Brutalities of War

Atrocious affliction trembles voices of anguish 
Brewing vile horror in death of tomorrow
Fearing for the newborn, women, and children
For yesterday’s massacre killed her husband
And the war-torn town screamed in agony
Wrapped in rags of shattered hopes,
Quivering hearts of disassembled valor
Incapable to assuage a hapless mother’s sorrow.

A lone crow caws atop heaps of rubble
Amplifying appetency for affinity of life,
Abjuring the blood thirsty hiding in disguise
To rob any remnants of civility and pride
From dismantled lives, walking shoeless,
Upon splintered glass littered in broken paths
When pigeons too left the desolate grounds.

Dreams once auspicious acquiesce to nightmares
Within awry silence of a burning dawn
As the allure of a new day inconsolably cries
When her only surviving child dies in her arms.

Divinity won’t absolve them of despicable sins, 
That echo from playgrounds, shuttered bakery shops,
And the shrieks of families mingling in market
Where aroma of fresh bread once permeated air
And warmth of hot tea glasses greeted the day.

Wary footsteps march slowly to the other side:
It’s a bit safer there where a wedding is planned--
They don’t yet know, the young groom has died,

In a senseless war lost in poverty of thoughts.

Written: October 15, 2019
Submitted on 1/22/2023 to:
2022 Poetry Marathon Mile 25 Poetry Contest
Sponsor: Mark Toney


