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Childhood Memories - Visual 5

Climbing frames where we grazed our knees
Knees kissed better by watchful mum. 
Mum always there while we had fun
Fun days at play – how I miss them!

Contest Four Lines Only. Nette Onclaud
Checked with how many syllables
7th June 2015
Jan Allison
Visual 5

childhoodmemoryfree verse

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Gary Dye

July 3, 2015 at 11:14 AM

Awesome as always

Joe Maverick

June 14, 2015 at 3:18 PM

Congrats on your placement here Jan..'

Jan Allison

June 14, 2015 at 4:53 PM

thanks Joe:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

June 12, 2015 at 11:07 PM

Jan, I just stopped by to say congrats on your win:) Alexis

Jan Allison

June 13, 2015 at 4:45 AM

Thanks Alexis:-) Hugs Jan xx

Skat A

June 12, 2015 at 7:45 PM

jan, Congratulations on your 4 line win. Hugs SKAT

Jan Allison

June 13, 2015 at 4:44 AM

Thanks Skat:-) Hugs Jan xx

Kim Merryman

June 12, 2015 at 6:12 PM

Brings back good feelings from the past. Great write! Congrats on your win, Jan! Love, KIm

Jan Allison

June 12, 2015 at 6:13 PM

thanks so much Kim:-) hugs jan xx

Joseph May

June 12, 2015 at 1:10 PM

Wonderful write Jan...Congrats on your win

Jan Allison

June 12, 2015 at 2:46 PM

Thanks so much Joseph:-) hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

June 12, 2015 at 7:28 AM

Coming back to say congrats :)

Jan Allison

June 12, 2015 at 2:45 PM

Thanks so much Ed:-) hugs Jan xx

Alexander Seal

June 12, 2015 at 7:00 AM

Thats great - it is nice to be able to watch my little son and recall good memories

Jan Allison

June 12, 2015 at 2:44 PM

Thanks Alexander:-) Hugs jan xx

Kelly Deschler

June 10, 2015 at 10:44 PM

I miss them too, Jan. I have good memories of the playground and would love to relive them with my own kids someday... You've done so well with this challenging contest. Good luck to you! :)

Jan Allison

June 11, 2015 at 1:45 AM

Thanks for the lovely comment Kelly I do hope your dreams come true:-) Hugs Jan xx

Sandra Haight

June 10, 2015 at 5:27 PM

Great childhood memories, Jan. I like your take on this image, although I chose the same visual using a different interpretation! Best wishes for the contest! Hugs, Sandra

Jan Allison

June 10, 2015 at 5:35 PM

It is lovely to see the different interpretations of the images:-) Hugs Jan xx

James Fraser

June 10, 2015 at 3:38 PM

Sadly my mother didn't stick around long enough, not that I recall much previous to six years old. Too much trauma at a young age has blanked my memory. Love this short piece wishing it was me, hugs, James xx

Jan Allison

June 10, 2015 at 3:41 PM

Oh James that is sad that your childhood memories aren't good thankfully you have some lovely memories of other happy times to cherish:-) hugs Jan xx

Thomas Martin

June 9, 2015 at 3:57 PM

a lot said in a few lines! well done, jan.

Jan Allison

June 9, 2015 at 3:58 PM

Thanks Thomas:-) Hugs Jan xx

Paul Callus

June 8, 2015 at 5:19 PM

We did not have any of these things where to play when I was young!! But mind you, I have tried them out not that long ago...a dare from V. Very good entry...wish you luck:) hugs // paul

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 5:42 PM

Thanks Paul I am sure you and Valentina have fun in everything you do:-) Hugs jan xx

Sara Kendrick

June 8, 2015 at 3:25 PM

Enjoyed reading your very descriptive work..It aptly describes the scene as though written by someone who has experienced it..Reads like a winner to me..Thanks for stopping by..Sara

