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Brutalities of War

Atrocious affliction trembles voices of anguish Brewing vile horror in death of tomorrow Fearing for the newborn, women, and children For yesterday’s massacre killed her husband And the war-torn town screamed in agony Wrapped in rags of shattered hopes, Quivering hearts of disassembled valor Incapable to assuage a hapless mother’s sorrow. A lone crow caws atop heaps of rubble Amplifying appetency for affinity of life, Abjuring the blood thirsty hiding in disguise To rob any remnants of civility and pride From dismantled lives, walking shoeless, Upon splintered glass littered in broken paths When pigeons too left the desolate grounds. Dreams once auspicious acquiesce to nightmares Within awry silence of a burning dawn As the allure of a new day inconsolably cries When her only surviving child dies in her arms. Divinity won’t absolve them of despicable sins, That echo from playgrounds, shuttered bakery shops, And the shrieks of families mingling in market Where aroma of fresh bread once permeated air And warmth of hot tea glasses greeted the day. Wary footsteps march slowly to the other side: It’s a bit safer there where a wedding is planned-- They don’t yet know, the young groom has died, In a senseless war lost in poverty of thoughts. Written: October 15, 2019 Submitted on 1/22/2023 to: 2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 25 Poetry Contest Sponsor: Mark Toney Placed 1st: Crazy A’s poetry contest Sponsor: John Hamilton Required words in the order included in this poem: Atrocious, anguish, assuage, appetency, auspicious, awry, allure, absolve Placed 3rd: Strand choice poetry contest by Brian Strand

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Date: 2/3/2023 1:26:00 PM
Vijay, your gift for imagery rises to the top in this plaintive elegy! So glad to see this one on the winners list. Big congratulations and high fives for your win as you expose war's grim realities. Blessings of peace to you.
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Date: 1/31/2023 6:01:00 PM
Dear Vijay, your gifted pen mourns the brutalities of war with deep, soulful, and striking artistry. Such a powerful and highly affecting poem, evoking poignant heartbreaking pathos in every verse. Your last line is truly impactful! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
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Date: 1/28/2023 3:33:00 PM
Vijay, your poetry shows us the real-life consequences of the "Brutalities of war." I couldn't help but think of Ukraine and the images I see daily in the news. Your last line says it all, "In a senseless war lost in poverty of thoughts." The subject is not a favorite of mine, but your poem is. Congratulations on your win on Mile 25. There is only one more Poetry Marathon mile to run before the Qualifier's Final Placement Contest! More information about the Qualifier's Final Placement Contest will be given at the Mile 26 checkpoint.
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Date: 10/17/2020 8:00:00 PM
A perfect depiction in words, Vijay. ~Angie
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Date: 7/11/2020 3:44:00 PM
Such a magnificent piece! You vividly captured the face of war in this excellent write!
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Date: 11/23/2019 6:58:00 AM
Simply brilliant, VJ!! The human collateral imagery is soul-aching, yet expressed w/cherubic compassion. Your pen sings of godless things w/the ink voice of an avenging poetic angel. Your words are heard in heaven ... and recorded for Resurrection Day judgment. Gr EEE at poem!!! Love and best wishes for the holidays.
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Date: 11/3/2019 6:55:00 PM
I knew this one would land at the top...congratulations my friend...i am honored to stand with you....hugs
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Date: 11/3/2019 6:55:00 PM
Vijay congrats on a wonderful win!;)
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Date: 11/3/2019 6:18:00 PM
This was a dazzling write, dire the content of course, but masterful writing Vijay, I think one of your best, hard to tell lately everything you write is top notch! Congrats on a shared top win!
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Date: 10/22/2019 3:33:00 PM
Yes - in Syria, Yemen and in other places horrors are occurring daily - which is terrible. You tell a timely story with your words. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/23/2019 3:31:00 PM
You are spot on my friend..much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.
Date: 10/22/2019 12:11:00 PM
This is good... I saw you here in the write...Character Personality and Message
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Date: 10/23/2019 3:30:00 PM
Much appreciate Arturo--many thanks.