Placed 1st: Crazy A’s poetry contest
Sponsor: John Hamilton
Required words in the order included in this poem:
Atrocious, anguish, assuage, appetency, auspicious,
awry, allure, absolve
Placed 3rd: Strand choice poetry contest by Brian Strand
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Kauffman Avatar
February 3, 2023 at 1:26 PM
Vijay, your gift for imagery rises to the top in this plaintive elegy! So glad to see this one on the winners list. Big congratulations and high fives for your win as you expose war's grim realities. Blessings of peace to you.
Ashley Avatar
January 31, 2023 at 6:01 PM
Dear Vijay, your gifted pen mourns the brutalities of war with deep, soulful, and striking artistry. Such a powerful and highly affecting poem, evoking poignant heartbreaking pathos in every verse. Your last line is truly impactful! Congratulations for your excellent win in Mark's contest. Warmest wishes, my inspiring friend.. ~Susan
Toney Avatar
January 28, 2023 at 3:33 PM
Vijay, your poetry shows us the real-life consequences of the "Brutalities of war." I couldn't help but think of Ukraine and the images I see daily in the news. Your last line says it all, "In a senseless war lost in poverty of thoughts." The subject is not a favorite of mine, but your poem is. Congratulations on your win on Mile 25. There is only one more Poetry Marathon mile to run before the Qualifier's Final Placement Contest! More information about the Qualifier's Final Placement Contest will be given at the Mile 26 checkpoint.
Crabtree Avatar
October 17, 2020 at 8:00 PM
A perfect depiction in words, Vijay. ~Angie
Brul Avatar
July 11, 2020 at 3:44 PM
Such a magnificent piece! You vividly captured the face of war in this excellent write!
Robinson Jr. Avatar
November 23, 2019 at 6:58 AM
Simply brilliant, VJ!! The human collateral imagery is soul-aching, yet expressed w/cherubic compassion. Your pen sings of godless things w/the ink voice of an avenging poetic angel. Your words are heard in heaven ... and recorded for Resurrection Day judgment. Gr EEE at poem!!! Love and best wishes for the holidays.
Adams Avatar
November 3, 2019 at 6:55 PM
I knew this one would land at the top...congratulations my friend...i am honored to stand with you....hugs
Chiri Avatar
November 3, 2019 at 6:55 PM
Vijay congrats on a wonderful win!;)
Hamilton Avatar
November 3, 2019 at 6:18 PM
This was a dazzling write, dire the content of course, but masterful writing Vijay, I think one of your best, hard to tell lately everything you write is top notch! Congrats on a shared top win!
Anish Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 3:33 PM
Yes - in Syria, Yemen and in other places horrors are occurring daily - which is terrible. You tell a timely story with your words. Peace & Love Matthew Anish
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:31 PM
You are spot on my friend..much appreciate your visit and comments--many thanks.
Michael Avatar
October 22, 2019 at 12:11 PM
This is good... I saw you here in the write...Character Personality and Message
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:30 PM
Much appreciate Arturo--many thanks.
Callus Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 12:59 PM
You have ably touched on some of the most ugly and cruel aspects of war, Vijay, and the imagery used is most striking. Well done for inserting the prompt words with such apparent ease, Regards // paul
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:29 PM
Thank you Paul--much appreciate.
Proxenos Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 10:54 AM
What an incredible poem Vijay using the words required you produced a gem - War is hideous and torments and tortures the lives of men women and children - so many countries at present live in war torn dire situations, this magnificent poem brings out the constant terror they live in - this is a masterpiece - kudos my friend an awesome amazing write explaining so vividly the trauma these poor desperate people go through - so well penned. Hugs and blessings, Jennifer.
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:29 PM
Thank you Jennifer--you are so kind..much appreciate.
Kiser Avatar
October 17, 2019 at 6:35 AM
"Divinity won’t absolve them of despicable sins, " No, it certainly won't. We waste so much time on hate and war; we mortals are a sad species indeed. Well penned.
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:28 PM
So true..much appreciate, MLK--many thanks.
Y. Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 4:09 PM
Wow! Vijay, You did a great job with the chosen words for the contest challenge. I don't understand war myself but excellent job on the topic. I wish you the best of luck in the contest. Have a fantastic day,:-) Alexis
Pandit Avatar
October 23, 2019 at 3:28 PM
Much appreciate Alexis..many thanks.
One Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 1:52 PM
You did really well for this contest, wow.. what get use of the words.. there is noshing positive i can say about war....
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:25 PM
Much appreciate Silent One--many thanks.
Riabi Dziri Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 10:22 AM
War stains beauty.. deafens birds chirps and sweet music.. robs precious moments in time.. eradicates dreams and joys.. invokes ominous silence.. feeds the hunger of evil hearts.. You have eloquently displayed the cruelty of war in a wonderful work of Art! As always an immense pleasure reading your beautiful poetry, dear Vijay. A FAV and an outshining win in the contest.. My warmest wishes and blessings.
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:25 PM
Your analysis is spot on, as always, Besma..so glad to read your kind thoughts..much appreciate..many thanks. And a special thank you for the FAVE. Regards.
Lamoureux Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 9:04 AM
You did this really well. I’m impressed.
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:23 PM
Much appreciate Richard--many thanks.
There Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 12:49 AM
Great use of these words ~ amazing imagery... so sad. The line about the groom clinched this, in my opinion.
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:23 PM
Many thanks, HT--much appreciate.
Nicole Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 10:07 PM
War is Everywhere!! I wish it weren't so. The Battle between right and wrong, good and evil. Light and Darkness. Will always be. You have expressed this so vividly. Your thoughts move me. ~ Brandy
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:23 PM
Much appreciate the kind feedback..many thanks, Brandy.
Onclaud Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 5:42 PM
a riveting piece which marks the savagery of war, vijay... yes, i was off soup for house repair, internet blues... huggs
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:22 PM
Glad you are back Nette..much appreciate..many thanks.
May Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 10:10 AM
Powerful and sad write Vijay, Sadly, civilians merely become "collateral damage"
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:21 PM
So true--many thanks.
Adams Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 9:11 AM
powerful write Vijay, this is an exquisite write...you did a great job with those given words...i am sure this one will be on top....amazing my friend! :) hugs
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:21 PM
Thank you my friend--much appreciate the kind remarks.
Andresen Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 8:33 AM
- An excellent poem with the real feelings of a brutal war, with people trying to live "morally" - Best wishes in the contest, Vijay :) - hugs // Anne-Lise :)
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:20 PM
Much appreciate Anne-Lise..many thanks.
Romios Avatar
October 15, 2019 at 7:52 AM
Best wishes. PR
Pandit Avatar
October 16, 2019 at 3:19 PM
Many thanks.
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