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Brush of Time

Sad memories jagged like stones pierce through the air like bullets Traveling fast they keep making fresh wounds... reloading to aim at my spirit And for many strange reasons.... whenever they come I want to remember the burn The feel of the moment, opens the skin over and over again.... I reach out my hand, to catch them mid air... to slow down the speed keeping them near to keep them alive... to thrive in a box like old friends.... But they travel too fast..... I cannot catch them all.... And with each rushing year.....there is less of the sting I just feel the brush of the wind.... And, I wonder at times,.... just why is it so... so hard to let go of the pain? __________________________________________________________________ Submitted for Contest "Bite of the Cherry" Sponsor: Charlotte Jade Puddifoot

Copyright © | Year Posted 2010




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Date: 12/23/2015 2:58:00 AM
Congrats for your placement in the contest, Carrie! ;-)
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Date: 12/22/2015 2:22:00 AM
Brilliant take Carrie n a great win.. big congrats!
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Date: 12/21/2015 3:08:00 PM
This sent me right back in time, touched my heart with your raw emotion, trying to cope, "remembering the burn"... It's a sad place to be for sure. Congratulations on placing in contest.
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Date: 12/20/2015 8:03:00 PM
wow, so interesting the way you describe pain!! I'd never have thought of one like this. WEll done, CArrie. Congrats on our win.
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Date: 12/20/2015 6:21:00 PM
Congrats and Merry X'mas to you and your family, Carrie!
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Date: 12/20/2015 5:17:00 PM
carrie, i had no inkling this was yours, a bit different from your usual style...i particularly liked the middle part of the poem, and the poignancy of the closing lines...i was a little unsure about the similes of stones and old friends in this context, hence it placed a bit lower; i would say think carefully about the choice of simile - congrats on your win in my contest!
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Date: 12/20/2015 4:24:00 PM
Carrie, Congratulations on your wonderful win. Always ~LINDA~
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Date: 12/20/2015 3:51:00 PM
the imagery is intense from start to end Carrie - I am sure many of us wish we could let go of painful memories:-( congrats on your win:-) hugs Jan xx
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Date: 7/27/2010 6:15:00 AM
Congratulations Carrie on your win in Constance"The Rambling Poet's" contest "Gosh,That Was Fast". Love, Carol
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Date: 7/26/2010 4:47:00 PM
Beautiful as usual Carrie. congratulations on this pretty poem for the quickie contest. Love, Joyce
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Date: 7/26/2010 3:47:00 PM
Congrats Carrie on your winning entry in gosh it went so fast contest .. a wonderful entry for a fast paced contest.. enjoy another win.. with luv..
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