/15/2017 9:25:00 AM

Thank you for reading and commenting so positively, Supraja. Have a lovely weekend. Regards // paul