Date: 10/17/2019 12:59:00 PM
You have ably touched on some of the most ugly and cruel aspects of war, Vijay, and the imagery used is most striking. Well done for inserting the prompt words with such apparent ease, Regards // paul
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Date: 10/23/2019 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Paul--much appreciate.
Date: 10/17/2019 10:54:00 AM
What an incredible poem Vijay using the words required you produced a gem - War is hideous and torments and tortures the lives of men women and children - so many countries at present live in war torn dire situations, this magnificent poem brings out the constant terror they live in - this is a masterpiece - kudos my friend an awesome amazing write explaining so vividly the trauma these poor desperate people go through - so well penned. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
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Date: 10/23/2019 3:29:00 PM
Thank you Jennifer--you are so kind..much appreciate.
Date: 10/17/2019 6:35:00 AM
"Divinity won’t absolve them of despicable sins, " No, it certainly won't. We waste so much time on hate and war; we mortals are a sad species indeed. Well penned.
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Date: 10/23/2019 3:28:00 PM
So true..much appreciate, MLK--many thanks.
Date: 10/16/2019 4:09:00 PM
Wow! Vijay, You did a great job with the chosen words for the contest challenge. I don't understand war myself but excellent job on the topic. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a fantastic day,:-) Alexis
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Date: 10/23/2019 3:28:00 PM
Much appreciate Alexis..many thanks.
Date: 10/16/2019 1:52:00 PM
You did really well for this contest, wow.. what get use of the words.. there is noshing positive i can say about war....
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:25:00 PM
Much appreciate Silent One--many thanks.
Date: 10/16/2019 10:22:00 AM
War stains beauty.. deafens birds chirps and sweet music.. robs precious moments in time.. eradicates dreams and joys.. invokes ominous silence.. feeds the hunger of evil hearts.. You have eloquently displayed the cruelty of war in a wonderful work of Art! As always an immense pleasure reading your beautiful poetry, dear Vijay. A FAV and an outshining win in the contest.. My warmest wishes and blessings.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:25:00 PM
Your analysis is spot on, as always, Besma..so glad to read your kind thoughts..much appreciate..many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards.
Date: 10/16/2019 9:04:00 AM
You did this really well. I’m impressed.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:23:00 PM
Much appreciate Richard--many thanks.
Date: 10/16/2019 12:49:00 AM
Great use of these words ~ amazing imagery... so sad. The line about the groom clinched this, in my opinion.
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:23:00 PM
Many thanks, HT--much appreciate.
Date: 10/15/2019 10:07:00 PM
War is Everywhere!! I wish it weren't so. The Battle between right and wrong, good and evil. Light and Darkness. Will always be. You have expressed this so vividly. Your thoughts move me. ~ Brandy
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Date: 10/16/2019 3:23:00 PM
Much appreciate the kind feedback..many thanks, Brandy.
Date: 10/15/2019 5:42:00 PM
a riveting piece which marks the savagery of war, vijay... yes, i was off soup for house repair, internet blues... huggs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:22:00 PM
Glad you are back Nette..much appreciate..many thanks.
Date: 10/15/2019 10:10:00 AM
Powerful and sad write Vijay, Sadly, civilians merely become "collateral damage"
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:21:00 PM
So true--many thanks.
Date: 10/15/2019 9:11:00 AM
powerful write Vijay, this is an exquisite write...you did a great job with those given words...i am sure this one will be on top....amazing my friend! :) hugs
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:21:00 PM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate the kind remarks.
Date: 10/15/2019 8:33:00 AM
- An excellent poem with the real feelings of a brutal war, with people trying to live "morally" - Best wishes in the contest, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:20:00 PM
Much appreciate Anne-Lise..many thanks.
Date: 10/15/2019 7:52:00 AM
Best wishes. PR
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Vijay Pandit
Date: 10/16/2019 3:19:00 PM
Many thanks.
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