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 5:10 PM

Thanks Sara:-) hugs Jan xx

Mike Roberts

June 8, 2015 at 6:20 AM

Jan thanks for comments from another ex-Brummy, saw your notes. Poems were one therapeutic way of coming to terms back in 2007, I had Male Hormone Therapy for 28 weeks followed by 4.5 weeks of radiotherapy, now on annusl PSA testing and have received excellent treatment all the time at Southend Hospital and as a member of a Support Group. I had a very supportive family and still have though sadly my dear wife succumbed to an embolism last year. Must finish with a hug, take care Mike x

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 6:30 AM

So glad you are doing so well and are using your poetry and humour to get a valuable message out to people that this cancer can be cured. hubby had robotic surgery in 2013 3 monthly PSA tests but life is good and I now have a wonderful hobby which if you read my poems has got me through the worst possible time in my life with my dad being diagnosed with terminal cancer. So sorry to learn of your sad loss - keep writing & I will keep reading - I will add you to my fave poets :-) Hugs Jan xx

Viv Wigley

June 7, 2015 at 11:56 PM

Come on, Jan, let's go swing. Weeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeeee! Lovely piece of innocence and nostalgia. Good luck in the comp. Viv x

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:49 AM

Thanks Viv I hope Nette likes it - I have seen some great poems for the contest:-) Hugs Jan xx

Edward Ebbs

June 7, 2015 at 11:09 PM

LOL, Play with them when the kids are in school...no one will know, nicely done Jan :)

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:48 AM

I have been on the swings lol :-) hugs Jan xx

Andrea Dietrich

June 7, 2015 at 10:35 PM

this is adorable,Jan. I went in the totally opposite direction for this challenge. Oh, and I wanted to say, that was great assonance in line one with the long A sound. I really like this!!

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:48 AM

Thanks Andrea - I do appreciate your feedback - I just hope Nette likes my take on the image:-) hugs Jan xx

Sneha Rv

June 7, 2015 at 8:34 PM

I loved this!! All tge best in the contest, dear Jan!! :D :D

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:47 AM

Thanks Sneha I am sure you will pen a brilliant poem - hope you join in my footles contest too:-) Hugs jan xx

Lindsay Laurie

June 7, 2015 at 8:24 PM

G'day Jan... those were the days Jan. Nothing else to worry about but the playground - thanks Jan - Lindsay

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:46 AM

Yes the complexities of life take over when you finally grow up - oh for the innocence of childhood! Hugs Jan xx

Constance La France

June 7, 2015 at 7:12 PM

Jan, this is quite wonderful and sweet 7 and thanks for visiting my poem, apply within

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:45 AM

Most of the entries have been for the gravestone poem so I deliberately went for a different image:-) Hugs Jan xx

Alexis Y.

June 7, 2015 at 6:24 PM

Great job Jan, You used your four lines well. I started remembering the fun times me and my siblings had at the playground immediately . Good luck in the contest:) Alexis

Jan Allison

June 8, 2015 at 1:44 AM

Thanks Alexis it is a great challenge Nette has set us:-) Hugs jan xx

Mark Trichet

June 7, 2015 at 5:32 PM

Nicely done Jan, conjures memories of playful times with my boys in grounds such as this...GL

Jan Allison

June 7, 2015 at 5:34 PM

Thanks for commenting Mark I do appreciate it - gives me memories of my own childhood and also that of my sons - hes flown the nest now:-) Hugs Jan xx

Casarah Nance

June 7, 2015 at 4:48 PM

Oh that looks like such a fun playground, I'm one of them moms that climb and slide with my lil one, and I'm the one that ends up with busted knees! Good poem for the prompt!! :)

Jan Allison

June 7, 2015 at 4:59 PM

OH you are a fallen angel again woohoo:-) I used to when david was little now I will sneak a go when no one is watching lol:-) Hugs jan xxx

Tim Smith

June 7, 2015 at 4:29 PM

My youngest daughter would love that park Jan...You got to watch? I have to participate...I am willing though : )

Jan Allison

June 7, 2015 at 4:32 PM

It is written from eyes as a child then as an adult - oh I have been on to the kiddies playground and been on the swings and little rocking toys one problem - I was the only big kid there lol - just hope none of the students from high school saw 'miss' lol :-) Hugs jan xx

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